[文书] 自己的PS初稿，求批，谢谢了。 [复制链接]

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我对内容上有些不确定：自己写了自己的一次学生时代的创业经历和家庭变故（主要是想表现自己遇到困难和挫折不后退），但看到很多PS 模板都是和学术内容有关的，想问问这合不合适？帮我修改PS的老外说自己对PS不了解，只负责语法和表达的修改。所以还得请教各位尚友，真心谢谢了。以下是我的PS 初稿：

What attracts me most is applied science and engineering and one of my career goals is that one day my theories or patents can be applied to industrial departments. That is why I determined to pursue a PhD degree in Chemical Engineering with an emphasis in fine chemical engineering or research and development of chemical engineering processes.

Still lost in the shadow of my mother’ death (she passed away in my high school time) and being taciturn and a little negative when I was a freshman, next year, I realized it is the time to cheer up. As the sponsor of a three-group team, I came up with the innovative ideas of establishing the Mobile Newspaper of our university as a new business model. It went well at first, but because of some marketing problems, it went bankrupt. I lost myself again. Fortunately and accidentally, I took part in the social practice organized by our university during the winter holidays in 2011, Alumni Interviews, and I was lucky to have the chance to interview five successful alumni. Through the interview, I got to know the poignant memories behind their success and felt their dogged and positive spirits toward life, which encouraged me to get out of my own failure.

During my undergraduate study, I always focused on cultivating academic excellence. Despite fierce competition in university, I ranked 6th in the entire class during the past three years. I have acquired many experimental skills from inorganic, organic, analytical, physical and comprehensive experiments. I also have a good command of chemical engineering equipments and distributed control system by attending the courses of Chemical Engineering Experiment and Simulation Experiment. Through Course Design of Chemical Engineering Principles and of Chemical Engineering Equipment, I got a deep understanding of the basic procedure and methods of chemical engineering design.

In October 2012, I participated in the Professor Zhang Qikun’s project: the separation of n-butyl alcohol-water system of less than azeotropic composition. There were two optional chemical processes we could choose: the traditional two- rectifying columns process and the combined process of membrane and single rectification column process. After long and serious considerations, we adopted the second one because it consumes less energy. In the project, I made the calculation of material and heat balance, simulated the combined process of membrane separation and rectification column with Aspen, drew process flow diagram with AutoCAD. Among all the achievements, what I feel most proud of is that I came up with innovative ideas of using the heat exchanger and separator to replace of the membrane in Aspen in order to simulate the whole process because as we know, there is no membrane model in the model library in Aspen. It was through the project that I realized that there were many deficiencies of existing chemical processes and we need to develop better chemical processes with less energy consumption and pollution.

My ultimate objective is to develop new chemical processes or improve some extant chemical processes, which can be applied to industrial departments. As for my career plan, I wish to be a productive and original professor who has close connections with industrial departments. To achieve these goals, I need systematic training at a more advanced level badly. The reason why I choose your university is that it provides the best environment for graduate education, including competitive and inspiring academic atmosphere, active and fruitful research, access to first-class facilities, and close interaction between students and its high-quality faculty. So I’m eager to further my study in your university. Your favorable evaluation of my application will be highly appreciated.

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