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TOPIC: ISSUE104 - "It is primarily through formal education that a culture tries to perpetuate the ideas it favors and discredit the ideas it fears."
WORDS: 316 TIME: 01:59:17 DATE: 2010-1-31 16:37:12

I can't agree with the statement that culture perpetuate its favorate ideas primarily through formal education.The prevailing ideas of culture is preserved not only by means of education, but also by means of others.

To some extend,education do serve as a mean by which culture perpetuate its prevailing ideas.Students in school learn values,knowledges and principles from the textbooks.However, this is only part of the sight in school.Sdudents can also challenge the ideas accumulated and preserved on the textbook, and put forward their own perspective on certain subjects.This is especially true in college and university studies.As a matter of fact,college and universities specialize in encouraging and nurturing students' skills of critical analysis and the ability to understand opposite viewpoints.So it is not easy for culture to perpetuate its favorate ideas through education,especially through high education.

Education is merely one of the means by which culture perpetuates its favorate ideas and discredits the ideas it fears.There are also other means that culture can use for doing so.The most significant mean in those except education should be the media.Broadcast television and newspapers, as two main sorts of media, have great influence on public.They not only can bring great sufferings to a person by publishing details of his private life,they can even overthrow a government.Another media with increasing influence is Internet.With the fast development of technology, Internet provide us great information about the world.There are huge numbers of articles ,debates, facts and figures, and any other information you want, on the Internet.The influence of media is so great that it do serve as an important mean by which culture perpetuate its favors and discredits the ideas it fears.

In summary,education is one of the means that culture uses for perpetuating its favors and discreditting the ideas it fears.Another mean that culture uses for doing so is media,and in my opinion,media plays a more important part in doing so than education.

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发表于 2010-2-1 18:50:08 |只看该作者

占楼~去改文~

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发表于 2010-2-1 21:05:46 |只看该作者

改好了改好了~小黑久等了~~~

I can't agree with the statement that culture perpetuate its favorate（favorite
） ideas primarily through formal education. The prevailing ideas of culture is preserved not only by means of education, but also by means of others.主题句~（开头简单明确）
To some extend,education do serve as a mean by which culture perpetuate its prevailing ideas.Students in school learn values,knowledges and principles from the textbooks.However, this is only part of the sight in school.（个人觉得这里转折语气无需这么强烈，用meanwhile打头的句子就可以了，强调同时性）Sdudents（拼写错误） can also challenge the ideas accumulated and preserved on the textbook, and put forward their own perspective on certain subjects.This is especially true in college and university studies.（这句与后一句意思重复了，保留后面的就行了）
As a matter of fact,college and universities specialize in encouraging and nurturing students' skills of critical analysis and the ability to understand opposite viewpoints.（拼写错误viewpoints）So it is not easy for culture to perpetuate its favorate ideas through education,especially through high education。

Education is merely one of the means by which culture perpetuates its favorate ideas and discredits the ideas it fears.There are also other means that culture can use for doing so.The most significant mean in those except education should be the media.Broadcast television and newspapers, as two main sorts of media, have great influence on public.They not only can bring great sufferings to a person by publishing details of his private life,they can even overthrow a government.Another media with increasing influence is Internet.With the fast development of technology, Internet provide us great information about the world.There are huge numbers of articles ,debates, facts and figures, and any other information you want, on the Internet.The influence of media is so great that it do serve as an important mean by which culture perpetuate its favors and discredits the ideas it fears.(这段论述了其他的途径。但。我只看到了小黑论述了媒体可以传递大量信息，但是没有看到明确的论述提到媒体是如何传播思想的。试着举一些生活中的例子，将这部分充实起来)
如果还能举出一到两个传播思想的途径我觉得会更好，再仔细归纳一下吧~
In summary,education is one of the means that culture uses for perpetuating its favors and discreditting the ideas it fears.Another mean that culture uses for doing so is media,and in my opinion,media plays a more important part in doing so than education.（这一句话可以展开一段论述，放在前面。）

不错哦~看完小黑的，我觉得我偏题了~

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发表于 2010-2-2 11:31:30 |只看该作者

修改后的issue

TOPIC: ISSUE104 - "It is primarily through formal education that a culture tries to perpetuate the ideas it favors and discredit the ideas it fears."
WORDS: 423
TIME: 01:18:05
DATE: 2010-2-2 11:15:19

I can't totally agree with the statement that culture perpetuates its favorite ideas and discredits the ideas it fears primarily through formal education, in two respects. First, education may turn against the ideas culture favors. Second, the prevailing ideas of culture is preserved not only by means of formal education, but also by means of media.

To some extent, education does serve as a mean by which culture perpetuates its prevailing ideas and discredits the ideas it fears. Students in schools are taught to behavior in this way, and not in that way, and to accept some specific ideas and refuse other certain concepts. It is in this way that culture perpetuate its favorite concepts and discredits the ideas it fears. However, in schools, it may also develop some ideas that culture fears. Students in schools may challenge the ideas accumulated and preserved on the textbook, and put forward their own perspective on certain subjects. This is especially true in college and university studies. In fact, college and universities specialize in encouraging and nurturing students' skills of critical analysis and the ability to put forward new viewpoints which may oppose the culture's favorite ideas. As a result, education do serve as a mean by which culture perpetuates its favorite ideas, and at the same time, education may also turn against the ideas culture favors.

What is more, culture can perpetuate its favorite ideas and discredit the ideas it fears not only through formal education but also through media. Media, as known, has great power in influencing people's ideas. Broadcast television and newspapers, as two main sorts of media, have great influence on public. They not only can bring great sufferings to a person by publishing details of his private life, they can even overthrow a government. They can lead people's ideas to where they want. Another kind of media with increasing influence is Internet. With the fast development of technology, Internet provides us great information about the world. More and more people obtain information through Internet. On Internet, there are huge numbers of facts, figures, articles and debates, all of which influence people's ideas significantly. The influence of media is so great that it do serve as an important mean by which culture perpetuate its favors and discredits the ideas it fears.

In summary, education do serves as the mean that culture uses for perpetuating its favors and discreditting the ideas it fears, however, education may also turn against the ideas culture favors. What is more, media also plays an important role in delivering the ideas of culture.

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