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TOPIC: ARGUMENT153 - The following is from an editorial in the Midvale Observer, a local newspaper.

"Ever since the 1950's, when television sets began to appear in the average home, the rate of crimes committed by teenagers in the country of Alta has steadily increased. This increase in teenage crime parallels the increase in violence shown on television. According to several national studies, even very young children who watch a great number of television shows featuring violent scenes display more violent behavior within their home environment than do children who do not watch violent shows. Furthermore, in a survey conducted by the Observer, over 90 percent of the respondents were parents who indicated that prime-time television-programs that are shown between 7 p.m. and 9 p.m.-should show less violence. Therefore, in order to lower the rate of teenage crime in Alta, television viewers should demand that television programmers reduce the amount of violence shown during prime time."
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TIME: 00:40:00
DATE: 2010/1/23 11:27:31

In this article the editor recommends shrinking quantity of the violence show during the peak hours. To support his recommendation, the editor point out following facts involving this issue, (1) the teenage crime increases alongside with the mounting show in violence; (2) a multi-national study about the children violent scenes; and (3) a survey concerning the parents' attitude towards violent show. However, taking a deeper perspective through the surface, we could find several logical unconvincing point and the problems in the two survey.

To begin with, the author, merely basing on the facts that since 1950s TV become common in every family and the mounting number of the teenage crime and shows involving violence, establishes the causal relationship between the increasing of teenage crime and growing violent show on television. Beside these evidences, the author provides no further information and details about the two things' development. It is entirely possible that the paralleling increasing is just a coincide due to the undermining of public security, or perhaps the rate of teenage crimes is the results of the larger proportion children accounted for in the population. In short, lacking the necessary information for this kind of increasing the editor can not convince me the validity of casual relationship between the two event.

As for the two survey that article cites, both the reliability and representativeness is open to doubt. For the first multi-national survey, the author inform us nothing about the structure and number of the respondents, therefore the same situation may not be found in other regions or other groups.
No one can guarantee that this result presented by the survey could properly apply to the rest of world, perhaps this is just a regional phenomenon and other regions or groups may experience the decreasing number of teenage crime. Besides, the very young children' behavior in violence can hardly say a word for the teenage crimes. Equally, the survey conducted by the Observer would surfer from the representative problems because of the lacking details about the respondents. Without improving the foregoing surveys, which aiming
at provide support for editor's recommendation, I can not be fully convinced that violent show directly influence our teenagers' criminal behavior.

Even if the editor can substantiate all the captioned points in his editorial successfully, the author too much simplifies the solution for such problems just through his recommendation, reducing the amount of violence shown during prime-time. The author overlooks the possibility that teenage is capable
to such shows in other time besides the peaking-hours. Also, teenagers may gain access to this kind of resource from other approaches other than television. If these are the case, then the recommendation for lowering amount of violent shows during prime time would be not enough and has little influence for cutting down the teenage crimes.

In conclusion, the recommendation is not well bolstered due to the absence of certain information and flaws in the surveys. To better illustrate his recommendation the author is suggested to provide more details about the parallel increasing of the teenage crimes and violent TV shows. Equally, more accurate data should be provide to certificate the validity and representativeness of the two survey.

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