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发表于 2008-8-19 23:39:42 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Nowadays, the twenty-eighth Olympic Game are proceeding at Beijing. Athletes’' stunning skills and extremely comparative scenes attract many audiences, including me. To be exactly, I choose to enjoy the game at home but not at the theatre, not only because the tickets are too hard to obtain, but also because the matches can be better enjoyed on the television. So are the other live performances, like a play and concert.

The main reason why I prefer Television rather than live show is that more details of the performances are available on television. Anyone who ever experienced the live performance will know this. As we know, the motion pictures on television are captured by cameras which are so close to the performers that audience can never achieve that. By synchronizing technology, we can see the performance quite quickly and clearly, and from different aspects. But as an audience on the live space, one can only watch the game at regular distance in one perspective. To give an example, I attended the 19th international FINA game this April at Beijing Water Cubic Swimming Gym, and tired out for the athletes far away are so small and really hard to tell their actions. One probably imagines that from general experiences. Finally, I had to focus the big liquid screen on the top of the gym to know more details, in other words, I watched the TV to enjoy the game.

Another reason is that better environments probably provide for game enjoyment through television. One can put up with comments about the circumstance of the spot, but cannot determine which facilities should be configured with or what weather should be like on match day. Take Olympic Game for instance, the opening ceremony was on August, 8th, a hot day. I enjoyed the performance at air-conditioned home while almost everyone was saturated with sweat at Nest-type Beijing Olympic Stadium. Contrary to their hopingly shaking of fan for moment pleasantly cool, I felt comfortable and ease in front of the television, and could totally focus on the ceremony. Also, I do not need to worry about unpleasant people at neighbor seats to bother my appreciation, once who appeared at the theatre or stadium will accompany with me until the performance was over.

The heated air of live performance is charming, and to see idols in person may be exciting. However, for people really focused on the performances, more details and better environment can be attained through the television. Thus, watching the event through TV is more enjoyable to attending the live performance.

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发表于 2008-8-20 23:43:33 |只看该作者

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Nowadays, the twenty-eighth(严重警告，是29届啦) Olympic Game(games) are proceeding at Beijing. Athletes’' stunning skills and extremely comparative scenes attract many audiences, including me. To be exactly, I choose to enjoy the game at home but not at the theatre(为什么是theatre,不是在说现场的olympic games 么), not only because the tickets are too hard to obtain, but also because the matches can be better enjoyed on the television. So are the other live performances, like a play and concert（个人认为，首段最好能明确概括出中心论点，这样更加一目了然，当然你这样举出例子，引起观点的方法是非常好的，但我认为不适合在ETS那里用）

The main reason why I prefer Television rather than live show is that more details of the performances are available on television. Anyone who ever experienced the live performance will know this. As we know, the motion pictures on television are captured by cameras which are so close to the performers that audience can never achieve that. By synchronizing technology, we can see the performance quite quickly and clearly, and from different aspects. But as an audience on the live space, one can only watch the game at regular distance in one perspective. To give an example, I attended the 19th international FINA game this April at Beijing Water Cubic Swimming Gym, and tired out for the athletes far away are so small and really hard to tell their actions（不懂）. One probably imagines that from general experiences. Finally, I had to focus on the big liquid screen on the top of the gym to know more details, in other words, I watched the TV to enjoy the game.（finally往后最好不要，戛然而止是最好的，那样写出来了，虽然真实，但感觉对主题没什么贡献。另，最好在例子后面补上一句评论或总结。）

Another reason is that better environments probably provide for game enjoyment through television. One can put up with comments about the circumstance of the spot, but cannot determine which facilities should be configured with or what weather should be like on match day. Take Olympic Game for instance, the opening ceremony was on August, 8th, a hot day. I enjoyed the performance at air-conditioned home while almost everyone was saturated with sweat at Nest-type Beijing Olympic Stadium. Contrary to their hopingly shaking of fan for moment pleasantly cool, I felt comfortable and ease in front of the television, and could totally focus on the ceremony. Also, I do not need to worry about unpleasant people at neighbor seats to bother my appreciation, once who appeared at the theatre or stadium will accompany with me until the performance was over（不懂）.

The heated air of live performance is charming, and to see idols in person may be exciting. However, for people really focused on the performances, more details and better environment can be attained through the television. Thus, watching the event through TV is more enjoyable to attending the live performance.最后一段是我的最爱。Perfect!

文章总体还好了，但是在处理分论点时，2段首句讲的是more details, 但在该段中没能讲出来哦，可以举例说下。
你的字数太多啦，中间两段看看能否压缩吧。尤其是第三段的叙述很繁琐，看看多余的词，句删了最好。

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发表于 2008-8-21 10:44:07 |只看该作者

at the theatre( stadium )
By synchronizing technology, we can see the performance quite quickly and clearly, and from different aspects( angles) .
But as an audience on the live space, one can only watch the game at regular (the same) distance in one perspective.
at Beijing Water Cubic Swimming Gym,( at Water Cube of Beijing )
at Nest-type Beijing Olympic Stadium.( at Beijing's Nest Stadium)

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发表于 2008-8-21 11:08:48 |只看该作者

原帖由 baojane 于 2008-8-20 23:43 发表
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. ...

哈哈，你好可爱啊。这篇文章js-brando也帮我改了的，很学习了一番。我发上来大家分享下。
谢谢Coco关注啦，那个theatre应该改成stadium的（当时困死了，懒得想，鄙视自己一下:funk: ）；两个场馆名称似乎是官方翻译来的~

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Nowadays, the twenty-eighth Olympic Game are proceeding at Beijing. Athletes’ stunning skills and extremely comparative scenes attract many audiences, including me. To be exactly, I choose to enjoy the game at home but not at the theatre这边是不是应该换为stadium什么的, not only because the tickets are too hard to obtain, but also because the matches can be better enjoyed on the television. So are/do the other live performances, like a play and concert. 要严格挑毛病的话，不是所有的live performances都难买到票什么的，而且我觉得奥运的例子作为一个特例写在下面的正文段里面会更加好

The main reason why I prefer Television/TV shows rather than live show is that more details of the performances are available on television. Anyone who ever experienced the live performance will know this. As we know, the motion pictures on television are captured by cameras/video cameras which are so close to the performers that audience can never achieve. 这边的achieve有点不妥吧。While camera video can capture every small act clearly from various angles, people who attend in a live performance can just see the shows from a quite low distance and get an obscure image. Moreover, with the help of advanced technologies such as synchronizing technology, if any performer makes some brilliant act, we can see the slowed and repeated act one more time on television. By synchronizing technology, we can see the performance quite quickly and clearly, and from different aspects. But as an audience on the live space, one can only watch the game at regular distance in one perspective. To give an example这边好像没有说完, I attended the 19th international FINA game this April at Beijing Water Cubic Swimming Gym, 这边可以结束然后下面分开来另起一句的and tired out for the athletes far away are so small and really hard to tell their actions. One probably imagines that from general experiences/Many people may get through the same situation just like me, so it is easy to imagine and understand that uncomfortable feeling. Finally, I had to focus the big liquid screen on the top of the gym to know more details, in other words, though I attended the performance, I still had to watch the TV to enjoy the game.

Another reason is that better environments probably provide for game enjoyment through television. One can put up with comments about the circumstance of the spot, but cannot determine which facilities should be configured with or what weather should be like on match day.这句也有点难理解,put up with是忍受的意思呐~。As audiences, we cannot determine or forecast the locations for performance, but I strongly sure the circumstance there will never be more comfortable than our homes. Take the 29th Olympic Games for instance; the opening ceremony was on August, 8th, a hot day. (I enjoyed the performance at air-conditioned home while)/when I was lying on the coach, eating my favorite snacks and enjoy the comfortable temperature created by the air conditioning, almost everyone was saturated with sweat at Nest-type Beijing Olympic Stadium. Contrary to their hopingly shaking of fan for moment pleasantly cool,(?) I felt comfortable and ease in front of the television, and could totally focus on the ceremony. Also,这个观点很好 I do not need to worry about unpleasant people at neighbor seats to bother my appreciation, once who appeared at the theatre or stadium will accompany with me until the performance was over.这个作为一个论点来说有点难了，我觉得可以和下面这个合起来说，看比赛的乐趣不在于比赛本身，在家或者电视上看比赛，可以与家人和朋友一起看，享受那个cozy atmosphere。

The heated air of live performance is charming, and to see idols in person may be exciting. However, for people really focused on the performances, more details and better environment can be attained through the television. /However，in order to focus on the performances, master more details and enjoy a satisfactory environment, it is undoubtedly to watch the event on television. Thus, watching the event through TV is more enjoyable to/has more benefits than attending the live performance.

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