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I can not agree with the speaker’s two claims. First, though how children are socialized today will effect the social development, it can not determine the destiny of society. Second, there is no evidence to prove the claim that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.
One the first aspect, I concede that how children are socialized really does effect the development of society. On the first hand, human lives in the society, and anyone needs and has to communicate with others. The more one is socialized, the better he can utilize his own resource to benefit the society. One the second hand, children learn to cooperate, to communicate, and to be conscientious; however, children who have less opportunities to interact with others may engender unhealthy psychology – the fear of society, or even antisocial thought. Socialization can help children grow up to be outstanding and establish a better society.
However, on the second aspect, how children are socialized is only one of the factors which are keys to determine the destiny of society, and there are much more other factors. Newton, a outstanding scientist who made prominent contribution to human society both on physics and mathematics, achieved his fruitions not because of how he is socialized, but his fond of sciencenot only…but also..会不会好一些因为两个因素都很重要. And let us turn to Copernicus, who put forward the heliocentric theory and changed people’s faith at his time, and his contribution results from his favor at astronomy and his seeking for truth, which have nothing with his socialization. Columbus, a great adventurer who had firm belief that the earth is round and proved his faith, found the American continent which is great contribution to mankind based on his curiosity of unknown and his spirit of adventure三个例子论述的都不错,希望大虾能弄出来放到回复版里供大家借鉴. From these examples we can see that socialization can not determine the destiny of society which is effected by complicated factors最好是不要否定socialization,两个都重要.除了它之外还有别的.
One the third aspect, there no evidence to prove that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society. If a better society means compare with the human society a hundred years ago, I think children born a half-century ago were well raised这句我见过,用在这里很不错,值得借鉴. Nowadays, our society is more tolerance than before – different races, diverse beliefs, various thoughts exist harmoniously. And women are much more respected, and laws and constitutions are consummate to protect women’s rights. More liberty of speech is given, and different kinds of media emerge and provide people all-sided information. Government and groups of people are concerning at with比较多见吧problems of environment, and this promise a better future. What is more, along with the development of technology, people are more satisfied for用as会不会好些 their financial capacity is strong enough to afford their desire. There are far more changes than whatI can point out, which show that our society are getting better than before.
To sum up, socialization of children today is important for the future of our society, however, it is not the only one key factor. And under the efforts of generations of people, our society will have a bright future.
逻辑性很强,条理很清晰,如果再能在语言上多些亮点,就更完美了.很稀饭你的风格呀.不像我写东西拖拖拉拉的~值得学习.同时希望能将文中例子以及好的论证提取放到回复版里,供大家享用~ |
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