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发表于 2004-2-28 22:40:52 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

110"When we concern ourselves with the study of history, we become storytellers. Because we can never know the past directly but must construct it by interpreting evidence, exploring history is more of a creative enterprise than it is an objective pursuit. All historians are storytellers."

The statement above asserts that we all become storytellers when we try to interpret evidence and exploring history. It is true that we can never know the past directly because no one can always be alive in the whole history; yet, I believe that we can know indirectly by interpreting evidence or exploring history .It is untenable to state that all historians are storytellers.
  Every historian  bear his own belief in mind that he must adhere to his principle, that is, to record factual incidents rather than imagination without evidences.  Objective record is a record which could  withstand all sorts of trials, a record without any hyperbole and grandiloquent language or picture, and  there should be enough evidence to support it .Even though some history books have distorted the factual events, historians can explore the truth of history with objective eyes.  24-crooked road, a famous picture photographed in the 50s, 19th by one unknown person, has been showing us a mysterious road that has 24 zigzag route, and no one suspect the traditional belief that the location of this road is on the Dian mian road in Yunnan, China. But one historian Ge shuya failed to find the road as the history books pointed after getting to Dian mian road for many times, so he determined to find the road himself. Eight years have been past, he finally stand on that lovely road in another province Guizhou after exploring to many mountains ,going into archive, looking at lots of history files, and overcoming unutterably hardships ."Whatever difficulties I would encounter in the process of finding the true location of the road, "Ge shuya remarks excitedly." I never give up because as a historian, my responsibility is to raise the mysterious veil of the history and help common people understand the truth of the past. "From this example we need go no further to understand that historians not only pursuit the fact in the nature, but also contribute to reconstruct and revise the wrong histories in the world.
On the other hand, artists or storytellers have their own character, which is different from that of historians. Frankly speaking, storytellers describe stories or write novels mainly assorting to their own imagination or experiences rather than historical fact. What they more concern about is how to speak or write their stories or novels more attractive to the audiences or readers. Thus, they just devote their efforts to the beautiful and complicated languages while neglecting the basic history and their works could not and need not be examined accurately by evidences. Love and hatred, pleasure and miserable, honest and trickery are the essence and spirit of  one novel. Therefore, it is popular among common people who are willing to concern things happened around them. Common people are not paying much attention to constructing a history, which is historians' job. It is enough for historians to write down history on the basis of the fact or evidence rather than concerning about others’ attitude.
Admittedly, historians sometimes distort and  misinterpret the history  or misled by irresponsible (负责) books or evidences, but if one is as persistent as Ge shuya and do not easily persuaded by authorities, surely one could get to the very destination of true history.
   To sum up, I disagree that all historians are storytellers in that we never know the past directly but through constructing it by interpreting evidence, exploring history, we make an objective pursuit rather than a creative enterprise.

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发表于 2004-2-28 23:33:22 |只看该作者

110"When we concern ourselves with the study of history, we become storytellers. Because we can never know the past directly but must construct it by interpreting evidence, exploring history is more of a creative enterprise than it is an objective pursuit. All historians are storytellers."

The statement above asserts that we (historians) all become storytellers when we try to interpret evidence and exploring ( to explore) history. It is true that we can never know the past directly because no one can always be alive in the whole history (we can never go back to the past); yet, I believe that we can know indirectly by interpreting evidence or exploring history ( 这句话有点ambiguous) .It is untenable to state that all historians are storytellers.

Every historian bear (bears) his own belief in mind that he must adhere to his principle (principles),(--) that is, to record factual incidents rather than imagination without evidences (evidence). Objective record is a record (record is not a proper diction) which could withstand all sorts of trials, a record without any hyperbole and grandiloquent (clumsy words) language or picture, and there should be enough evidence to support it .Even though some history books have distorted the factual events, historians can explore the truth of history with objective eyes. 24-crooked road, a famous picture photographed in the 50s, 19th by one unknown person, has been showing us a mysterious road that has 24 zigzag route, and no one suspect the traditional belief that the location of this road is on the Dian mian road in Yunnan, China. But one historian Ge shuya failed to find the road as the history books pointed after getting to Dian mian road for many times, so he determined to find the road himself. Eight years have been past, he finally stand on that lovely road in another province Guizhou after exploring to many mountains ,going into archive, looking at lots of history files, and overcoming unutterably hardships . "Whatever difficulties I would encounter in the process of finding the true location of the road, "Ge shuya remarks excitedly." I never give up because as a historian, my responsibility is to raise the mysterious veil of the history and help common people understand the truth of the past. "From this example we need go no further to understand that historians not only pursuit the fact in the nature, but also contribute to reconstruct and revise the wrong histories in the world.
Subordinated clause 的用法很不正规，注意以下which和that，还有长句子不要老是用逗号，意思说完了就句号，要是语法完整了，但是意思没有的话就用分号。这个例子想说明的扭曲的事实会被历史学家给扭回来。你可以从他实地考察的方面来讲他的objectivity。这样才你要讲的东西。结尾要回过来。

On the other hand, artists or storytellers have their own character (characteristics), which is different from that of historians. Frankly speaking, storytellers describe stories or write novels mainly assorting to their own imagination or experiences rather than historical fact. What they more concern about is how to speak or write their stories or novels more attractive to the audiences or readers. Thus, they just devote (spend) their efforts to (on) the beautiful and complicated languages while neglecting the basic history and their works could not and need not (to) be examined accurately by evidences (evidence). Love and hatred, pleasure and miserable, honest and trickery are the essence and spirit of one novel. Therefore, it is popular among common people who are willing to concern things happened around them. Common people are not paying much attention to constructing a history, which is historians' job. It is enough for historians to write down history on the basis of (based on) the fact or evidence rather than concerning about others’ attitude.
比较storyteller的工作特性这点我自己的作文里倒是没有想到。最好把侧重点放在historians上，毕竟这才是重点，似乎花了太多的篇幅在storyteller上面。这个不合适吧？

Admittedly, historians sometimes distort and misinterpret the history or misled by irresponsible (负责) books or evidences （历史书也是历史学家写出来的啊，不是说明了历史学家的确是乱说么？可能表达的好一点的是：不负责任的历史学家会在没有详细考察的情况下，扭曲历史，但是要实地详细考察了的话，真正的历史还是会展现在我们的面前的。）, but if one is as persistent as Ge shuya and (that) do not easily persuaded by authorities, (he would surely…) surely one could get to the very destination of true history.

To sum up, I disagree that all historians are storytellers in that we never know the past directly but through constructing it by interpreting evidence, exploring history, we make an objective pursuit rather than a creative enterprise.

整体的框架还是掌握了不错的，但是语言上还是要谨慎一点，很多的语法错误，要好好检查哟。不要着急一定要有信心啊。呵呵。我也很快就考了啊。Anyway一定不要失去信心，要相信自己才好。看你的题目好吓人。加油呀！　

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