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As the development of the society, the education has become one of the most important factor of the success of a country. But there is a growing debate about whether the government should focus its budget more on children education or on universities. This essay will explore the importance of the education in university.
Admittedly, the elementary education plays an important role in children's life as it teaches the basic knowledge and skills of learning. If one intends to study easier in university, he must have a good habit of learning, or he can't handle the heavy workload and won't get a good grade. Also it teaches young children the moral standards which help them build a complete personality that can decide their attitude towards things they meet in daily life.

However it doesn't mean that the young children education is more important than the university education. As we all know, the knowledge we learn in universities decide our future. What kind of job will we do, how much salaries will we get and which people will we get along with are all based on universities education. For instance, my brother was good at math when he was young, but he learned music in the university and so, now he is a music producer who write songs for singers and working in a music company.

The most important is, the cost of universities is higher than elementary education. Many instruments used in experiments cost a lot and they need a great amount of money to pay out before they can get a result. And they may invite famous professor to teach experiences and succssful men to give speeches. To give students a good education in the university is evidently more expensive than the young children education.

The education is an important part in the progress of the development of society, and how to use the resources well is a hot topic among people. Though elementary education is important, the universities education needs more focus of governments.

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As the development of the society, the education has become one of the most important factor of the success of a country. But there is a growing debate about whether the government should focus its budget more on children education or on universities. This essay will explore the importance of the education in university.

Admittedly, the elementary education plays an important role in children's life as it teaches the basic knowledge and skills of learning. If one intends to study easier in university, he must have a good habit of learning, or he can't handle the heavy workload and won't get a good grade. Also it teaches young children the moral standards which help them build a complete personality that can decide their attitude towards things they meet in daily life.

However it doesn't mean that the young children education is more important than the university education. As we all know, the knowledge we learn in universities decide our future. What kind of job will we do, how much salaries will we get and which people will we get along with are all based on universities education. For instance, my brother was good at math when he was young, but he learned music in the university and so, now he is a music producer, who write songs for singers, working in a music company.

The most important is, the cost of universities is higher than elementary education. Many instruments used in experiments cost a lot and they need a great amount of money to pay out before they can get a result. And they may invite famous professor to teach experiences or succssful business men to give speeches. In order for the students to get a good education in the university, it's evidently more expensive than the young children education.

The education is an important part in the progress of the development of society, and how to use the resources well has become a hot topic among people. As fore me, though elementary education is important, the universities education needs more focus by governments.

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5.9 独立

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is often not a good idea to move to a new city or a new country because you will lose old friends.

Nowadays, a growing number of people are moving to other cities or countries for a better job and live environment. As the increase of the number, the topic of moving out has become more and more popular. Many people say that it is not a good idea to move to a new condition because you will lose old friends. But in fact, I don't think moving means losing friends. A true friendship won't be lost, moreover, we can contact with our friends in many other ways.

First of all, a friendship won't fade no matter how far is it between you and your friends. Friends face a lot of difficulties together, they help each other without selfness. Also, they have fun together and enjoy the same achievement. These friends won't leave you even you are not in the same place. Like my friends, we went to different cities to study, but we never thought about losing this friendship. When at vacation, we would meet each other and had dinner together. Not too much words, can be the best gift. So you don't have to worry about losing friends if they are your true friends.

Moreover, as the development of technology, we can communicate with our friends in a lot of ways. Such as talking on the phone, spending time on the internet and sending e-mails. There are many ways to keep contact with your friends if you want. Hence, there is no reason to worry about losing friends because of lack of contact. Like my best friend Zhang, who is studying in the university of the USA, we often talk on the phone and we never feel we are far from each other.

In the modern society, we may have to move to other cities or countries because of many reasons, like the employment pressure, the rising of housing price and other things. Sometimes we can't decide by ourselves. I think real friends will understand you and help you to deal with your problems.

In a word, sometimes moving is necessary, and in this condition, there is no reason to worry about losing friends beacause they are your strong back up and besides, there are many means to contact with each othe even you are not in the same place.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is often not a good idea to move to a new city or a new country because you will lose old friends.9 a" r+ R, ], e. x; u6 ?
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Nowadays, a growing number of people are moving to other cities or countries for a better job and live environment. As the increase of the number, the topic of moving out has become more and more popular. Many people say that it is not a good （wise）idea to move to a new condition because you will lose old friends. But in fact, I don't think moving means losing friends. A true friendship won't be lost, moreover, we can contact with our friends in many other ways.
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0 o' }- j% u7 D5 |First of all, a friendship won't fade no matter how far is it between you and your friends. Friends face a lot of difficulties together, they help each other without selfness（a friend in need is a friend indeed）. Also, they have fun together and enjoy the same achievement. 可以具体说一下都有什么共同的经历。你如高考前一起复习功课，互相鼓励等。These friends won't leave you even you are not in the same place. Like my friends, we went to different cities to study, but we never thought about losing this friendship. When at vacation, we would meet each other and had dinner together. Not too much words, can be the best gift. So you don't have to worry about losing friends if they are your true friends.. C- s5 z* o0 w1 p9 p/ n* {  {

( M4 V" \( L" ^- YMoreover, as the development of technology, we can communicate with our friends in a lot of ways. Such as talking on the phone, spending time （chating）on the internet and sending e-mails. There are many ways to keep contact with your friends if you want. Hence, there is no reason to worry about losing friends because of （去掉吧）lack of contact（ing）. Like my best friend Zhang, who is studying in the university of the USA, we often talk on the phone and we never feel we are far from each other.这段可以说因为交通的便利，虽然朋友们居住在不同的城市但是在假期的时候可以互相去不同的城市旅游，这样不仅可以增加友谊还可以游山玩水，大家在一起分享不同的经历
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In the modern society, we may have to move to other cities or countries because of many reasons, like the employment pressure, the rising of housing price and other things. Sometimes we can't decide by ourselves. I think real friends will understand you and help you to deal with your problems.
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) ?% m6 R: k( P' {  b) F5 L/ wIn a word, sometimes moving is necessary, and in this condition, there is no reason to worry about losing friends beacause they are your strong back up and besides, there are many means to contact with each othe even you are not in the same place.

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5,10 Forsuccessful development of a country, should a government focus its budget moreon very young children education rather than on universities? 09 11 07NA( m7 _, [9 a& t8

As the development of the society, the education has become one of the most important factors to the success of a country. But there is a growing debate about whether the government should focus its budget more on children education or on universities. Maybe many people would say that the young children education is more important, but I doubt it. This essay will explore the importance of the education in university.

Admittedly, the elementary education plays an important role in children's life as it teaches the basic knowledge and skills of learning. Also, it teaches young children the moral standards which help them build a complete personality that can decide their attitude towards things they meet in daily life.

However it doesn't mean that the young children education is more important than the university education. As we all know, the knowledge we learn in universities decide our future. Apparently, what we learn in universities is more master and more irreplaceable than the things we learn when young. What kind of job will we do, how much salaries will we get and which people will we get along with are all based on universities education. For instance, my brother was good at math when he was young, but he learned music in the university and so, now he is a music producer, who write songs for singers, working in a music company.

The most important is, the cost of universities is higher than elementary education. Many instruments used in experiments cost a lot and they need to invest a great amount of money before they can get a result. Moreover, sometimes they can’t get a equal result because some unexpected situations may just lead to failure. But if they don’t spend this money, they would never have any chance to get the expected achievements. And they may invite famous professor to teach experiences or successful business men to give speeches. In order for the students to get a good education in the university, it's evidently more expensive than the young children education. Hence, from this perspective, the university education is more eager to have the governments’ investment.

The education is an important part in the progress of the development of society, and how to use the resources well has become a hot topic among people. As for me, though elementary education is important, the universities education needs more focus by governments.

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5,11 Do you agree or disagree that with the following statement: It's more important for the government to spend money to build art museums and music performance center than to build recreational facilities(such as swimming pool, playground) 10 01 22NA.

As the quality of people's life advancing, a growing number of people begin to pay attention to other things after work, like listening some music, going to museums and doing some sports. Then there is a growing debate about wether the government should focus on art facilities such as art museums and music centers or on recreational facilities like swimming pools and playgrounds. In my point, though art museums and music halls can inspire people, building recreational facilities are more essential.

Although there is an increase of population like to visit museums or enjoy a concert in their free time, the recreational facilities are more essential to the general public. To most people, art is something lofty and even elusive, which take a great amount of cultural knowledge and fine taste to truly appreciate. For instance, appreciating an art work, you may know the history at that time and the background of the artist, or you can not understand the meaning of this achievement. But doing sports is much easier therefore more popular among the general public. Swimming, kicking football, playing basketball or pingpong, there is always a type fits you, and they are easy to learn.

Moreover, art facilities are much more expensive to establish. A modern concert hall often requires elaborate decoration, comfortable seats, exquisite lighting and top-notch sound rendering system. With the same amount of investment, the government can probably build more than a dozen of playgrounds with inexpensive but easy-to-use exercising equipment.

Furthermore, once a art museum or a music hall is established, it usually charges a high admission fee in order to sustain its daily operation and to fund ambitious projects or performances. But in the meantime, they are turning away many genuine art lovers who are not able to afford such an expensive visit. By comparision, public recreational facilities run by the government are almost free for everyone who want to have fun exercising and so they are more accessible for those people with limited finacial means.

Therefore, what the goverment should do is to try to make art more available for most people. Before it, the goverment should place more funding on building recreational facilities than building art facilities.

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5,10 Forsuccessful development of a country, should a government focus its budget moreon very young children education rather than on universities? 09 11 07NA( m7 _, [9 a& t8 6 y! t7 _5 b/ b; w
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As the development of the society, the education has become one of the most important factors to the success of a country. But there is a growing debate about whether the government should focus its budget more on children education or on universities. Maybe many people would say that the young children education is more important, but I doubt it. This essay will explore the importance of the education in university.
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Admittedly, the elementary education plays an important role in children's life as it teaches the basic knowledge and skills of learning. Also, it teaches young children the moral standards which help them build a complete personality that can decide their attitude towards things they meet in daily life. % ]+ k: o/ }" T8 {, D1 e

2 t' f- A+ \! ~& s) o+ FHowever it doesn't mean that the young children education is more important than the university education. As we all know, the knowledge we learn in universities decide our future. Apparently, what we learn in universities is more master and more irreplaceable than the things we learn when young. What kind of job will we do, how much salaries will we get and which people will we get along with are all based on universities education. For instance, my brother was good at math when he was young, but he learned music in the university and so, now he is a music producer, who write songs for singers, working in a music company. （可以解释一下因为哥哥学校的音乐老师一流，器材先进，有许多去听演唱会的机会，这些使得哥哥成功。而学校的这些都是要拿钱来支撑的，所以。。。）
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( `5 M% G  c, s+ zThe most important is, the cost of universities is higher than （that in）elementary education. Many instruments used in experiments cost a lot and they need to invest a great amount of money before they can get a result. Moreover, sometimes they can’t get a equal result because some unexpected situations may just lead to failure. But（去掉） if they don’t spend this money, they would never have any chance to get the expected achievements. And they may invite famous professor to teach experiences or successful business men to give speeches. In order for the students to get  a good education in the university, it's evidently that the university education is more expensive than the young children education. Hence, from this perspective, the university education is more eager to have the governments’ investment.5 D" W% B& G. n- f- }

+ C. b. C; D3 `, Z9 [  JThe education is an important part in the progress of the development of society, and how to use the resources well has become a hot topic among people. 感觉这句话出现在开头会好点，结尾不需要了。只是总结下观点就可以了 As for me, though elementary education is important, the universities education needs more focus by governments.
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发表于 2011-5-12 11:34:38 |只看该作者

5.11独立已改好 As the quality of people's life advancing, a growing number of people begin to pay attention to other things after work, like listening some music, going to museums and doing some sports. Then there is a growing debate about wether(whether) the government should focus on art facilities such as art museums and music centers or on recreational facilities like swimming pools and playgrounds. In my point, though art museums and music halls can inspire people, building recreational facilities are more essential.
Although there is an increase of population(people) like to visit museums or enjoy a concert in their free time, the recreational facilities are more essential to the general public. To most people, art is something lofty and even elusive, which take(takes) a great amount of cultural knowledge and fine taste to truly appreciate. For instance, appreciating a (piece of) art work, you may know the history at that time and the background of the artist, or you can not understand the meaning of this achievement. But doing sports is much easier therefore more popular among the general public. Swimming, kicking football, playing basketball or pingpong, there is always a(one不定冠词好些) type fits you, and they are easy to learn.

Moreover, art facilities are much more expensive to establish. A modern concert hall often requires elaborate decoration, comfortable seats, exquisite lighting and top-notch sound rendering system. With the same amount of investment, the government can probably build more than a dozen of playgrounds with inexpensive but easy-to-use exercising equipments.

Furthermore, once a art museum or a music hall is established, it usually charges a high admission fee in order to sustain its daily operation and to fund ambitious projects or performances. But in the meantime（不应该用转折吧这是因果）, they are turning away many genuine art lovers who are not able to afford such an expensive visit. By comparision, public recreational facilities run by the government are almost free for everyone who want to have fun exercising and so they are more accessible for those people with limited finacial means.
Therefore, what the goverment should do is to try to make art more available for most people. Before it, the goverment should place more funding on building recreational facilities than building art facilities.

通过对比论述很好很有力
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Nowadays, a growing number of people are going outside to find better jobs and live environments, and some(个人认为是不是用or会更好些？) just intend to gain more knowledge and broaden horizons. Recently, a group of people say that those who go outside are more successful and happier than people who stay in villages. From my perspective, I doubt it. Going outside doesn’t mean being successful, and may not get more happiness.

Admittedly, the world outside is indeed more colorful and high-class than in villages. Advanced technology, high-level education attract a large number of students who expect to gain knowledge and more employment positions provide（应该是provided 然后再加for the）people who have a hard time finding works （or）excellent chances. What’s more, more entertainment places seem to add more fun.
However, going outside is not always the same as being successful. Maybe the work conditions are better than in villages, in the meanwhile, the requirements are higher. Take my brother Zhang as an example. He was excellent when he was at school, he got best high school education and studied in the best university. After graduation, a famous company in our city invited him to work for them and would like to give him the best treatment. But he refused because he managed to go to larger city and found better job. However, as the intense competition outside, he couldn’t endure it(可以去掉) and eventually failed. So if you don not have a good ability, going outside is useless.

Furthermore, most people who go outside are not happy at all because of the great pressure. They are running day and night and they seldom have free time. Like my uncle who is working in Beijing, he gets up at six every morning and go to sleep at two in night. He has less than five hours to rest, not to mention having some fun in bars. The same situation happens on most staffs like my uncle. In contrast, people in villages live a more comfortable life than those who work outside. They have more free time walking around and lying on the grass ground, watching the various shapes of clouds or beautiful stars hanging in the sky. Apparently they enjoy a happy life.

May be going outside is more attractive, but as above, it is more difficult to get success and happiness than living in villages.

文章逻辑不错，语言也不错，个人建议句型变换可以多些，倒装句什么的可以多用些~
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