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发表于 2006-1-3 17:23:25 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

[Argument163]The following is taken from the editorial section of the local newspaper in Rockingham.
"In order to save a considerable amount of money, Rockingham's century-old town hall should be torn down and replaced by the larger and more energy-efficient building that some citizens have proposed. The old town hall is too small to comfortably accommodate the number of people who are employed by the town. In addition, it is very costly to heat the old hall in winter and cool it in summer. The new, larger building would be more energy efficient, costing less per square foot to heat and cool than the old hall. Furthermore, it would be possible to rent out some of the space in the new building, thereby generating income for the town of Rockingham."
为节省大量支出，Rockingham应该拆除具有百年历史的市政厅并用一些市民所提议的更大更节能的建筑来代替。旧的市政厅过于狭小，无法使政府雇佣的大量员工在里面舒适地工作。而且，旧市政厅冬天采暖和夏天制冷都很花钱。新的更大的市政厅将会更加节能，单位面积所需的采暖和制冷费用都比旧建筑少。还有，我们可以把新建筑的一部分空间出租，从而为Rockingham市增加收入。
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0：这篇文章没有道理。
1、拆除旧的市政厅并建新的本身就需要大量的开支，至少在短期不可能省钱。
2、作者没有举出切实的证据表明目前在旧市政厅工作的人员因为空间问题而不舒服。
3、新的更大的市政厅即使单位面积所需的采暖和制冷费用较低，但由于面积增加，总体花费不一定会比以前便宜。
4、出租的问题不一定可行。新的大厅在解决了目前的人员的工作空间后，可能没有多余的空间了，另外作为市政大厅对外出租可能不是很合适。
结论：需要进行进一步的调查和考虑，权衡利弊，才能做出决策。

The above editorial recommends that a lager and more energy-efficient building should be built to replace the Rockingham’s century-old town hall as some citizens have proposed. This recommendation is based on the precondition that the new building will be larger to provide enough space to accommodate people working in the hall. Meanwhile, it would be more energy-efficient. In addition, renting out some of the redundant space in the new building would bring external income. At first glance, the reasons that provided by the author are very reasonable. A careful examination of them, however, will conceal how ridiculous it really is.

The original intension of this recommendation is to save a considerable amount of money. While on the contrary, tearing down the century-old building and build another new hall will cost a large amount of money. It is very clear that the author did not consider the cost for tearing down and constructing. Maybe the cost itself is many times larger than the considerable amount of money. In addition, whether the town of Rockingham could afford this cost is unknown.

Furthermore, the author did not give any supported evidence to show that the old town hall is too small to provide enough working space to people working for the town. There is no data to prove that their working space is not enough. Maybe this situation is just temporary, such as some superior officials are paying a visit to Rockingham or making an inspection. And the situation will turn normal when the officials leave here.

Besides, even assuming that the new building could be more energy efficient and cost less per square foot to heat and cool, it is uncertain that the total cost could cut down as the area would be increase at the same time. For example, the cost for heat and cool per square foot decreases by 25 percent, while on the contrary the whole area increases twice. In that case, the total cost would be 1.5 times as large as the previous one.

At last, the editorial assumes that renting out the external space in the new building will increase income for the town. However, after accommodating all the people who are working for the town, will there be external space for rent? Another problem is, as the hall is for government use only, it may be not convenient to share with other companies or individuals.

In sum, the editorial is not well reasoning and lack careful deliberation. Therefore, without accounting for the above and other possible factors, the government of Rockingham should not make any decision in haste. It would be essential for the government to weigh the advantages of keeping the century-old hall against constructing a new building carefully.

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发表于 2006-1-3 23:30:46 |只看该作者

The above editorial recommends that a lager and more energy-efficient building should be built to replace the Rockingham’s century-old town hall as some citizens have proposed. This recommendation is based on the precondition that the new building will be larger to provide enough space to accommodate people working in the hall. Meanwhile, it would be more energy-efficient. In addition, renting out some of the redundant space in the new building would bring external income. At first glance, the reasons that provided by the author are very reasonable. A careful examination of them, however, will conceal how ridiculous it really is.

The original intension ??(紧张?应该是intent吧)of this recommendation is to save a considerable amount of money. While on the contrary, tearing down the century-old building and build building another new hall will cost a large amount of money. It is very clear that the author did not consider the cost for tearing down and constructing. Maybe the cost itself is many times larger than the considerable amount of money. In addition, whether the town of Rockingham could afford this cost is unknown.

Furthermore, the author did not give any supported evidence to show that the old town hall is too small to provide enough working space to people working for the town. There is no data to prove that their working space is not enough. Maybe this situation is just temporary, such as some superior officials are paying a visit to Rockingham or making an inspection. And the situation will turn normal when the officials leave here.
我觉得这个错误找的不好,就好象说"没有有力的证据证明这个建筑需要暖气和空调,因为该地区可能在热带"一样.有点为了错误找错误,呵呵

Besides, even assuming that the new building could be more energy efficient and cost less per square foot to heat and cool, it is uncertain that the total cost could cut down as the area would be increase at the same time. For example, the cost for heat and cool per square foot decreases by 25 percent, while on the contrary the whole area increases twice. In that case, the total cost would be 1.5 times as large as the previous one.
这个例子比较好,据说美国人特认这种带数字的例子,一看就觉得特有道理,呵呵

At last, the editorial assumes that renting out the external space in the new building will increase income for the town. However, after accommodating all the people who are working for the town, will there be external space for rent? Another problem is, as the hall is for government use only, it may be not convenient inconvenient to share with other companies or individuals.

In sum, the editorial is not well reasoning and lack careful deliberation. Therefore, without accounting for the above and other possible factors, the government of Rockingham should not make any decision in haste. It would be essential for the government to weigh the advantages of keeping the century-old hall against constructing a new building carefully.

好几天没写了,写作感觉还是蛮不错的,尤其是开头和结尾概括性的段落仍然值得我们好好研究,努力~

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