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2.14 独立

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2.14 综合

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修改：2.11综合

The aticle depcits the portiait is teenage of Austen, however the professor listed three topics aganist the article.

Firstly, the portrait was shown in 1882, Jane had dead for 70 years the family have never seen her themselves, so that the article mentioned the image cannot be truly Austen.

Secondly, many members in family were teenage like Austen in that time. And someone has recognized the girl in the picture was another people in Austen's family.

Thirdly, the canve has problmes. The seller didn't sell canva when Austen was young, the canva is popular when Austen was young.

三个点都很明确的挑出来了，观点没有问题，捕捉的很准确。不过字数太少了一点哦~
缺少了介绍文章的观点，这样就体现不出对比。

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Do you agree with the following statement? Some people think to watch a movie in a cinema is better, but others think at home is better.

Nowadays, most of movies are attractive, many people choose to go to cinema rather than staying at home, which is a trend. So some arguments have stood up, that is watching movies at home. (这句没明白，考虑修改Therefore, some people with different arguments stand up, they claim that watching movies at home provides more fun.)From my point of view, cinema is the perfect place to enjoy a movie.

With the development of technology, the sound and image in the cinema can be fantastic（become far more fantastic than before）. What I know is that, something like Dolby Sound, 3-D image, Imax and so forth,( enable the effect in cinema to be more realistic, )which make audiences feel live in the movie. because of the effect in cinema that is more realistic ever before(按语义顺序 这里提前比较好理解). When you （people）watch movie at home, most of home cinema systems (有most，前后都用复数)cannot compare with cinema. As the effect of movie（Considering the effect of movie）, most of movies is(are) valuable seen in the cinema.

Furthermore, the atmosphere over(感觉over不合适) the cinema is better than at home. When you sit in the audience, （you）laughed around the cinema when some jokes happened, screamed for something horrible suddenly appeared on the huge screen, signed for the hero failed to get true love, and standing(stood to give) ovation for some impressive images (with a number of other audiences) ,which are not met at home (建议时态用现在时) .
When (Since)you have many companies to enjoy the movie, the cinema must be wonderful.

To sum up, watching movie should invite the friends to go to cinema, after all, movie is an entertainment activity. (Watching movie is an entertainment that is supposed to enjoy together with friends in the cinema.) Watching movie at home cannot taste the real (favor of) movie.

从观影效果和影院氛围两点入手论证，观点清晰，结构完整。就是内容少了些，能充实些就更好了。
此外，有些句子结构有点问题，需要多注意些喔。
加油！:loveliness:

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2.11 综合
The aticle depcits the portiait is teenage of Austen, however the professor listed three topics aganist the article.
Firstly, the portrait was shown in 1882, Jane had dead for 70 years the family have never seen her themselves, so that the article mentioned the image cannot be truly Austen.
Secondly, many members in family were teenage like Austen in that time. And someone has recognized the girl in the picture was another people in Austen's family.
Thirdly, the canve has problmes. The seller didn't sell canva when Austen was young, the canva is popular when Austen was young.