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发表于 2008-2-15 12:38:12 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

ARGUMENT85 - The following appeared in the letter to an editor of a Myrian newspaper.

"Under Governor Winslow's leadership over the past four years, Myria has enjoyed unprecedented prosperity. Average wage increases this year are higher than they have been at any time since the 1970's, the number of people who report being unemployed has decreased by 10 percent, and construction of new homes is up by one third. In contrast, over the past four years Governor Winslow's opponent, Mr. Homer, has been mayor of a city in which only a small number of new businesses have opened. If Myrians want another four years like the past four years, they should reelect Governor Winslow."

The suggestion in the title is that people should vote Governor Winslow as the leader of the state again. To support his assertion, the speaker provides Winslow and one of his opponent's performances in the past four years. It is a compelling advice at the first glance; after close scrutiny of his proofs, however, the suggestion renders it unconvincing in several respects.

Firstly, to support his assertion that Governor Winslow has the ability to lead the state to prosperity, the speaker describes the performances of Winslow in the last four years. However, the speaker fails to provide us how was the situation like before Winslow serves as the Governor, without this, it is possible that the state had enjoyed fast economical development all these years, prosperity in the past years should not attributed to Winslow's good leadership; or in other words, it may be previous Governor rather than Winslow that carry out effective measures help increase people's income and create more job opportunity. Furthermore, the construction of new homes cannot indicate Winslow's ability as an effective leader either, because with the citizen's income increase, it is easy to understand that they have great desire to improve their living condition. Thereby, the speaker fails to provide sufficient evidence to convince me Winslow is a good leader.

Secondly, even Winslow actually performs well in the last four years; it is unjustifiable to say that Mr. Homer cannot perform well or even better. The speaker declare the Mr. Homer failed to led the city under his govern to prosperity on the basis that only small number of new businesses have been opened. I think his assertion is assertive since that he does not provide how was going in the city before Mr. Home come there, maybe the city had been experienced an economical regress all these year and it is Homer lead the city out of trouble. Thus, to persuade me his conclusion is right, the speaker should give me more information.

Thirdly, even Winslow performs well and Homer performs poor in the last four years, it is unfairly to infer that Winslow will lead the state to further prosperity and Homer will fail. Before drawing the conclusion, the speaker should compare their measures for future development of the state and analysis the advantages and disadvantages. Furthermore, the speaker fails to take other candidates with better measures and historical perfect performance should into consideration.

Sum up, to validate his conclusion, the speaker should provide me more information about the developmental state of the state and the city which under the leadership of the two candidates. Moreover, he should make an overall comparison of the two candidates' measures and should not ignore other candidates.