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发表于 2010-8-10 21:21:04 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and TV programs made in one’s own country are more interesting than those made in other countries.

Throughout my young life, I am confident that there are more and more good movies and TV programs appearing in my own country. Although these entertainment goods are giving me satisfaction and happiness, it is very hard to give comments that the movies and TV programs made in my country are always more interesting than those made in other countries.

Some funny goods are easier to come from other countries that have long experience on special areas, like cartoons from Japan and US. For example, "Transformers", my favorite cartoon, is one of most popular works in cartoon history. It was so popular that it was reused to produce real film, which became a film success. When going back to see our cartoon, I think the cartoon people in my country still need to develop ourselves to get catch with their pioneers.

Another reason is that people would like get amazed at foreign culture. As a result of globalization, people from different countries, are not afraid, even glad to communicate not only in business area but also in entertainment. Foreign ingredients in a movie sometimes attract lots of attention and become a hot sale point in some countries. For instance, TV shows of Mr. Bean from UK achieve a very great success in our country.

There is no denying fact that interesting good movies and TV programs are likely to be produced in own countries. Because people in one countries share same values and easier to get interested by the things that makers believe.

In sum, interesting movies and TV programs would be made from both own country and other countries.

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Throughout my young life, I am confident that there are more and more good movies and TV programs appearing in my own country. Although these entertainment goods are giving me satisfaction and happiness, it is very hard to give comments that the movies and TV programs made in my country are always more interesting than those made in other countries.

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Some funny goods are easier to come from other countries that have long experience on special areas此句很不通啊, like cartoons from Japan and US. For example, "Transformers", my favorite cartoon, is one of the most popular works in cartoon history. It was so popular that it was reused to produce real film, （which became a film success）也不通吧，变成电影上的成功？至少也得说成是是一部成功的电影吧，或者说which turned out to be a box office champion. When going back to see our cartoon, I think the (cartoon people)动画人能这么说吗？ in my country still need to （develop ourselves ）前面讲了动画人，应该是themselves，还有说提高技术能直接说develop oneself吗？这句你就直接说我国的动画产业still has a long way to go 就好啦 to get catch with their pioneers.& Z& `8 w% W4 J3 [, h( D9 T

Another reason is that people would like get amazed at foreign culture人们愿意被外国文化amaze到，这话通吗？. As a result of globalization, people from different countries, are not afraid, even glad to communicate not only in business area but also in entertainment. Foreign ingredients in a movie sometimes attract lots of attention and become a hot sale point in some countries. For instance, TV shows of Mr. Bean from UK achieve a very great success in our用my就行了，不要our country.而且你前面说了外国电影里的某些元素能在他国热销，那你的例子里面不能只说憨豆先生在我国热卖，你还要说里面的比如他的穿衣风格之类的怎么怎么受他国欢迎之类的

TThere is no denying fact that interesting good movies and TV programs are likely to be produced in one's own countries. Because people in one countries country share same values and are easier to get interested by the things （that makers believe）我没看懂. 9 |7 R. s, A. D9 D2 m' Q4 ^9 ~

In sum, interesting movies and TV programs would be made from both own country and other countries.不是有意思的电影，而是人们觉得哪里产的电影更有意思，题目的意思

我觉得你字数太少，然后表达不太好，有些可以google一下的，继续加油！

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发表于 2010-8-11 14:47:40 |只看该作者

本帖最后由 kunter 于 2010-8-11 14:59 编辑

改好了

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发表于 2010-8-12 22:11:01 |只看该作者

20100812 XSDGJ homework

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If you do not make sure other people (especially influential people or your employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments, you will never get successful in life

I would be very glad to see that other people, especially my boss, know about my strengths and accomplishments. Because these influential people might think of my condition and give me opportunities that fit me well. I totally agree that at that time, I will have more chance to succeed in my life when I can fully make use of my strengths. Nevertheless, I can not agree with the idea that I will never get successful without these opportunities.

Opportunity is not the only reason for success. When people pay high emphasis on the opportunities given by influential people, they may forget the truth that hard work is an indispensible ingredient to help catch successful opportunity when it comes. I can not expect a lazy man to succeed, although he may have a very great opportunity, like being a leader in one department of company.

Furthermore, without good opportunity, hard working people can be successful. Because the accumulated experience obtained from hard work can direct people to success. Lots of such cases can be found in science and technology area. For example, Thosman Edison finally invented a sustained lighting bulb after thousands of failure tries. It is the hard working itself that gives him an opportunity to get successful to find carbon as a lighting material. The thousands of failure tries can also be regarded as a training to increase his expertise on this.

Besides, to be successful all the time, people need hard working to continuously develop their capability, both weaknesses and strengths.
Nowadays, more capability is need on success in this fast growing society. Without growth, your strengths will become weakness in future. For instance, the IT skills owned by a person 10 years ago can not guarantee him or her being an IT engineer any more.

To sum up, I don't think I will never get successful life if I can not have other people like my boss know about my strengths and accomplishment. As I firmly believed, the main driving force to success is hard working.

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发表于 2010-8-13 15:18:45 |只看该作者

您好，文章已修改，请查收，水平有限，请包涵！

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发表于 2010-8-17 23:05:39 |只看该作者

20100817 homework
telephone 还是television对人类的有more effects

Nowadays, most of people have their own telephones and televisions in home. Both of them bring people lots of benefits like convenience and joys and gradually become an important part in our daily life. Personally, I firmly believe that compared with televisions, telephones have more effects on modern world.

It is universally agreed that televisions bring a host of TV programs, like soap operas and talk shows, greatly matching people's need in entertainment. People can relax themselves and free pressure from work and life via enjoying these TV program. But people are easily to get used and even devote themselves to looking TV shows. They spend so much time on TV that it totally disturbs their normal life. For example, youngsters would enjoy TV while eating some rubbish food all the time. This attracts their attention from study on these TV programs and at the same time, causing obesity problems to threaten their health. Such bad habits need to be changed; otherwise, their whole life would be ruined.

Telephone can be defined as a special tool, a tool that can help people reach anyone wherever he or she is. This can make delivery of messages very shortly and conveniently. People can get free themselves from delivery of message using birds and horses, which might take thousands of time. For example, it would take nearly two days to get a message from New York to Chicago via horses in 18th century. Now, the two days can be shortened into a couple of seconds via telephone. What is more, people not only deliver messages but also receive responding simultaneously. Therefore, with the help of telephone, people can talk like they are sitting together.

Also, telephone communication also saves lots of energy in society. Only a little electricity power and some metal device are needed to make telephone available. It is obviously more economical via telephone than other methods like horsing as mentioned before.

Beside, telephone can help change people’s life style in a positive way. In old times, people spent several days on transportation to visit their friends but finally found the absence of their friends. With telephones, they would have an appointment with friends. Therefore, a good life pattern is produced.

To sum up, I would like to get a conclusion that telephone has more positive effects on people life than television. Because telephone can help people save time, energy and also achieve a good pattern of life.

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发表于 2010-8-19 23:55:02 |只看该作者

不好意思，明天给你改好，今天有点忙！

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发表于 2010-8-20 18:24:38 |只看该作者

20100817 homework
telephone 还是television对人类的有more effects

Nowadays, most of people have their own telephones and televisions in home. Both of them bring people lots of benefits like convenience and joys and gradually become an important part in our daily life. Personally, I firmly believe that compared with televisions, telephones have more effects on modern world.

It is universally agreed that televisions bring a host of TV programs, like soap operas and talk shows, greatly matching people's need in entertainment. People can relax themselves and free pressure from work and life via enjoying these TV program. But people are easily to get used and even devote themselves to looking TV shows. They spend so much time on TV that it totally disturbs their normal life. For example, youngsters would enjoy TV while eating some rubbish food all the time. This attracts their attention from study on these TV programs and at the same time, causing obesity problems to threaten their health. Such bad habits need to be changed; otherwise, their whole life would be ruined.  我的作文里，丝毫没提电视的事。因为我是不知道两者该怎么比。觉得作者这样一贬一仰是种方法，学到了！！

Telephone can be defined as a special tool, a tool that can help people reach anyone wherever he or she is. This can make delivery of messages very shortly and conveniently. People can get free themselves from delivery of message using birds and horses, which might take thousands of time. For example, it would take nearly two days to get a message from New York to Chicago via horses in 18th century. Now, the two days can be shortened into a couple of seconds via telephone. What is more, people not only deliver messages but also receive responding simultaneously. Therefore, with the help of telephone, people can talk like they are sitting together. % m+ |2 N+ ^1 n4 J  D

Also, telephone communication also saves lots of energy in society. Only a little electricity power and some metal device are needed to make telephone available. It is obviously more economical via telephone than other methods like horsing as mentioned before. 2 n3
Beside, telephone can help change people’s life style in a positive way. In old times, people spent several days on transportation to visit their friends but finally found the absence of their friends. With telephones, they would have an appointment with friends. Therefore, a good life pattern is produced. 稍微结构上有点乱.

To sum up, I would like to get a conclusion that telephone has more positive effects on people life than television. Because telephone can help people save time, energy and also achieve a good pattern of life.  K$ R9 ~5 D. J# K$ G
我感觉作者写的挺好的。文章结构脉络清晰。没有废话。
句子写得好。没有什么问题。
词汇比较丰富。
作者值得我学习的地方很多呀！！！

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