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Issue112
"Some educational systems emphasize the development of students' capacity for reasoning and logical thinking, but students would benefit more from an education that also taught them to explore their own emotions." 一些教育体系强调学生逻辑推理思维能力的发展，但是那些教学生们探究自身情绪的教育对学生们才更有好处。

1：:情绪教育在现在生活中越来越重要，我们不能忽视。
2：只重视情绪的教育而淡化逻辑推理能力的发展易限制学生们的思考问题的深度与全面性。
3：我们应该结合两种教育体系，针对不同阶段的孩子采取对其中一个体系为主的教育

Systems of education always is debate and crucial in our life, which varies considerable in deferent district and even change gradual with the time going. Now some hold that systems of education of exploring emotion play a greater role than those of fostering reasoning and logic thinking. For me, I suppose that both of them contain the merit itself and adjust to person based on the age of people.

It is deniable that emotional education becomes more and more important in our life. People have to face all kinds of social elements in their daily, the same to growing students. The circumference of our contact is much bigger than our home. Parents or sister won’t be the only people we meet, teachers, student, pedestrian or even strangers come to our life. So, people would react diversity from getting along different people and handing unlike things. Happy, angry, sorrow, or joyful performance can totally embody in above. In case people show negative emotion or behavior in dealing with those. It may form a unimaginable impact on him and his future. Or even bring hurt to others. One of the obvious examples is the shooting occurrence happening in campus. According to a survey, there are continuous shooting in campus in this year. Then we should pay more our attention to emotional education.

Meanwhile, we can’t give up reasoning and logic education to students. Logic thinking is irreplaceable position in teaching. More and more Educational Institute emphasize the capacity of independent thinking. And logic thinking is indispensible in this process. Without it, student may lack deep and comprehensive of problems that they come cross. Suppose there is no more logic training in lessons and student were surrounded by maxim created by precursor. What would the children be? What would the society be? What would our next generation be? If so, we can’t pursue emotional education blindly and neglect the importance of logic education.

Finally, we should design a schedule for different age student on the basis of combining logic education program to emotion strategy if we are desirable to create a perfect education system for student. Because young people protrude distinctness in deferent stage. For childhood, they are full of happiness and their brains seem to secret treasury waiting us to open. Logic thinking is more useful than emotion education at this time. However, logic and emotion have the opposite function when they become juvenile. As we all know, they become dependent in their thinking and show a period of rebelling. So, emotion work is crucial for them in order to lead them to a healthy and happy growth. It is depends when they in college. It is enough to make decision by themselves.

In sum, I have to concede the importance both of them, but it is not simple to raise a child to adult fro facet of
the logic and emotional education, also it is not just staying in school. Parents play a much more role in it. We just hope each children can enjoy fully love from their parents and grow healthy. (512)

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Systems of education always is debate and crucial in our life, which varies considerable in deferent district and even change gradual with the time going. Now some hold that systems of education of exploring emotion play a greater role than those of fostering reasoning and logic thinking. For me, I suppose that both of them contain the merit itself and adjust to person based on the age of people.

It is deniabl （undeniable） that emotional education becomes more and more important in our life. People have to face all kinds of social elements in their daily, the same to growing students. The circumference of our contact is much bigger than our home. Parents or sister won’t be the only people we meet, teachers, student, pedestrian or even strangers come to our life. So, people would react diversity from getting along different people and handing unlike things. Happy, angry, sorrow, or joyful performance can totally embody in above. In case people show negative emotion or behavior in dealing with those. It may form a unimaginable impact on him and his future. Or even bring hurt to others. One of the obvious examples is the shooting occurrence happening in campus. According to a survey, there are continuous shooting in campus in this year. Then we should pay more our attention to emotional education.

Meanwhile, we can’t give up reasoning and logic education to students. Logic thinking is irreplaceable position in teaching. More and more Educational Institute emphasize the capacity of independent thinking. And logic thinking is indispensible in this process. Without it, student may lack deep and comprehensive of problems that they come cross. Suppose there is no more logic training in lessons and student were surrounded by maxim created by precursor（这句话语法上是不是有问题啊，我总觉得很怪，建议到群里讨论讨论，Blair的功底不错，可以向她讨教讨教）. What would the children be? What would the society be? What would our next generation be? If so, we can’t pursue emotional education blindly and neglect the importance of logic education.

Finally, we should design a schedule for different age student on the basis of combining logic education program to emotion strategy if we are desirable to create a perfect education system for student. Because young people protrude distinctness in deferent stage. For childhood, they are full of happiness and their brains seem to secret treasury waiting us to open. Logic thinking is more useful than emotion education at this time. However, logic and emotion have the opposite function when they become juvenile. As we all know, they become dependent in their thinking and show a period of rebelling. So, emotion work is crucial for them in order to lead them to a healthy and happy growth. It is depends when they in college. It is enough to make decision by themselves. （可以用犯罪低龄化，校园枪击案举举例子）

In sum, I have to concede the importance both of them, but it is not simple to raise a child to adult fro facet of the logic and emotional education, also it is not just staying in school. Parents play a much more role in it. We just hope each children can enjoy fully love from their parents and grow healthy.

总体思路很好。可以感觉到lz对这篇文章用了心，大部分应该都是自己的思路。
但是还缺了点例子。
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Supposeing that there was no more logic training in lessons and student were surrounded by maxim created by precursor 确实有误不知这样是否对校园枪击案想到了但好像忘写了

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发表于 2010-11-28 11:00:20 |只看该作者

Issue112
"Some educational systemsemphasize the development of students' capacity for reasoning and logicalthinking, but students would benefit more from an education that also taughtthem to explore their own emotions."
一些教育体系强调学生逻辑推理思维能力的发展，但是那些教学生们探究自身情绪的教育对学生们才更有好处。
1：:情绪教育在现在生活中越来越重要，我们不能忽视。
2：只重视情绪的教育而淡化逻辑推理能力的发展易限制学生们的思考问题的深度与全面性。
3：我们应该结合两种教育体系，针对不同阶段的孩子采取对其中一个体系为主的教育
Systemsof education, which varies considerablyin deferent districts and even changes gradually with time going, isalways a crucial debate l in our life(第一句给你改了一下). Now some hold that systems ofeducation of exploring emotion play a greater role than those of fosteringreasoning and logic thinking. For me, I suppose that both of them contain themerit itself and adjust to person based on the age of people.
Itis deniable(undisputable)that emotional education becomes more and more important in our life. Peoplehave to face all kinds of social elements in their daily, the same to growingstudents. The circumference of our contact is much bigger than our home. Parentsor sister won’t be the only people we meet, teachers, student, pedestrian oreven strangers come to our life. So, people would react diversity from getting along with different people and handling unlike things. Happy, angry, sorrow, or joyfulperformance can totally embody inabove(什么意思,不懂). In casepeople show negative emotion or behavior in dealing with those. It may form aunimaginable impact on him and his future. Or even bring hurt to others. One ofthe obvious examples is the shooting occurrence happening in campus. Accordingto a survey, there are continuous shooting in campus in this year. Then weshould pay more our attention to emotional education.
Meanwhile,we can’t give up reasoning and logic education to students. Logical thinking isirreplaceable position(去掉) inteaching. More and more Educational Institute emphasize the capacity ofindependent thinking. And logic thinking is indispensible in this process.Without it, student may lack deep and comprehensive of problems that they comecross. Suppose there is no more logic training in lessons and student weresurrounded by maxim created by precursor. What would the children be? Whatwould the society be? What would our next generation be? If so, we can’t pursueemotional education blindly and neglect the importance of logic education.
Finally,we should design a schedule for studentsof different ages on the basis of combining logic education program and emotion strategy if we are desirous(注意和desirable的区别) to createa perfect education system for student. Because young people protrude distinctnessin deferent stage. For childhood, they are full of happiness and their brainsseem to secret treasury waiting us to open. Logic thinking is more useful thanemotion education at this time. However, logic and emotion have the oppositefunction when they become juvenile. As we all know, they become dependent intheir thinking and show a period of rebelling. So, emotion work is crucial forthem in order to lead them to a healthy and happy growth. It is depends whenthey in college. It is enough to make decision by themselves.

Insum, I have to concede the importance both of them, but it is not simple toraise a child to adult fro facet of
the logicand emotional education, also it is not just staying in school. Parents play amuch more role in it. We just hope each children can enjoy fully love fromtheir parents and grow healthy. (512)
论证还是比较清晰的,就是基本语法错误太多,楼主要在这个方面多下点功夫,有些句子因为语法或拼写问题让人看不懂,影响对全文的理解.我改了部分问题,希望楼主注意一下.另:建议楼主多在群里面交流, 让大家改你的文章,一个人改确实很累.楼主加油!!

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