[i习作temp] issues8 这题没有人能写过北美范文了……凑合吧，求拍！！ [复制链接]

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发表于 2010-4-9 22:06:06 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

TOPIC: ISSUE235 - "Most people are taught that loyalty is a virtue. But loyalty-whether to one's friends, to one's school or place of employment, or to any institution-is all too often a destructive rather than a positive force."
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TIME: 00:33:32
DATE: 2010/4/9 0:26:17

Loyalty is a basic virtue that we are taught to hold up to ever since childhood. It represents some essential natures in human, like love, sympathy, devotion and dedication. In most cases loyalty is a positive motivating force in our lives, but sometimes undue loyalty to one’s friends and institution are regarded as foolish and can be destructive to people. Hence, we must base loyalty on moral standards and wise judgment.

看了北美范文后，长叹一声，觉得应该没有人能写出那个范围了
绝大多数习作MS也是对范文的immitation
Sigh……

提纲：
忠诚是有推动力的，对朋友，例三国演义……
对工作，是基本的职业道德；是强大的动力，如科学家
对国家的忠诚，例，钱学森

愚忠是不对的，会破坏的，例纳粹……（MS没有人不举他们，真可怜）
可以放弃对国籍的忠诚，如爱因斯坦（这个有争议）

In the first place, loyalty to one's friends and spouse is the basic requirement to keep friendship and love, which are the top important emotional needs of human. Ancient Chinese worriers, for example, regarded the loyalty to their friends as the cornerstone on which they built their reputation. Their loyalty is exalted in many classical novels such as the famous “The Romance of the Three Kingdoms”. Anyone who betrayed or cheated on his or her friends and lovers would not only lose their trust and love, but also respect of the society. Worse still, they have to bear the cross of disloyalty for the remaining life. Infidelity, for example, is contemned as immoral in most societies.

Furthermore, loyalty to one's employment, pursuit and institutions is kind of basic professional ethics. Journalists must be loyal to the facts; businessmen must be loyal to business secrets; and politicians must be loyalty to their electorates. Without these anticipated loyalties, the labor market and the society would relapse into chaos. Besides, loyalty ensures devotion thus motivates people to be persistent and attain significant achievements. Most great masters in arts and scientists are faithful pursuer of their interests.

Moreover, loyalty to one's country and the population is the utmost moral requirement and the proof of one's value, especially in affairs concerning national security. “Science has no boundary, but scientists have.” After arduous efforts, Qian Xuesen, the father of A-bomb in China, returned to his destitute motherland in 1955 when China was threatened by the super powers in the world. His courage and loyalty motivated generations of Chinese students abroad to come back to China and make great contributions.

However, unconditional loyalty based on total obedience without any skepticism is indeed deleterious. Loyalty does not mean blind subjection or protection. We cannot shelter a friend or lover who committed crime from legal responsibility just because we stay loyalty to them—on the contrary, sheltering them would be disloyalty and irresponsible for their own sake. We cannot work for an institution or conform to a leader that is meant for destruction or evil. It is even more important for us to abandon and reject such insanity. Take the Nazis for instance. They were fanatically loyalty to their violent leader Hitler who was obsessed in racial deracination and invasions. The misguided loyalty was used against the human race and led to the tragedy of World War two. When a country is ruled by tyrants, it is understandable for people to abjure their loyalty, like Einstein left irrational Germany for America where he could continue his pursuit for science. In conclusion, people must judge whether their loyalty to friends or institutions is rational and justifiable. If undue loyalty is destructive, maybe it is more morally loyal to abandon such loyalty.

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发表于 2010-4-10 11:17:47 |只看该作者

本帖最后由 adcolors 于 2010-4-10 11:22 编辑

瞄了一眼题目进来的，与楼主商榷：
1。Anyone who betrayed or cheated on his or her friends and lovers would not only lose their trust and love, but also respect of the society. 时态好像不对？更要紧的是好像两句的意思是反着的？

2。钱学森的例子，在中国会被认为是positive,但是美国会不会觉得是negative, and right an example of betrayal? 此处不代表个人价值观念，只是觉得这个例子在老美眼里来看或许有点争议？

3。最后一段however跟上一段之间并没有明显呼应的意思转折阿。要么在however之前你先小总结一下，不然突然跳出来一个however觉得有点不顺畅。

其实楼主的意思是不是：on one side, loyalty is highly valued in many circumstances （小总结上面几段的正面描述); on the other side, unconditional loyalty may be harmful? (开始下面的反面的阐述） [大概体会意思吧，我在抱佛脚，也不斟酌用词了]

几组对照的说法：On the one hand..., on the other hand；On one side...on the other side;
...On the flip side
...On the other side of the coin

Peace and passion.

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发表于 2010-4-10 22:00:56 |只看该作者

2# adcolors

1。Anyone who betrayed or cheated on his or her friends and lovers would not only lose their trust and love, but also respect of the society. 时态好像不对？更要紧的是好像两句的意思是反着的？

任何欺骗或背叛了朋友与爱人的人不仅会失去朋友与爱人的信任与爱，也会失去社会对他们的信任。

我知道是很拗口……意思反了吗？……

2。钱学森的例子，在中国会被认为是positive,但是美国会不会觉得是negative, and right an example of betrayal? 此处不代表个人价值观念，只是觉得这个例子在老美眼里来看或许有点争议？

…………不知道诶

另关于承上启下句子的建议很好！学习！

THX~

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