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发表于 2005-8-13 11:18:53 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

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No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study.
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让步同意
outline:
1. 学科相互交叉，是科学发展的结果
2. outsider对问题的解决有一定的贡献
3. 当今问题的复杂化，要求cooperate
4. 还有其它因素决定研究成果

With the development of the civilization of human being, more and more scientific fields interact and make much progress than ever. Regarding to this phenomenon, some people assert that only the outsiders can promote the field of study advance significantly. As far as I am concerned, the outsiders can help the development of the field significantly, however, it is too presumptuous to think it is the necessary and unique one.

Nowadays, the disciplines in the natural science and literal science trend to breakthrough the original boundary and limit, and they are interacting and promoting each other greatly. It is a good thing for the development of the whole civilization. Because every thing in the world is related, so does the disciplines, which shows the whole level of the science and the ability of realizing the world is elevating. That is to say, many scientists in the different research fields that used to called " outsiders" in the past will cooperate and contribute to solve the problem.

Usually, the outsiders can help to find the key to the complex problem. For one thing, they often bring the idea and method from their original fields, which is new and creative way to the current field. Maybe it will work and resolve the confusion during the process of research. For author, they are not the professional person in new field and can break out the traditional routines and put forwards the new attempts, which maybe the right way to the answer. It is possible that the outsiders put the axe in the helve in the foreign fields.

In the advanced development society, the problem people faced is always not a simple one, which can be solved by the scientists in one field. The various complicated problems need the more scientist work together to solve them, although sometime we cannot realize the essential of the problem and think some scientists belong to the ‘outsiders’. Take a famous discovery of the DNA double-spire structure as the example, the common sense tells us it should be the realm of biology, and the physics and chemistry are regarded as the outsider concerning this research, as a matter of fact, it is the collaborate result of fields scientist come from the biology, physics, chemistry and so on.

However, it is dangerous for us to overemphasis the importance of the outsiders in the scientific research. Though the outsiders can bring the 'fresh air' to the field, it is unwarranted that outsider is the only requirement to make progress. The significant advance in one field is determined by a combination of the former progress and experience, the experiment condition, the research fund, and so on. Without any of these factors, the result might different and cannot go on smoothly. At the same time, without the affiliating of outsider, many fields still get the advance greatly.

According to one survey, there are over 2,000 new cross-sciences have come into being in the world. With the development of the society, it is unavoidable that more and more disciplines will interact and the 'outsider' will play an important role to promote the research in the interacting fields. However, we must pay attention to the other aspects that would influence the research work of the new fields. Both of the insiders and outsiders are important for the development of the science and technology.

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With the development of the civilization of human being, more and more scientific fields interact and make much progress than ever. Regarding to this phenomenon, some people assert that only the outsiders can promote the field of study advance significantly. As far as I am concerned, the outsiders can help the development of the field significantly换换吧,上面用过了,比如greatly, however, it is too presumptuous to think it is the necessary and unique one.

Nowadays, the 似乎不用thedisciplines in the natural science and literal science literal science?如果说是文学,应该用literature.literal是字面上的,其实没什么必要非要加science不可的,文学也是独立的学科啊trend to breakthrough the origina用traditional可能更好一些l boundary and limitboundaries and limits, and they are interacting and promoting each other greatly我也想不出来有什么其它词可以换了. It is a good thing for the development of the whole civilization改成从句并到前面一句里去,感觉有点突兀. Because every thing in the world is related, so does the disciplines, which shows the whole level of the science and the ability of realizing没懂是什么意思 the world is elevating. That is to say, many scientists in the different research fields that used to called " outsiders" in the past根据题目,似乎现在依然被称为outsider,不如用so-called自然些 will cooperate and contribute to solve the problem不用the了,用problems.应该不是outsider和ousider合作吧,是outsider和scientists in that field的合作.

Usually, the outsiders can help to find the key to the complex problems. For one thing, they often bring the idea and method 不要加太多the啊,没必要的,注意一下.个人认为应该用ideas and methodsfrom their originalown fields, which is new and creative ways to the current field. Maybe it will work and resolve the confusion during the process of research大概是我个人偏好比较长的句子,可以把这句和上句合并. For authors, they are not the 去掉,注意单复数一致professional person in new field and can break out the traditional routines and put forwards the new attempts, which maybe the right way to the answerwhich may stimulate the discovery of innovative approaches to the answer. It is possible that the outsiders put the axe in the helve好词！ in the foreign fields.

In the advanced developmentdeveloped society, the problem 去掉the，改成复数people faced is always not a simple oneis always complex, which cancannot? be solved by the scientists in one field. The various complicated problems need the more scientist work together to solve them, although sometime we cannot realize the essential of the problem and think some scientists belong to the ‘outsiders’Various complicated problems need scientists with diversely different knowledge from disciplines seem uncorrelated apparently to work together.. Take a famous discovery of the DNA double-spire structure as the examplean example, the common sense tells us it should be the realm of biology, and the physics and chemistry are regarded as the outsider concerning this research, as a matter of fact, it is the collaborate result of fields scientist come from the biology, physics, chemistry and so on.例子举完要分析总结

However, it is dangerous for us to overemphasisoveremphasize on the importance of the outsiders in the去掉 scientific research. Though the outsiders can bring the 'fresh air' to the field, it is unwarranted that outsider is the only requirement to make progress这句话再改改,看着有点别扭.单复数注意一下. The significant advance in one field is determined by a combination of the former progress and experience, the experiment condition, the research fund印象中是fundings, and so on. Without any of these factors, the result might bedifferent and the development coursecannot go on smoothly. At the same time, without the affiliating of outsider, many fields still get the advance greatly.

According to one survey, there are over 2,000 new cross-sciences have come into being in the world. With the development of the society, it is unavoidable that more and more disciplines will interact and the 'outsider' will play an important role to promote the research in the interacting fields. However, we must pay attention to the other aspects that would influence the research work of the new fields. Both of the insiders and outsiders are important for the development of the science and technology.

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发表于 2005-8-13 14:44:26 |只看该作者

我也是第一次帮人改作文，改的不好的话请原谅。
建议：注意语法问题，比如单复数什么的。觉得例子不够，有些分析可以再深入一些。最后一段不要再举例子了，移到上面的论证里会好一些。

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发表于 2005-8-13 14:51:49 |只看该作者

issue51请赐教

https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=317950

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发表于 2005-8-13 20:45:22 |只看该作者

谢谢，我写的时候也觉得分析不够深入，都是泛泛而谈的，也找不到合适的例子，呜呜……
待会就拜读你的大作哦，不过我的水平有限，呵呵

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发表于 2005-8-13 21:38:36 |只看该作者

一点看法

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发表于 2005-8-13 22:00:15 |只看该作者

呜呜，小时候考数学我就一直搞不清充分，必要和充要条件，现在还是栽在这个上面，谢谢提醒，
弱弱的问，那去掉unique是不是就可以了？那我后面的论证是否也犯了这个问题呢？还望多多指教！
待会就去看看你的哦

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发表于 2005-8-13 22:35:35 |只看该作者

Originally posted by Archer1123 at 2005-8-13 22:00
呜呜，小时候考数学我就一直搞不清充分，必要和充要条件，现在还是栽在这个上面，谢谢提醒，
弱弱的问，那去掉unique是不是就可以了？那我后面的论证是否也犯了这个问题呢？还望多多指教！
待会就去看看你的哦

好像后面并没就unique作论证吧，应该是可以了。

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