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3月6日  独立  It was easier to achieve a success in the past than it is today.  09/10/10 cn


Nowadays, we hold the high-techniques, establish the convenient transportation system, we also have the perfect information networks, all of these make our lives easy and comfortable. I do not agree that it was easier to achieve a success in the past than it is today.


First of all, no matter past or nowadays, for success, people have different definitions. For some people, success is a peaceful and normal life without starving and poverty. But on the other hand,people who have a steady character may want to achieve a perfect career and become a well-known person. For the people whose goal is not so high, that may be easy to get the success. By contrast, people whose aims are too much and too high, to achieve success must pay their full energy, time and painstaking work to get it, and sacrifice a lot things, such as holiday, money or sleeping. Success for them is really a hard process.


Moreover, in the past, people lack sufficient knowledge or theories system and physical conditions at the same time. people in the past who studied on some particular fields knowledge might be during a long and painful exploration process, due to the limited knowledge what people have held. At the same time, because of the pool physical conditions, such as transportation system and post system,etc, their activities were limited in a relatively small area. There are less chances to contact outside world, and rarely have academic communications with the people who studied the same field, Like they were during a long term to found that earth like a circle, we are going around the sun.


Last, nowadays people hold the high-techniques and establish a convenient transportation, they give people tremendous benefits. news, information and new techniques can spread out of the world quickly through the Internet. we can search the wide range of information fast and total(后改成full-scale). People can change their major or interest once their find they are not really proper to study that. But, people who live past did not have these advantages in that period. A lot of people use their whole life to achieve one success and some of them we even never know,


To sum up, depend on the definition of success, and the environment the people who live in the past, it is hard to say success is easier to get in the past than today.


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Do you think people should buy things made in their own country, even the price is higher than same things made somewhere else. 09/12/04 NA

Some of people may hold the view that only buy things which made in their country shows a loyalty to their country, and protect the national industry. But for my opinion, I do not agree that people should buy things made in their own country, even the price is higher than same things made somewhere else.

To begin with, things are whether made in their own country is not a proper standard for consumption. To live a good life, people should learn personal financial manage, which reflect how to be a wisely consumer. The price or the place where the things made are not the all elements which we should consider to buy things. Others elements are really needed to consider either, such like the quality, the style whether we like, and comparing with other same kind of products, occasionally, we may want to try something new because of our curiosity. So as the claim, that is not the only one important aspect we need to consider.

If like the claim that people only buy things only in their own country, even the price is higher, that would be threaten the economical growth of their country and  decrease the power of industrial competition with other countries. If people in their country never buy the import stuff, the national industry would be never improve their products and cause that their industry develop slowly, while the imports would also no competitive ability in their country, but in turn, as long days past, their national industry would either lost the position in the world because of the slow development of their own industry.

At last, it would be cause a lot of issues on personal finance if people do such way as the claim. If serious, that would be even become into the national financial problems, threaten the bank or insurance system. The level and quality of people’s life are different in one country. people can not afford high price life that would only can borrow money from the bank, if too many cases like that, the finance would be damage in their country.

To sum up, no matter from the aspect of consumption theory, national economic or personal finance, people should not only  buy things in  their own country, even higher price than made elsewhere.

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Movies and televisions should always show audience good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished. 09/10/17na


Movies and televisions are art works or entertainment programs, they are made for audience. But like the statement said, if all the movies and televisions always show audience a same contents, people would feel boring and rarely see it. Not too soon, this kind of art works may disappear from our lives. So, I do not agree that movies and televisions should always show audience good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished.

Movie is a complicate art form, it contains lots of elements and have different categories, the statement only suggests a social rules or a sensible thinking of most of people’s.  Indeed, movie base on the real life. however, it is not equal the real life, they also have different kinds or styles, like comedy or tragedy, cartoon, movie base on particular book, documentary, etc. All of these demonstrate that movie must have different tones or contents. Moreover, movies base on the novels would be reflect the writers thoughts, and for some of, the director want to form their own style, like the light setting, the script, even related the culture background or their beliefs.

second, maybe the movie shows people a real life, but, people is complicate and so is life, not a single person is purely evil or nice, this complicate character also bring into movies. So it can not like the statement said so absolute. Like many independent movies, they show the normal daily life on people’s, throughout the it, no one and things are fully wrong or right, you even can not find a bad person during the whole movie.

last, sometimes, the director may purposely show people a tragedy end, for giving people a huge space to reflect and think some social issue, like family, relationship, friendship, etc. The famous movie <dacing in the dark> shows people a pity and adorable mother whose whole life was suffered the unfair and painstaking, died for a series misfortunes and misunderstanding. Such movies present the tragedy destiny for people thinking.

So, due to these complicate features, it is impossible that movies and televisions should always show audience good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished.

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People would be happier if they had fewer possessions.  09/12/19na


Think about it, what makes you happy last time, a holiday with your family, the smile of your son, or a delicious dinner your wife made? For me, most happy memories are the simple relaxed life time, even not related how much possession I have. So I agree the statement that people would be happier if they had fewer possessions.


Much possession requires people spend more energy and time to manage and maintain it, as the time goes, unconsciously, much possession amplifies people’s ambition on money and physical conditions, and brings high stress. So, that is not a happy life. Of course, possession can satisfy people’s physical desire, normally, people always plot for maintain or increase their possession once they gain much. Following that, there would be no stopping socials and working out, dragging people into a circle which seems never stop. After a long time, one day when people wake up, people will suddenly realize that they are living in a high pressure life which is full of fearing lost and plotting. Is that the ideal happiness life we desire? I think the answer is no.


A truly happy life for me must have more liberty and time to do the things I can put my heart, true interest and emotion on, to give a creative and happy life. Nothing about how much possession. For instance, there is a very famous cake shop which named “awfully” in singapore, their chocolate cake taste like in  heaven. The boss of the shop used to be lawyer, but according to he said, the life of be a lawyer is not the dream life and unhappy experience for him, which bring him too much depress and pressure,  the real interest for him is making a chocolate cake. So he quit the lawyer’s career and started a cake shop. Finally he gain a big success of his career and a creative lovely happy life for himself. So sometimes, leaving yourself some space and time, following your own interest, until on day, you would realize that you have pick up a lot of happy that may have long been lost in your life, but nothing about how much you have possessed.


Like what I said above, happier life come from the true willing inside your heart, follow your true interest you will gain more happy and must be something else, even you possess fewer.

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实在抱歉，因为网络问题，这么晚才上传，见谅。
3月6日  独立  It was easier to achieve a success in the past than it is today.  09/10/10 cn
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Nowadays, we hold the high-techniques, establish the convenient transportation system, we also have the perfect information networks, all of these make our lives easy and comfortable. I do not agree that it was easier to achieve a success in the past than it is today.


First of all, no matter past or nowadays, for success, people have different definitions. For some people, success is a peaceful and normal life without starving (是不是用starvation更好点？) and poverty. But on the other hand, people who have a steady character may want to achieve a perfect career and become a well-known person. For the people whose goal is not so high, that may be easy to get the success. By contrast, people whose aims are too much and too high, to achieve success must pay their full energy, time and painstaking work to get it, and sacrifice a lot things, such as holiday, money or sleeping. Success for them is really a hard process（感觉表述上有点重复，使用变化的表达方法或词会好点）."（） b2 k* A2 D: [* s
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Moreover, in the past, people lack sufficient knowledge or theories system and physical conditions at the same time（好像这样表达不太好）. people in the past who studied on some particular fields knowledge might be during（experience） a long and painful exploration process, due to the limited knowledge what (that) people have held. At the same time, because of the pool (poor?) physical conditions, such as transportation system and post system, etc, their activities were limited in a relatively small area. There are less chances to contact outside world, and rarely have (had) academic communications with the people who studied the same field, Like they were during a long term to found that earth like a circle, we are going around the sun（be during有这种用法吗？如果把during a long term去掉，这句话表达不正确。还有整句话意思不是很清晰）.) P3 V4 u; F: Z6 h+ J6 Y
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Last, nowadays people hold the high-techniques and establish a convenient transportation, they（which） give people tremendous benefits. news, information and new techniques can spread out of the world quickly through the Internet. we can search the wide range of information fast and total(后改成full-scale). People can change their major or interest once their find they are not really proper to study that. But, people who live past did not have these advantages in that period(和who live in the past 重复). A lot of people use their whole life to achieve one success and some of them we even never know（是不是最好能举具体点的例子来说明？）,

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To sum up, depend on the（different） definition of success, and the (tough) environment the people who live in the past, it is hard to say success is easier to get in the past than today
（论证不是很充分，我感觉需要加一些具体的例子。就像第三段最后说的那个例子就好点。还有表达上需要进一步提高。加油！）

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为神马说我木有标题？3.9

090912cn  Should children spend most time playing and studying or required to help the family with household chores like cooking and cleaning?


I strongly agree that children should require to help the family with household chores. It develops children’s learning ability, makes children more independence and responsibility, inspire them have passionate about life and work.

First, housework makes children more independence and develops their learning ability. Housework is an unavoidable part of people’s life, it is best to learn as early as possible, especially like the scientist said, 4 to 5 years old is the best and fast stage to learn things. Take my nephew for example, from he was old enough to keep things, my sister taught him to keep things by himself, like books or toys in the room. Although that was a terrible beginning, after few times, we found he had strong ability to learn and pretty interest on keeping stuff, if you can patiently teach him. Until now, he likes to help my sister to share housework and feel that he is a important part of the family. Even through this, he has a strong skill on organization, observation and a clear way to solve problems, like he can very clearly and logically tell the things happened in the kindergarten, and he know exactly which part of toy didn’t work.

Moreover, housework cultivates the sense of responsibility. According to a report, children are sensitive, if you let them join in the family daily work, they would show strong responsibility on family. Take my nephew’s again, my sister let him to arrange the vegetable and fruit in fridge and always take him to the supermarket, showing him which fruit and vegetable are good for health and people must eat. After that, reminding parents to buy the necessary food become one of him task. As my sister said, he feel have responsibility on family health and never choose food to eat, unlike some children on his age.

Last, housework gives us passionate about life and remote people’s psychological health. Through the housework children gain, they can found their own value which makes them love their life time. According to a research of Harvard university, they traced to observe a group of people for 20 years, when they grow up, research shows the children who love to do housework have more income than the one who dislike, and lower unemployment rate, crime rate, divorce rate.

In sum, I believe the idea of children should require to help the family with household chores is correct, it create a healthy, lovely and independent children.
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