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发表于 2011-2-28 22:12:21 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lose of old friends?

The debate in the society over the phenomenon that it is often good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lose of old friends has already provoked wide attention. Some who advocate it contend that under no circumstance can anyone survive in the society without friends around. Others who object to it claim that takeing convenient transportation system, advanced communication tools and true friendship into consideration, it is not a bad thing to move to a new city or a new country. As far as i am concerned, i am inclined to the side of latter view.

To begin with, rapid and convenient transportation facilities ,say, planes, subway, motorcoach train, can really contribute to maintain the friendship between old friends, even through there is millions of meters between them. For instance, my senior high students, Alex, has been my friend for nearly 7 years. However, we are educated in different universities which are located different cities. Even if there is a distance, we can depend on developed transportation system, motor train set, to meet at least once a month. Current transportation facilities make the world smaller so that bonding among old friends from different cities and even countries is much easier. After paying for the tickets, people will spend a few hours to get the destination where their old friends dwell in. Accordingly, people who move to a new city or a new country will not feel the lose of old friends because of convenient and rapid transportation system.

The reason above alone, however, can not adequately explain why it is often a good thing to move a new city or a new country because of the lose of old friends. Advanced communication tools is also a significant factor contributed to my perspective. As is all known, the development of technology is so rapid that long-range communication, namely, telephone, the Internet, is not as difficult as it was. When we miss our old friends who inhabit the same place, we can rely on telephone to give them our respects, even send a greeting face to face through the Internet. Provided that there was not advanced communication tools or facilities, the opportunity of losing old friends would increase.

Although the two reasons i mentioned above are convincing, perhaps the primary reason is true friendship between old friends will never break down. No matter where old friends are and no matter where old friends are going, the friendship will exist in the our mind. distance can just separate from us in space, nevertheless, distance can make old friends more bonding on their minds. For example, my father and his old battle conpanion have not seen each other for since he moved to USA in 2006.
However, my father misses him all the time due to the true friendship existing between them. When my father went to the airport to welcome his old friend last summer, both of them are so excited that burst into tears. If old friends have true friendship, we never lost our old friends wherever we leave for.

From given reasons discussed above, we can safely come to the conclusion that moving a new city or a new country can not change the relationship between old friends owing to convenient transportation system, advanced communication tools and true friendship.

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TPO8

The reading passage states that many events of Chevalier's memoir was distorted and fake in order to make his life more attractive. However, in the lecture, the professor argues that Chevalier' memoir is, by and large, accurate and true.
The first point the reading mentions is that it was impossible for Chevalier to borrow a great deal of money from others, if he was really wealthy. On the contrary, the professor asserts that he borrowed money from merchants because he did not possess the actual cash, which can not indicate he was not very rich enough. He need sell his property first while he wait to the arrival of cash.
The next point brought up is that describing these conversations accurately which occured many years ago is what is impossible. However, the professor argues that writing down conversation's content what he could remember immediately ensures that he could refer to it when he was composing his memoir.
Finally, in contrast to the reading's argument that it is more likely that his friends' offer a bribe to make Chevalier get out of prison, the professor says that not only could other prisoners' more powerful friends not free them by offering bribe, but there is an evidence about repairing the ceiling of prison where Chevalier lived in after his escaping.
In conclusion,the points in the lecture contrast with the reading. It demonstrates the theory of the reading is in doubt.

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1# Ivan1989
独立作文，楼主写得非常好，俺十分佩服！
以下是一点点小小的意见

The debate in the society over the phenomenon that it is often goodthing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lose of old friendshas already provoked wide attention. Some who advocate it contend that under nocircumstance can anyone survive in the society without friends around. Otherswho object to it claim that takeing convenient transportation system, advancedcommunication tools and true friendship into consideration, it is not a badthing to move to a new city or a new country. As far as i am concerned, i aminclined to the side of latter view.

To begin with, rapid and convenient transportation facilities ,say,planes, subway, motorcoach train, can really contribute to maintain thefriendship between old friends, even through there is millions of metersbetween them. For instance, my senior high students(classmate?),Alex, has been my friend for nearly 7 years. However, we are educated indifferent universities which are located different cities. Even if there is adistance, we can depend on developed transportation system, motor train set, tomeet at least once a month. Current transportation facilities make the worldsmaller so that bonding among old friends from different cities and evencountries is much easier. After paying for the tickets, people will spend a fewhours to get the destination where their old friends dwell in. Accordingly,people who move to a new city or a new country will not feel the lose of oldfriends because of convenient and rapid transportation system.

The reason above alone, however, can not adequately explain why it isoften a good thing to move a new city or a new country because of the lose ofold friends. Advanced communication tools is also a significant factorcontributed to my perspective. As is all known, the development of technologyis so rapid that long-range communication, namely, telephone, the Internet, isnot as difficult as it was. When we miss our old friends who inhabit the same place(different places?), we can rely ontelephone to give them our respects, even send a greeting face to face throughthe Internet. Provided that there was not advanced communication tools orfacilities, the opportunity of losing old friends would increase.

Although the two reasons i mentioned above are convincing, perhaps theprimary reason is true friendship between old friends will never break down. Nomatter where old friends are and no matter where old friends are going, thefriendship will exist in the our mind. distance can just separate from us inspace, nevertheless, distance can make old friends more bonding on their minds.For example, my father and his old battle conpanion have not seen each otherfor since he moved to USA in 2006.
However, my father misses him all the time due to the truefriendship
existing between them. Whenmy father went to the airport to welcome his old friend last summer, both ofthem are so excited that burst into tears. If old friends have true friendship,we never lost our old friends wherever we leave for.

From given reasons discussed above, we can safely come to theconclusion that moving a new city or a new country can not change therelationship between old friends owing to convenient transportation system,advanced communication tools and true friendship.

整个作文感觉理由很充分，论证的也非常好。用词方面也很好。就是这一点：“it is often a good thing to move a new city or a new country becauseof the lose of old friends.”我不太懂。搬去新地方是件好事一般不是因为会失去朋友或者保持友谊，而是由于其他原因，比如工作之类。那么在这里提到good thing是不是有点不大相关？

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第一句话it is often ........ 少写一个not，嘿嘿，不好意思！

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不好意思晚了
The reading passage states that many events of Chevalier's memoir was（were） distorted and fake(faked) in order to make his life more attractive. However, in the lecture, the professor argues that Chevalier' memoir is, by and large, accurate and true.* s3 o# a9 I7 T/ G! G1 b' F; F0 B
The first point the reading mentions is that it was impossible for Chevalier to borrow a great deal of money from others, if he was really wealthy. On the contrary, the professor asserts that he borrowed money from merchants because he did not possess the actual cash, which can not indicate he was not very rich enough. He need sell his property first while he wait to the arrival of cash.
. o# X+ s2 B8 ?0 d/ Q& ~. ]The next point brought up is that describing these conversations accurately which occured many years ago is what is impossible.(句型混乱。。。) However, the professor argues that writing down conversation's content what he could remember immediately ensures that he could refer to it when he was composing his memoir.
# X5 h& E' R2 Y6 qFinally, in contrast to the reading's argument that it is more likely that his friends' offer a bribe to make Chevalier get out of prison, the professor says that not only could other prisoners' more powerful friends not free them by offering bribe, but there is an evidence about repairing the ceiling of prison where Chevalier lived in after his escaping.
9 a$ J+ s7 f) ~0 q! T7 w7 yIn conclusion,the points in the lecture contrast with the reading. It demonstrates the theory of the reading is in doubt.
点都找出来了，但是语言上过分追求用长句，很多地方读起来显得罗嗦不流畅

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2.28 revised

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TPO10 综合写作

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本帖最后由 Ivan1989 于 2011-3-3 21:35 编辑

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独立写作：The best way to improve education is to raise teachers’ salaries.

Contemprarily, how to improve education provokes wide attention. Some people hold the opinion that raising teachers' salary is the best way in which government can improve education, because increasing teachers' salary can stimulate teachers to make efforts on teaching. From my perspective, nevertheless, raising teachers' salary is not best method to improve the quality of education. Because enough money can to some degree contribute to teachers' nature of laziness. Communicating with teachers, strengthening cooperation with other academic institution and improving teaching facilities are good ways to increase the quality of education.

To begin with, frequent communication between teachers and students plays a significant role in increasing the quality of education. There is no doubt that communicating with teachers can strengthen our relationship. In effect, there is to some degree a teaching gap between professors and students. In the process of communicating, not only do we understand each other very well, but we can build strongly emotion as well. Accordingly, Students are willing to learn knowledge from their teachers, while teachers are eager to devote what they have to their students. If there is no communication between students and teachers at all, the quality of education will go worse to worse.

Among the reasons that i think cannot be ignored is the one that strengthening cooperation with other academic institutions can contribute to improvement of education. By collaborating with other schools, the presidents of colleges or universities can realize that their own institutions actually are existing disadvantages and weaknesses which they never used to recognize these drawback. However, it is not the end of world. We can take advantage of our academic partners' facilities and technology to solve these problems. Through collaborating with other colleges and universities, education is to a large extent improved and increased. Not only do colleges or universities cope with expensive equipments and facilities, but students can have opportunity to learn in a better academical atmosphere.

Although the two reasons i mention above are convincing, the primary reason is that purchasing advanced teaching facilities is also a good way to increase the quality of teaching. As is all known, Teaching facilities are necessity to students as well as professors. If colleges and universities are not equipped with teaching facilities, it is hard to imagine how these schools' education seem like. Being outfitted with advanced infrastructures and facilities can indeed make better the quality of education. For instance, my senior high school, in fact, were not even equipped with computers and screens when i was high school student. What teachers need to instruct have to be written on the blackboard.therefore, a number of time were occupied by writing on the blackboard. It can easily imagine that the efficiency of education is rather low. However, the education method are changed dramatically when i came back to my senior high this semester. Teachers make use of computers to complete instruction. Time which was used to write has been saved to a large degree. The efficiency of instruction increase twice than it was.

From what have been discuss above, we can safely come to a conclusion that there are many more efficient methods to increase the quality of eduction, including communicating with teachers, strengthening cooperation with other academic institution and improving teaching facilities. Schools should take all of these ways into consideration to improve education, rather than simply raise the salary of teachers.

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2009.4.3- The best way to improve education is to raise teachers’ salaries.
Contemprarily（拼写错了）, how to improve education provokes wide attention. Some people hold the opinion that raising teachers' salary is the best way in which government can improve education, because increasing teachers' salary can stimulate teachers to make efforts on teaching. From my perspective, nevertheless, raising teachers' salary is not （少了定冠词）best method to improve the quality of education. Because enough money can to some degree contribute to teachers' nature of laziness. Communicating with teachers, strengthening cooperation with other academic institution and improving teaching facilities are good ways to increase the quality of education.
To begin with, frequent communication between teachers and students plays a significant role in increasing the quality of education. There is no doubt that communicating with teachers can strengthen our relationship. In effect, there is to some degree a teaching gap between professors and students. In the process of communicating, not only do we understand each other very well, but we can build strongly emotion as well. Accordingly, Students are willing to learn knowledge from their teachers, while teachers are eager to devote what they have to their students. If there is no communication between students and teachers at all, the quality of education will go worse to worse.

Among the reasons that i think cannot be ignored is the one that strengthening cooperation with other academic institutions can contribute to improvement of education. By collaborating with other schools, the presidents of colleges or universities can realize that their own institutions actually are existing disadvantages and weaknesses which they never used to recognize these drawback. However, it is not the end of （少定冠词）world. We can take advantage of our academic partners' facilities and technology to solve these problems. Through collaborating with other colleges and universities, education is to a large extent improved and increased. Not only do colleges or universities cope with expensive equipments and facilities, but students can have opportunity to learn in a better academical atmosphere.

Although the two reasons i mention above are convincing, the primary reason is that purchasing advanced teaching facilities is also a good way to increase the quality of teaching. As is all known, Teaching facilities are necessity to students as well as professors. If colleges and universities are not equipped with teaching facilities, it is hard to imagine how these schools' education seem like. Being outfitted with advanced infrastructures and facilities can indeed make better the quality of education. For instance, my senior high school, in fact, were not even equipped with computers and screens when i was high school student. What teachers need to instruct have to be written on the blackboard.therefore, a number of time were occupied by writing on the blackboard. It can easily imagine that the efficiency of education is rather low. However, the education method are changed dramatically when i came back to my senior high this semester. Teachers make use of computers to complete instruction. Time which was used to write has been saved to a large degree. The efficiency of instruction increase twice than it was.

From what have been discuss above, we can safely come to a conclusion that there are many more efficient methods to increase the quality of eduction（拼写错了）, including communicating with teachers, strengthening cooperation with other academic institution and improving teaching facilities. Schools should take all of these ways into consideration to improve education, rather than simply raise the salary of teachers.（最后一段总结得不错！！）
总的来说是不错的！！逻辑性比较强，但是字数过多了吧！希望注意一下拼写咯！！考试这样扣分很不值得！加油！！！！！

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7# Ivan1989
已经改好，感觉有些问题，共同努力！

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6# Ivan1989
你昨天的作业是TPO10吧，我已经修改了

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发表于 2011-3-7 21:49:47 |只看该作者

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发表于 2011-3-8 21:03:27 |只看该作者

3.7 独立

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3.9Teacher should or not talking their social or political views to student in the class.

Contemporarily, the debate in the society over the phenomenon wheather teachers should talk their social or political views to student in the class or not has provoked widespread attentions. Some people who hold the positive view claims that by doing so, it is good for students to understand the whole society widely. Others who have negative points argue, nevertheless, argue that social or political affairs are not what we students are concerning about. As far as i am concerned, i am inclined to the side of the latter view.

To begin with, one issue which make me bolster my viewpoint is this kind of behaviour has a dramatically negative effect on the quality of education. There is no doubt that if teachers come out with his own perspectives about social or political matter, they have to occupy the limited teaching time. Accordingly, the time which is used to educate professionally will be shorten. The level of professional education will decrease vertically.

The reason above, however, can not explain adequately why i do not stand up for this phenomenon. Causing the misleading of social or political affairs to students is also a significant factor contributing to my inclination. The social or political perspectives which teachers come up with may be wrong or subjective. The possibility of inaccuracy is really high. If teachers convey their social or political views, the students will consider them correct and follow teachers' thought to behave so that they do not understand what they do and what they think are incorrect.

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