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发表于 2011-8-16 20:02:09 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

下文为新G issue54 ，鄙人的习作一篇，括号内为改过的内容。
另附提纲：
1.文学是与其他专业迥然不同的的一门学科，公司需要的是专业牢固的人。
2.阅读文学通常来说是一种休息而非研究和学习。
3.如果学生本身就不喜欢文学，学校又强制学习，反而会适得其反。
4.在专业牢固的情况下，阅读这些东西确实可以为未来求职加分。

TOPIC: ISSUE54 - In order to become well-rounded individuals, all college students should be required to take courses in which they read poetry, novels, mythology, and other types of imaginative literature.
WORDS: 432
TIME: 00:30:00
DATE: 2011/8/16 18:45:40

In the issue above, the speaker thinks that all students should take courses in which they read poetry, novels, mythology, and other types of imaginative literature. As is known to all, after graduation, colleges（college） students would go to work mostly in which they major and thus I think there is no need to study other courses.

Firstly, imaginative literature is a kind of course that is totally different from others such as computer science, engeneering（engineering） and economy. As we all know, students with strong professional knowledge would have much more advantages than those who are well-rounded about all things. Because companies nowadays would like college students to help to make the company more professional and stronger in order to make more money. If they hire a well-rounded student with low profession standard, the company would not make any process with the freshman.

Secondly, reading literature stands for a way of leisure instead of working for non-literature students. For example, if one are(is) tired of busy studying life, he or she would mostly choose a novel to read so as to have a rest. Because imaginative literature such as poetry, novels, mythology, and other types does not make students to use their brain to take pains think(thinking) over about it unless they study it deeply, reading it is just a way of taking a rest and does help them to study more about it even about their own displine（discipline）.

Thirdly, if students do not take (an) interest in it, requiring them to do so would make them more tedious(tired) about it so that leads to (an) opposite result. As many people say, literature itself is a treasure of humans(human) thus being(删去) at a high status. However, even the most great inventor Edison, who invented light bulb, have （critiqued by）some people who don't agree with him. So, not every student like(likes) to read literature and college does not have the power to require them to do so. If they require students to read them, some of the students will hate it more.

Fourthly, with its own appalling merits, literature do（does） have some benefit(benefits) to college students who are in favor of it or enjoy it. By reading it, some students would have more common interest to talk (about) instead of their profession courses so that they can make more friends. Moreover, owning the knowledge about literature as well as their own courses, they would be more likely to receive the offer than who only major in their own courses.

In short, well-rounded individuals are not in need nowadays and colleges need not coerce them to take courses about it.

PS：问题1,30分钟写多少字合适呢？

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发表于 2011-8-17 17:36:40 |只看该作者

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发表于 2011-8-17 19:21:02 |只看该作者

好吧，我咋觉得你写得这么像是Argument……

你开头选择是在最后提出自己的论点，我觉得最好设定一下限制，因为你后面又提到了学有余力的情况下是有用的，这就像是你像话一个圆圈却没有封口一样。还有，我觉得你的观点太绝对了= =，虽然这点应该没啥大关系。
你也没有界定wellrounded到底是什么意思，literature对成为一个Well-rounded person有什么大的作用。

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发表于 2011-8-18 09:09:11 |只看该作者

有道理，难怪自己觉得没东西可写，其实是有很多东西只是浅浅提了一下没有论述。另外，不知道为什么自己特别喜欢驳斥issue的观点。有收获，谢谢楼上啊。9G的我得加紧练习了。 3# raiy

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发表于 2011-8-18 10:50:56 |只看该作者

唔，我好久没写了。。。所以也想不出什么来，不过看过版子里的各位大牛的教导——issue是很考验人逻辑的东西。。。也就是说，在写issue的时候要尽量展现出你的逻辑条理，而非堆词的功底，由此，不必纠结于单词的多少，但是一个观点一个观点要结结实实地说清楚。

根据你给出的提纲，我大概会这么写
1、大概说明我对题干的理解，并提出自己的想法。同意or不同意or一半一半。
2、详细定义well-rounded的定义，为什么我们要成为well-rounding的人？结合本题，公司需要专才，不需要well-rounding的人才，社会需要通才，随时应对不一样的情况，个人，看情况咯。。。懒的就不要，勤奋的可能就要。
3、成为well-rounding的人需要什么条件。针对本题，well-rounding要不要read poetry and novel呢？
4、就个人情况而言，有些学生懒，有些学生对poetry无爱，学校强迫就会适得其反，有的学生勤奋，有的学生对poetry有爱，于是不需学校强迫也会主动去学。（建议归到到第一大点去，这样逻辑线会更明白些）。

个人观点，仅供参考。。。

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发表于 2011-8-18 12:47:59 |只看该作者

我觉得你说的有道理，但是如果合并的话只有两个大点，不够充实。我想把提纲改为：
1.literature和well-rounded的关系，well-rounded不仅包含文学方面。
2.对于求职没有必要well-rounded，专业性公司并不需要关于此类well-rounded没有专长的全才，更需要的是人才
3.对于其他方面，如生活，阅读文学可以提高生活情趣，陶冶情操，对未来有间接影响。
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