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10.01.05
题目：ISSUE136 - "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."
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日期：2010/1/5 19:17:13

The author asserts that the absence of choice is very rare. I agree with the assertion that there are choices existing in our daily life.

First of all, our life is full of all kinds of choices which brighten our colorful life. On the way to grow up, everyone has many choices. For instance, one has to choose proper high school or university according to his or her grades and abilities. One has to choose the major which he or she is interested when he or she enters a college. When he graduates from the university, it is time for him to choose his career. In our working process, we also have many choices. Sometimes we cannot do whatever we want to do because we live in a society, so it is time to choose what should be done. Thanks to these choices, we can have such a colorful life.

However, there are some people who always complain that there is no choice at all in their life. From the point of philosophy, absence of choice is greatly attributed to subjective decision and judge or absence of experience. Some people have no choice because they are not willing to choose one which does not meet their interests. While set in a position of disadvantages, humans are apt to become lack of calmness and make extreme decisions and they are blind to a slight beam of hope when they meet the difficulties. Therefore, choices always exist only when one would like to choose instead of ignoring other unpleasant choices for them.
Furthermore, choices exist in our daily life and play an essential role in our life, so we need to make favorable choice which can make contribution to ourselves and to our society. We can make better ideas through choices and cherish more about our present. As for a country, good choices can promote the development of a society and a country. Take the development of economy policy in China for instance, from the planned economy to open-up policy, the thriving of China proves that good choices really play favorable impacts on a country.

Last but not least, according to the importance of choices, we should take lots of aspects into account when we make choices and pay considerable attention to this issue. If one makes a wrong choice, it will affect his life even the whole family. Some criminals make the wrong choice which brings misery to his family. Therefore, if one wants to make a good choice, he should consider much such as the society values, the family situation and personal life.

From what has been discussed above, we can safely arrive in the conclusion that choices exist everywhere in our society and they play essential part for ourselves and even for the whole society. Therefore, we should take into account lots of aspects to make the final decision which will be beneficial to ourselves and the society.

题目：ARGUMENT162 - A recent study shows that people living on the continent of North America suffer 9 times more chronic fatigue and 31 times more chronic depression than do people living on the continent of Asia. Interestingly, Asians, on average, eat 20 grams of soy per day, whereas North Americans eat virtually none. It turns out that soy contains phytochemicals called isoflavones, which have been found to possess disease-preventing properties. Thus, North Americans should consider eating soy on a regular basis as a way of preventing fatigue and depression.
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In the argument, the arguer concludes that North Americans should consider eating soy on a regular basis as a way of preventing fatigue and depression. To support his conclusion, he cites that a recent study shows that people living in North America suffer 9 times fatigue and 31 times more depression than people in Asia while Asias eat 20 grams of soy per day. He also points out that soy contains phytochemicals called isoflavones, which have been found possess disease-preventing properties. However, the argument is flawed in several aspects.
First of all, we need to know the reliability of the study. The arguer only mentioned that a recent study showed that people living on the continent of North America suffer 9 times more chronic fatigue and 31 times more chronic depression than do people living on the continent of Asia. However, we don’t know how many people were involved in the study and how the study actually worked. Therefore, the arguer should provide more evidence to make the study persuasive.

Secondly, the arguer failed to provide the reasons why people of North America suffer 9 times more fatigue and 31 times more depression. Perhaps, the study just surveyed some people who just lost their jobs, so they felt depressed. Or perhaps they made the survey right after the whole weekdays, so they felt tired after a long week.

Thirdly, the arguer did not cite any evidence about the efficient of eating soy. Even if soy contains phytochemicals called isoflavones, which have been found to possess disease-preventing properties, the arguer cannot conclude that eating soy can prevent fatigue and depression. We need more evidence to assure us that soy is really efficient in preventing fatigue and depression. It is really unpersuasive when the arguer mentioned that one chemical element in soy can prevent some disease.

In sum, to make the argument more persuasive and reasonable, the arguer should provide more details about the study, such as how many people were in the study and what their job is. Moreover, the arguer should analyze the reason why people suffer more fatigue and depression in North America, and he should provide more evidence that prove soy can prevent fatigue and depression.