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发表于 2007-7-20 21:43:33 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

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         What I want to change about my hometown

Changchun, as its beautiful name , the whole city is covered  with all kinds of beautiful plants. Although my hometown has many advantages on city’s appearance and green coverings , there are some disadvantages exist in the aspect of city planning. If I have a chance to change something about my beloved hometown,I think it may be the traffic. I have a strong eager that one day the traffic in my hometown would be satisfied by all residents of changchun.

The biggest problem existed in traffic may be the safety. As everybody knows, the Northeastern people have a distinctive characteristic—enthusiasm ,bravery, honesty,but they may be sometime a bit reckless. If you walk on the street, you would see a great variety of buses,cars , bicycles and taxies rushes with a amazingly high speed especially in the prosper city center such as hongqi Street,guilin Road and so on. Another reason causes the serious problem is the government’s unsuitable superintendent and management that make many drivers who did not abide by the traffic rules can not be punished on time. So , the serious result would be the safety of the drivers , passengers on bus or taxies ,even the passengers walking on the street could not be secured fully. The only solution to the problem is to enforce the supervision of the government in order to regulate the traffic system.

There is another aspect of the traffic should be taken into account as soon as possible. That is the traffic today in changchun is not convenient as many big cities abroad like Tokyo and so on. When in the rush hour, a long queue , which consisted of various of people such as students, the white collars even many old men who are hasty to keep up with the final morning market ,would be found at the bus station. Inside the bus, even the worse situation, the passengers are elbowing and trampling each other; outside the bus, the cars and buses are in a big traffic jam. So in my opinion, the government could develop other different transportation like subways and build cross-bridge to relieve the overburden stress on the surface of the street.

According to fact that the traffic now is not so convenient and safe that satisfy all the residents’ require, I hope the government could make a precise plan to change the situation. If I have the ability to make the condition better, the methods I have mentioned would be what I would take account of.

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Well,to me , the place that I will take him to visit is the changcheng of china.
The reasons why I will take him there are as follows:
First, changcheng is the most symbolized spot of china, a famous line is “have not went to chengcheng, you never can not be called a hero”.

Second , viewed from changcheng ,you will see a splendid spectacle and find you are just a small sand in the whole world. You will learn a lot through this experience.

Finally, if you do not so familiar with the Chinese culture , you will gain a large number of knowledge about Chinese culture .

So , this is the reason why I  take him there.

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发表于 2007-7-21 19:49:07 |只看该作者

Changchun, as its beautiful name, the whole city is covered with all kinds of beautiful plants. Although my hometown has many advantages on city’s appearance and green coverings, there are some disadvantages exist (existing) in the aspect of city planning. If I have a chance to change something about my beloved hometown, I think it may be the traffic. I have a strong eager that one day the traffic in my hometown would be satisfied by all residents of changchun.

The biggest problem existed in traffic may be the safety. As everybody knows, the Northeastern people have a distinctive characteristic—enthusiasm, bravery, honesty, but they may be sometime a bit reckless. If you walk on the street, you would see a great variety of buses, cars , bicycles and taxies rushes with a amazingly high speed especially in the prosper city center such as hongqi Street, guilin Road and so on. Another reason causes the serious problem is the government’s unsuitable superintendent and management that make many drivers who did not abide by (去掉) the traffic rules can not be punished on time. So, the serious result would be the safety of the drivers, passengers on bus or taxies, even the passengers walking on the street could not be secured fully. (感觉这句话读懂很困难，好像是宾语过长了。) The only solution to the problem is to enforce the supervision of the government in order to regulate the traffic system.

There is another aspect of the traffic should be taken into account as soon as possible. That is the traffic today in changchun is not convenient as many big cities abroad like Tokyo and so on. When (去掉) in the rush hour, a long queue , which consisted of various of people such as students, the white collars even many old men who are hasty to keep up with the final morning market ,would be found at the bus station. Inside the bus, even the worse situation, the passengers are elbowing and trampling each other; outside the bus, the cars and buses are in a big traffic jam. So in my opinion, the government could develop other different transportation like subways and build cross-bridge to relieve the overburden stress on the surface of the street.

According to fact that the traffic now is not so convenient and safe that satisfy (satisfies) all the residents’ require, I hope the government could make a precise plan to change the situation. If I have the ability to make the condition better, the methods I have mentioned would be what I would take account of.

文章结构很好，每一段都是先提出问题然后解决问题。不过有些地方在语言上还不是很通顺。加强语言的训练，共勉阿！
Speaking :

Well,to me , the place that I will take him to visit is the changcheng of china.
The reasons why I will take him there are as follows:
First, changcheng is the most symbolized spot of china, a famous line is “have not went to chengcheng, you never can not be called a hero”.

Second , viewed from changcheng ,you will see a splendid spectacle and find you are just a small sand in the whole world. You will learn a lot through this experience.

Finally, if you do not so familiar with the Chinese culture , you will gain a large number of knowledge about Chinese culture .

So , this is the reason why I take him there.

长城：The Great Wall

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