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第8天 I48

TOPIC: ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
WORDS: 543

TIME: 00:47:15
DATE: 2010/2/17 14:33:36

In this article, author suggested that groups of people attributes more than famous individuals and the study of history should emphasis on former rather than latter. I could not be more agreed with that point of view.

First of all, in most events, famous individuals always represented a group of specific people whose trends and concepts leads those important history events. Without a particular representative for those thoughts, it is hard for present people to study those histories and learn from it. But in other word, by analysis those famous individuals, people nowadays should not ignore those forgotten groups of people who played important roles in those events as well. It is them who really contributed their lives to lead the improvement of human society. For example, if we only remember Martin Luther King as who leads the African-American civil rights movement, and ignore those African-Americans who support him and fight for their fights, people nowadays may lose the truly meaning of the movement and forget those African-Americans nowadays who still need to be pay attention to and improve their rights in other respects. As we all know, the meaning of studying history is to remind present people of how important it is to have those human rights and how much responsibilities we have to remain and value our rights which the former people sacrifice their lives for.

Second, history is a subject which analysis the former history of human being, by which means dig out what is the truth of things that happened and remind presents people of those heroes. If only pay attention to those famous individuals who we already known, historians will easily ignore a lot important contribution which supported those individuals to their achievement. So that it is not only those famous people worth to pay attention to, but also those anonymous groups of people those seems like have been forgotten need to be pay attention to. And by recall those history, we could give a whole perspective of more overall variety of history events which can help the study of history to get improvement.

Last but not least, history is a gathered report of human activities, and without considers both famous individuals and hard to be recorded anonymous group, the study of history won't get perfection and have little value of it. By well-studied events, people nowadays can learn from it and avoid those mistakes our former made. Moreover, by learning the history, we could value those attribution of former people and try to do something ourselves just like what those great former people did for make our society a better living place. Additionally, if only people pay attention to those famous individuals which seems like teach people how to be a great hero instead of being a not very eye-catching normal people, will make people nowadays forget the basic responsibilities of their work and chase for extra attention of their selves. As far as I'm concerned, this concept is not so good for the harmony of society, and may cause some conflictions.

To sum up, the study of history should place more emphasis on groups of people who made contribution of important history events and remind people nowadays of those groups of people whose identities could easily been forgotten.

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第8天 A10

TOPIC: ARGUMENT10 - The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Batavia newspaper.

"The department of agriculture in Batavia reports that the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago. During this same time period, however, the price of milk at the local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.50 to over $3.00 per gallon. To prevent farmers from continuing to receive excessive profits on an apparently increased supply of milk, the Batavia government should begin to regulate retail milk prices. Such regulation is necessary to ensure both lower prices and an adequate supply of milk for consumers."
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TIME: 00:34:04
DATE: 2010/2/17 14:33:36

In this argument, author try to convince us to cut down the price of milk by giving evidence as the number of dairy farms has increased and the price of milk is increased as well. These evidences lack of credibility and the conclusion is not reasonable for the marketing requirement.

First of all, the information gave in the article that the number of dairy farms throughout the country is 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago could not infer that the supplement of milk is sufficient for the market. The population might increase more rapidly than the farms and people nowadays shared less quantities of milk than 10 years earlier. Even assuming that the dairy supplement is adequate for the population nowadays throughout the country, still cannot infer that local milk supply in Batavia is sufficient. Otherwise, the department of agriculture in Batavia seems like a local institution judged by its name, which might not give the report so credible for national wide. Lacking those further respects mentioned above, author made the conclusion too hastily and without accuracy.

Second, the price of milk at the local Excello Food Market has increased could not reason that the milk price is increased national wide or even could not infer that local milk price is increased. This argument did not given the information about this market at these details as the customer levels, the quality of goods and other respects. By supplying high quality of milk which is much better than regular milk, it certain could this market charge a much higher price than former times when the quality of milk is normal in this market. Otherwise, it could be other reason for this increasing of price such as it is a tornado coming and every family needs store more food or milk supply in other supermarket is stopped for some reason and in this area, the Excello Food Market is the only market still sells milk. Without further information about the milk price in this area, we could not make a rash conclusion about this. Even assuming that milk price is increasing throughout this area, there still are other reasons for it as well such as inflation. In that case, farmers did not receive excessive profits on this increased supply of milk.

Additionally, price increasing might not just happen in dairy but also other foods increased. At mean time average salary might also have been increased as well. So that author should not judge the price by literal price but also concerning economic surrounding. Without any intervene by the government, local people are already having the milk supply as low price and adequate. Even assuming that the local government limits the retail milk prices, it still cannot make sure an adequate supply of milk for consumers just by this policy. If there is really such problems exited about local dairy market, author should give better suggestions about how to reach the goal mentioned in this article.

To sum up, the evidence author gave lacks of credibility and the solving measure is not good enough for those problems author mentioned above. By improve this letter, author should take an overall observation of local dairy market and do some further studies about it, then consider a better measure of those problems latter.

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