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目:ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
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Effective education should be in balance between two aspects. One is effective education should meet society needs firstly. The other is effective education should meet individual needs and interests of students.

On one hand, there is a compelling argument about effective education. Our society needs effective education to grow up students who can create benefits, such as economic, public health, and so forth, to society. For example, every country needs teachers to educate their children, who can create happy tomorrow for country, and also needs doctors, who can prevent public health for citizens and so on. Those needs enforce schools to teach students how to teacher little students well, how to cure patients as soon as possible and so on. Only when society needs are met, education can be effective to society, and then to every individual. Because than every individual is one of society, who can create benefits to society, who can win rewards from another persons who also live in society. No one can image that if an education of a student, which is not fit to society, the student may be feel fail and given up by society. And then how can this education make the student happy and self-content?

On the other hand, effective education has two convincing arguments. First, if education can meet individual needs and interests, this education can encourage individuals to study hard and research further. Becauseneeds and interests are best teachers for students. For example, Van Golh was one of best drawers in the world, because he would study by drawing, which was his hope, from another teachers and persons. This instance can show students unusually needs and interests can lead them clam high path in their research, and then, may be they will become specialists. Common sense tells that this assumption is can not impossible.

Second, emphasizing that special education can create specialists. Not every person should sing or writing, the society only needs someone who can sing to another, and others who can write something and so on. The different need make different student to find different job. And then society, which is full with varies jobs, can run. No one can image than if our society lacks someone who can teach students, cure patients, or clear lands, the world can become what? The answer tells that if this special result lost, our society can also loss its varying and beautiful meaning.

So the effective education should not only meet society needs, which can be fit for whole situation, but also meet students needs, which can create specialists.

好久没写了,都不会写了。这篇不用人改,我都知道写得臭,但希望有哪个好心人,能指点一二,以便小生能有快的进步!

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发表于 2007-3-21 23:54:39 |只看该作者
标题格式就不对。以后注意!

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发表于 2007-3-22 00:02:08 |只看该作者
多读范文和坛子里面的好文章。熟悉句式词汇的用法。

social needs是你提出来的吧。怎么结尾是only social needs。看得似乎是题目是说只要social needs就行了。内部逻辑要清楚。

句子例子写法都没什么大问题。你首先还是要注意审题,段落安排,内部逻辑,前后照应。

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发表于 2007-3-22 00:05:45 |只看该作者
首席给你看文章了那我就把你的标题给改了吧
下次记得写对标题

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发表于 2007-3-22 21:12:34 |只看该作者
多谢,77真是大好人,这么忙还帮我改作文,还提那么多有用的意见!:)

也谢88帮我改格式,我已经看了格式贴了,下回一定不再犯了!:loveliness:

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