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新手作业，第一次上论坛，跪求大家轮流痛宰鱼肉我的作文~~谢谢~~

2月9日 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: All school teachers should be required to attend courses every 5 years to update their knowledge.

Since the educational reform, people are always holding two opposite opinions about a controversial issue of whether all school teachers should be required to attend courses every 5 years to update their knowledge. Some opponents claim that school teacher is not an easy job because especially in china there are too many students for a teacher to care for their study, while some proponents champion the rival idea that in today’s society, with the knowledge exploding, there is a tendency that to update our information become a significant effect on every areas, including education, so teachers should gain new skill in the proper time. I definitely support the latter choice with the intensive purpose and substantial reasons.

First of all, let’s get down the fundamental and agree that nowadays knowledge is the one of most dominant power in a lot of realms and we can feel that information is changing in the high rates. Therefore, if our school teachers have no inclination to increase their knowledge, they will be out of date and wash out instantly, at least it seems to my grandmother, for example, has this kind of suffering experience. She was the best teacher and the most proficient instructor in our hometown. The fact that even she was retired did not prevent amount of students from asking her for their remediation and at the same time my grandmother had really a justification that she had sufficient knowledge to carry on her career. However, she realized that she made mistakes since her students just had consulted with her for a simple theme of Olympic math by reason that she had never seen this novel theme so even she had the wealth experience in education. As a responsible teacher, she thought that she was unable to continue this job and decided to fully leave this educational area that she really devoted herself into for many years.

Furthermore, not only can school teachers acquire knowledge but also can learn others utilizable skill from these courses, such as social communication skill, critical thinking and the educational attitude. Perhaps during the daytime, school teachers are lack of a kind of the communicational atmosphere. Once school teachers have an wonderful platform, just like these classes, to share and discuss their academic stories to other teachers who have made friends during or after these classes, they will critically rethink what they have done with their students; hence, they have some opportunities to find their disadvantages or weakness; also, they do their utmost to improve their educational quality and change their communication techniques or attitude while they reface to their students. It benefits school teachers a lot and it will help school teachers to enhance their both verbal and practical ability.

What is more, no time is not a logical reason for avoiding these courses. In other areas, such as commerce, businessmen have much less time than teachers, while they still have motivations to attend the courses in order to develop their capacity.
Unless someone does not want to show their ambition in their career, he or she should update their knowledge frequently and has better ability to handle their working.

In conclusion, that all school teachers should demand to attend courses every 5 years to absorb the new and useful information about education has an important and positive influence on educational quality. It is fairly clear that more and more original men can be created in our country with educational advantages accruing.

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还有一篇昨天写的

2月9日 Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice.

Extracurricular Activities

Since the educational department has enacted the law that make sure the time of instruction after class, people are always holding two contrasting views about a controversial issue of whether sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support at universities and colleges.
Opponents argue that the basic objective of being a college student is to do his or her utmost to gain academic knowledge, instead of wasting students' time and tax payers' money on other unnecessary activities while proponents claim that in order to survive in today fierce society, academic knowledge just only a part of requirement and extracurricular activities become more significant efforts throughout our life. I agree with the latter idea firmly with the intensive purpose and substantial reasons.
First of all, let's get down the fundamental and realized the most common reason for us going to university is to find a good job and have a better ability to adjust in the anxious social environment. With economic and social development, some skills, including communication skill, critical thinking, problem solving, become of particular importance. Therefore, when there is growing tendency that companies require employees to have various kinds of capacity, some people who boast only narrowly academic knowledge are seldom popular in the job market that they still were in the last one decade. For developing students' multi-skilling, it's really justifiable to increase the finance into cultivate students' extracurricular courses or activities.
Furthermore, in our life, the influence of sports and social activities upon the physiological and mental of the students has been really positive. For example, I like to participate in sports and social activities after my classes and I deem that these activities can bring many benefits for me indeed. First, regular study is so stressful, but once I take part in sports activities such as playing football, running and swimming, I can forget all the daily trouble and get relaxed. Also, sport activities can strengthen my body condition to provide sufficient energy for supporting my tight study schedule. At last, I enjoy join social activities, especially meeting people and making friends. I think these activities improve my communication skill greatly. After I paid more attention to get along with my friends, I am able to put forth my idea more clearly and more easily than before and I have strong ability to solve dispute and enhance cooperation with other people. I cannot acquire such useful skills by reading academic books. Thus, I strongly support to treat extracurricular activities as well as academic courses.

Moreover, it has long been customary that a lot of social problems came from exceeded highlight the importance of verbal ability and without any consideration to the effect of other practical capacity, as at least it seems to happen in China. Since economic reform in our country, the government forced middle school students who had a great inclination to go to university or college to attend National College Entrance Examination which was solitary weighted in favor of specialization, because the government championed that academic knowledge is the sole power to develop economy of our country. The educational system had been build with no regard for training multi-skills and students who want to study in the university had to join this exam, unless some students intended to give up his study or went aboard for study but they are minimal. So in last thirty years, more and more people were lack of independent living ability by the reason that when middle schools always imposed them into academic study and assigned immeasurable homework for them, students only have time to be engaged in study academic knowledge and ignored the statue of living ability. Their regular lives should rely on their parents, even they become adults. Hence, if the government still has no idea to lay emphasis on extracurricular activities and the education of multi-skills, the consequence will definitely serious.

In conclusion, I advocate that government and school should inject more funds into extracurricular activities and cultivate us become multi-skills and creative people. Because of this, I believe that our country will have a splendid future.

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2# shibin11

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CHRISSNAKE的作文很好很强大，学习了。下面是我一点点小小的建议，如果有什么错误的话，互相改正哈~
紫色是我的建议橘黄色是我觉得我学习了的地方
Since the educational reform, people are always holding two opposite opinions about acontroversial issue of whether all school teachers should be required to attend courses every 5years to update their knowledge. Some opponents claim that school teacher is not an easy jobbecause especially in china there are too many students for a teacher to care for their study（感觉their study可以省略，加着感觉有点累赘）,while some proponents champion the rival idea that in today’s society, with the knowledge exploding, there is a tendency that to update(that后面加 to的用法，很少又看见，我google了下，也没有看到例句，最好改成updating) our information become a significant effect on every areas, including education, so teachers should gain new skill in the proper time. I definitelysupport the latter choice with the intensive purpose and substantial reasons.

First of all, let’s get down the fundamental and agree that nowadays knowledge is the one of most dominant power in a lot of realms and we can feel that information is changing in the high rates. Therefore, if our school teachers have no inclination to increase their knowledge, they will be out of date and wash out instantly, at least it seems to my grandmother, for example, has thiskind of suffering experience. She was the best teacher and the most proficient instructor in our hometown. The fact that even she was retired did not prevent amount of students from asking her for their remediation and at the same time my grandmother had really a justification that shehad sufficient knowledge to carry on her career. However, she realized that she made mistakes since her students just had consulted with her for a simple theme of Olympic math by reason that she had never seen this novel theme so even she had the wealth experience in education. As a responsible teacher, she thought that she was unable to continue this job and decided to fully leave this educational area that she really devoted herself into for many years.
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Furthermore, not only canschool teachers acquire knowledge but also can learn others utilizable skillfrom these courses, such as social communication skill, critical thinking andthe educational attitude（并列的很棒）. Perhaps during the daytime, school teachers are lackof a kind of the communicational atmosphere. Once school teachers have anwonderful platform, just like these classes, to share and discuss theiracademic stories to other teachers who have made friends during or after theseclasses, they will critically rethink what they have done with their students;hence, they have some opportunities to find their disadvantages or weakness;also, they do their utmost to improve their educational quality and changetheir communication techniques or attitude while they reface to their students.It benefits school teachers a lot and it will help school teachers to enhancetheir both verbal and practical ability./ O4 e% v! ^' U; U! ~6 C
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What is more, no time is not a logical reason foravoiding these courses. In other areas, such as commerce, businessmen have muchless time than teachers, while they still have motivations to attend thecourses in order to develop their capacity.
Unless someone does not want to show their ambition in their career, he or sheshould update their knowledge frequently and has better ability to handle theirworking.6 A, ^+ P7 w# C1 m; E" M
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In conclusion, that all schoolteachers should demand to attend courses every 5 years to absorb the new anduseful information about education has an important and positive influence oneducational quality. It is fairly clear that more and more original men can becreated in our country with educational advantages accruing.

CHRISSNAKE的词汇量非常的大，几乎没有相同的词，文中的论据也选的很好，学习了

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