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发表于 2009-12-16 15:33:58 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

由于第一次写时间严重超时将近1小时，字数也超了不少，下次一定要注意了！多谢各位童鞋猛拍！谢谢了！
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It’s better to watch serious movies that help people think than to watch movies that could amuse and entertain people.

Nowadays there are so many different kinds of movies to watch in our daily life, including comedy movies and tragedy ones, or documentary movies and sci-fi ones and any other kinds. But which kind of movies do you like better and why do you prefer to watch it among these movies? Some people like to watch serious movies because they reckon that such movies can help them think, and some people like to watch movies better that can amuse and entertain them. So
different people have their own different choices when they encounter this situation. But in my point of view, i would prefer to watch movies which enable people to amuse and entertain people.

In the first place, watching movies which are able to amuse and entertain people is extremely effective way to relax ourselves. It is reported that it is quite good for our health to laugh often. As you see, there are pretty many entertaining ingredients and jokes in the comedy movies, which can bring us lots of laughter and make us happy and relaxed in everyday life. Meanwhile, we can learn some popular actor's or actress's lines from the movies, and when we spend quality time with our family members and friends, we can speak some funny lines or jokes which we memorize from the amusing movies. Of course there is no doubt that the effect is extraordinarily obvious and good when we hear the funny lines or jokes. Also, the comedy movies can adjust the atmosphere and make it more harmonious and relaxing even when we are in embarrassed situation. In addition, most of us definitely feel very stressed and exhausted due to the high pressure from the overloaded work and study ever day, so it can't be better to watch amusing or entertaining movies to relax ourselves and relieve the pressure after work.

Secondly, the comedy movies can always make us in good mood and even alleviate pain due to illness. When watching amusing movies, we feel very exhilarated and have a quite good mood because of adequate comic materials in them, including funny lines and inflated appearances and performances and so on. It is well known that life will become so wonderful and nice that we keep in high spirit and become more optimistic, and even love the braw life better and cherish it when we are in very highly good mood brought by the comedy movies. In that case, we will deal with problems and conquer difficulties and handle life more easily. A research report, published on the American medicine journal Heart recently, after surveying two groups of volunteers that one group were restricted to watch serious and movies such as Saving Private Ryan and the other group were limited to watch comedy movies, indicated that the latter group who watched amusing movies, have more intensive blood circulation than the former group because the total intake of oxygen was increasing when they watched comedy movies. Also, the joy and concentration brought by the amusing movies enable people to distract the attention from the pain caused by illness, consequently it can alleviate the suffering.

Admittedly, there are a lot of profound meanings in the serious movies, perhaps we would think over some deep topics such as life and death and so on after we watch the serious movies. In that case, we can learn some wisdom and philosophies of life, but we have to acknowledge that the process of watching serious movies is awfully oppressive and heavy, and it often make audiences weep or depressed.

To sum up, from what we have discussed above, it can be concluded that watching amusing movies can help people to relax and keep in good mood and even alleviate the pain due to illness. Therefore, i prefer the view that it is better to watch movies that could amuse and entertain people than to watch serious movies that help people to think.

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发表于 2009-12-16 21:21:57 |只看该作者

非常感谢miaomiao7095的细致的点评，感动中！~~~~~:)
我觉得你的点评很中肯客观，我第一次写能遇到你这么高水平的童鞋来批改很是幸运！
你指出的错误我都仔细看过了，很有用，争取改正！语法还有待进一步加强，词汇还是用的不好，你讲到的一些绝对词的慎用很有价值，再次感谢！
网上童鞋们的文章我也看了不少，但是在文章中讲述自己，即第一人称的故事作为文章的论据ETS会不会不太认可，不具有普遍性，是不是名人的例子更好些？但名人的事情记得的又不是很多，有时候很难找到恰当的，第一次写完之后感觉就是文章论据有点空，这点自己也感觉到了，你也指出来了，希望在这方面与我分享一些你的经验！谢谢你宝贵的时间！
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发表于 2009-12-17 08:31:15 |只看该作者

问的是你同意不同意什么观点。我想大概用自己的例子，最能打动人了~我也从中学习到了不少~谢谢两位！

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