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independent: agree or dis: observing or studying animals can help us to understand human nature（周六作业）

All the kinds of animals in this world have their own nature. Although human is advanced animal, human is a kind of animal, too. Human's nature has to be digged out by human themselves. How can people do this in modern society? In my opinion, observing and studying animals really can help us. I will illustrate my reasons as follows.

First of all, some kinds of animals have the same ancestor as human beings. Their gene and nature must have something in common with human. It is not hard to conclude that observing and studying them is helpful to understand human nature. For example, gorilla is such kind of animal. According to the evolution theory of Darwin, human is evolved from gorilla. As we can see, gorilla's body structure is very like that of human. Both of them have two arms, two legs, a face, two eyes, one nose, and one mouth and so on. Gorilla also has fingers which can help them eating as human. Moreover, they use their fingers as tools like human, too. Also, it contributes to the research of human's origin. Thus, observing and studying animals’ physical structure can help human to understand more about body's structure and potential reflection.

In addition, even some animals don't help to understand human nature; their original nature can influence human beings. As we know, animals have a variety of characteristics; many of these characteristics are good and worth human to learn. For example, dog is a kind of animal with loyalty, such a quality is what we really need today. As long as you provide food to it, it will always accompany with you. A recent survey has found that this characteristic of dogs is natural because dogs have a special gene. Also, we know that a lot people have such a good quality naturally. On this point, animal and human are uniform. Another example is fox; we know that fox is famous for its dishonesty. Yet, this characteristic also is a quality of human. A lot of people is indeed dishonesty to everybody they meet for their own interests. Therefore, many animals nature also reflect on human. Observing and studying the animals nature is really the formation and correction of human nature.

To sum up, I think it is necessary and important for human to observe and study animals around us. These animals are friends of human. They also play an indispensable role in our environment. Observing and studying from them not only help us to understand human nature but also improve our world.

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发表于 2008-8-16 23:14:17 |只看该作者

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有进步, 遣词造句上继续努力哦，坛子里最近不少牛人，可以观摩下他们的作文，我也在学习:loveliness:

independent: agree or dis: observing or studying animals can help us to understand human nature（周六作业）

All the（去掉） kinds of animals in this world have their own nature. Although human is advanced animal, human is a kind of animal, too. Human's nature has to be digged out by human themselves. How can people do this in modern society? In my opinion, observing and studying animals can really help us. I will illustrate my reasons as follows.

First of all, some kinds of animals have the same ancestor as human beings. Their gene and nature must have something in common with human. It is not hard to conclude that observing and studying them is helpful to understand human nature. For example, gorilla is such kind of animal--这句话语义重复，for example可去掉. According to the evolution theory of Darwin, human is evolved from gorilla. As we can see, gorilla's body structure is very like--similar to that of human. Both of them have two arms, two legs, a face, two eyes, one nose, and one mouth and so on. Gorilla also has fingers which can help them eating as human. Moreover, they use their fingers as tools like human, too. Also--Thus, it contributes to the research of human's origin. Thus--In short, observing and studying animals’ physical structure can help human to understand more about body's structure and potential reflection. ---这里连词用得有点乱，显得层次不清

In addition, even some animals don't help to understand human nature---这句话直接跟你的大观点矛盾了，可改为 though the physical structres of some animals are not the same as human; their original nature can influence human beings. As we know, animals have a variety of characteristics; many of these characteristics are good and worth human to learn. For example, dog is a kind of animal with loyalty, such a quality is what we really need today. As long as you provide food to it, it will always accompany with you. A recent survey has found that this characteristic of dogs is natural because dogs have a special gene. Also, we know that a lot people have such a good quality naturally. On this point, animal and human are uniform---have commonplace. Another example is fox; we know that fox is famous for its dishonesty. Yet, this characteristic also is a quality of human. A lot of people is indeed dishonesty to everybody they meet for their own interests. Therefore, many animals nature also reflect on human. Observing and studying the animals nature is really the formation and correction of human nature.

To sum up, I think ---去掉 it is necessary and important for human to observe and study animals around us. These animals are friends of human. They also play an indispensable role in our environment. Observing and studying from them not only help us to understand human nature but also improve our world---。。。.

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发表于 2008-8-18 17:28:55 |只看该作者

小错误有点多，这篇文章是在不好写，容易写的空洞，我刚刚写完这篇，就是这种感觉：（
All the kinds of animals in this world have their own nature. Although human is an advanced animal, human is a kind of animal, too. Human's nature has to be digged out by human themselves. How can people do this in modern society? In my opinion, observing and studying animals really can help us. I will illustrate my reasons as follows.

AFirst of all, some kinds of animals have the same ancestor as human beings. Their genes and nature must have something in common with human. It is not hard to conclude that observing and studying them is helpful to understand human nature. For example, gorilla is such kind of animal. According to the evolution theory of Darwin, human is evolved from gorilla. As we can see, gorilla's body structure is very like that of human. Both of them have two arms, two legs, a face, two eyes, one nose, and one mouth and so on. (这个例子不够确切）Gorilla also has fingers which can help them eating as human.（这句贴切） Moreover, they use their fingers as tools like human, too. Also, it contributes to the research of human's origin（起因后果是否反了？还是我对题目的理解有问题？）. Thus, observing and studying animals’ physical structure can help human to understand more about body's structure and potential reflection. 留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USAEh;xC+B$r9p BC

tIn addition, even some animals don't help to understand human nature; their original nature can influence human beings. As we know, animals have a variety of characteristics; many of these characteristics are good and worth human to learn. For example, dog is a kind of animal with loyalty, such a quality is what we really need today. As long as you provide food to it, it will always accompany with you. A recent survey has found that this characteristic of dogs is natural because dogs have a special gene. Also, we know that a lot people have such a good quality naturally. On this point, animal and human are uniform. Another example is fox; we know that fox is famous for its dishonesty. Yet, this characteristic also is a quality of human. A lot of people is indeed dishonesty to everybody they meet for their own interests. Therefore, many animals nature also reflect on human. Observing and studying the animals nature is really the formation and correction of human nature.（学习了正反一起说）
To sum up, I think it is necessary and important for human to observe and study animals around us. These animals are friends of human. They also play an indispensable roles in our environment. Observing and studying from them not only help us to understand human nature but also improve our world.bbs

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