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发表于 2007-3-20 19:38:31 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

TOPIC: ARGUMENT11 - The following appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of West Egg.
"Two years ago, our consultants predicted that West Egg's landfill, which is used for garbage disposal, would be completely filled within five years. During the past two years, however, town residents have been recycling twice as much aluminum and paper as they did in previous years. Next month the amount of material recycled should further increase, since charges for garbage pickup will double. Furthermore, over ninety percent of the respondents to a recent survey said that they would do more recycling in the future. Because of our residents' strong commitment to recycling, the available space in our landfill should last for considerably longer than predicted."

In this argument, the arguer concludes that the WE's landfill could be used for considerably longer than predicted.To support the conlusion, the arguer points out residents have bben recycling twofold amount of aluminum and paper during the past two years.Besides, the arguer claims that next month the amount of material recycled should further increase as a result of charges for garbage pickup will double.Furthermore, the arguer cites that over ninety percent of the respondents to a recent survey said they would do more recycling in the future. This argument suffers from several critical fallacies.

First of all, One problem with the argument involves  the cited materials about  alumium and paper. It is unreasonable to draw any conclusions about entire kinds of material recycled based only on aluminum and paper.Depending on the total kinds of material recycled. it is entirely possible that aluminum and paper are not representative of the material recycled generally.For example, perhaps aluminum and paper are particularly small portion of the whole material recycled. In this case,while the amount of aluminum and paper recycled has become its twofold, the garbage needed to be disposed still would not decline, even increase.

second, no evidence has been offered to support the assumption that the doubled charges for garbage pickup would cause the increase of the amount of material recycled. While charges is an important contributing factor to a amount of material recycled, it is not the only such factor. Many other reasons  such as  dramatical increasing family income, larger population could just as likely account for the increase in the amount of material recycled. Laking a detailed analysis of the impacts of other factors, it would be conclude that a mount of material recycled should further increase.

In addition, another problem is that the respondents' views are not necessarily representative of the views of the residents in general. For example, because the survey has do with recycling, it makes sense that the residents that are strong commitment to recycling would more likely respond to it. The arguer provides no evidence that the number of respondents is statistically significant or that the respondents were representative of residents  in general. Lacking information about the randomness and size of the survey's sample, the arguer cannot make a convincing argument based on that survey.

To sum up, the conclusion that WE landfill should be last for considerably longer than predicted lacks credibility . To make the argument  more convincing, the arguer should make an overall investagation for the recycling material. Besides,the arguer should provide suffient evidents supporting the conclusion that charges for garbage pickup doubling leads residents to recycle more. additionally, the arguer would have to make a broad survey to the intention of recycling.

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发表于 2007-3-20 20:04:36 |只看该作者

开头跟新东方跟北美范文有点像...把题目变说法讲一遍...但是好像说不需要讲那么多...简单说下就行...

Depending on the total kinds of material recycled. it is entirely possible 这句啥意思啊?

第二段有几个拼写错哈...Many other reasons such as dramatical increasing family income, larger population could just as likely account for the increase in the amount of material recycled. 这句有点问题...最好把你举的例子分析一下...

三个攻击点挺好的...

个别语法错误

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