【独立写作】sodapeng 托福写作

SYNCIAUID：3130718

  已经修改啦~ 多交流！

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已改~LZ文写的很好，看了take care 那篇，很受启发……感觉看了你写的，觉得我写的完全角度有问题的感觉………………

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po上以前写的822作文~~多交流哇~~
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Compared with people who live in urban areas, the people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.
The past decade has witnessed the remarkable changes in the urban areas.; As urban areas is regarded as symbol of hi-technology and high salary, more and moremany people think prefer rushing into the urban areas to pursue their dreams, where also has more facilitated medical condition and higher education institution. These things allow helping them people to earn more money to take better care of their families. While others claim that the people live in urban areas are busily engaged in their work that they don’t have enough time to look after their families. I side up with the former issue, the reasons are as follows.

It would be of use to begin by examingWe may with propriety consider that living in urban areas is convenient. As incredible development had taken place in technology, people have more alternatives in transportation. Subway, only accessible in urban area, enables people to arrive their destination in a shorter time. For instance, it may takes people liveing in rural areas 2 hours on commuting everyday by bus which may takes  half of time in urban areas by subway and taxi. Thus it people in urban areas can save a lot of time on commuting and spend more time with family members. Furthermore, the shopping mall and the hospital are placing in all parts of the area, it is convenient for the resident to go shopping and take medical treatment.

At the same time it is true to say that in contrast with limited medical facilities of rural areas, those in cities are more advanced. Lacking of specialized doctors and improved equipments, clinics in rural areas can only cure a few aliments, such as flu and cold. Nonetheless, when facing more intricate diseases, the things they can do are resigning themselves to witness the patience to death or send to larger hospital. It is not common for us to hear the news that people’s disease deteriorated or even lead to death after getting medical treatment in rural areas. How can we take care of our family members even if we cannot ensure their security?  

Undoubtedly, some rural areas are less polluted, people may do not have to worry about the hazard of eating polluted food, thus stay healthy. In fact, since the constructing of industry production base has been forbidden in urban areas, they moved to the rural areas, which lead a series of environment problem. Because of lots polluted air and water which exhaled the pungent odor have been put away, thesey things are very likely doing to do harm to the people livinge in the rural areas and may lead to more serious problems subsequently.

Taking into account all these factors, we may safely draw the conclusion that people living in urban areas can take better care of their families.

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诶诶。。又是写过的~~~ 同组的童鞋帮忙改下这篇啦~

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  两篇已改好，多交流啦~~~

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sodapeng 发表于 2012-8-22 11:42
好吧。21 22 的作业都是写过的。。所以写了其他题。。。辛苦同组童鞋啦。。
ps synica童鞋我把21题目以前写 ...

OK啦，那你帮我看看我的哈，如果有什么不同的思路，就批改一下哈，嘿嘿

sodapengUID：3242849

好吧。21 22 的作业都是写过的。。所以写了其他题。。。辛苦同组童鞋啦。。
ps synica童鞋我把21题目以前写的弄丢了。。po不上来了，，
tpo15 综合

SYNCIAUID：3130718

Soda，两篇我都看了。改了physical exercise这一篇。 感觉professor这篇你的topic和我们的微微有些不同吧。 所以结论都有差别。

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LZ我改的是你之前贴的那篇哈～

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SYNCIA 发表于 2012-8-21 16:57
也许是点子提出来，比较难展开。我看看先哈。
soda别忘了po上professor的呀，我今天写得焦头烂额滴...

哎呀= =、、忘记鸟~~~
现在po上~
As the flourishing development has taken place in the field of education, many doctors and scientists are devoting themselves to the education. Thus, they can impart the knowledge and newly developed technology to undergraduates, offering the opportunity for the student to make more progress. While others stand on the opposite ground, they argue that the professors, highly-educated individuals, have paid too much attention to students, and to some extent, ignore the importance of doing research. They are equipped with profound knowledge but do not do research at all, which is kind of wasting human resources. I side with the latter issue. The reason is as follows.

Doing research is a kind of study, professors can promote their own development and the students can benefit from the researching in the meantime. Just as the old saying goes: never too old to learn. Doing research forces the professors to combine what they have learnt before with the newly developed theories and then professors apply these theories to the research, which is a good way for professor to enrich themselves. On the other hand, doing research allows professors to be the top of a subject that they teach and students will obtain overall and profound knowledge in a specific realm

For student, participating in the research is an effective way to combine the knowledge they have learnt in class with the practice, which is very useful for a students further studying. Take me for an instance. Last semester, I was lucky to be a member of research program. At the beginning, I knew nothing about the project. However, with the assistance of professor and seniors, I begun to search the correlative document and did some fundamental work in the laboratory. Although it was very difficult for me to understand the theory I never gave up. What I had learnt is not only some profound theory but also the how to analyze problem I was facing, which I will never acquaintance without this opportunity. Therefore, undergraduates can also benefit a lot from the professor’s research.

Admittedly, professors may be fully occupied by doing research, and to some extent, will be distracted from educating the students. Reasonable as it seem to be, as we all know that professors take no more than five classes a week, and they have considerable time to do research. Hence, professors can make arrangement of their time, ensuring that both of their classes and research can be successfully carried on.

Doing research can make full use of the professors’ time and knowledge, the result of the research may promote the development of science technology. Why not do it? Thus, I strongly believe that professor should spare his time both to educating and researching rather than only focusing on the teaching.

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sodapeng 发表于 2012-8-21 12:20
鉴于昨儿的作文又写过了。。所以拜托同组童鞋帮忙改下这篇吧。。。辛苦了~~
话说synica童鞋。。最后还是写 ...

也许是点子提出来，比较难展开。我看看先哈。
soda别忘了po上professor的呀，我今天写得焦头烂额滴...

sodapengUID：3242849

鉴于昨儿的作文又写过了。。所以拜托同组童鞋帮忙改下这篇吧。。。辛苦了~~
话说synica童鞋。。最后还是写了交盆友那个点。。。因为憋了半天。。mental influence 还是没憋出来= =。。。

SYNCIAUID：3130718

soda，看了你8.18的作文，一点小意见：
First,  Forrest Gump, obviously is a comedy with thoughful- provoking story.  用来举例，说服力不强。
Second, 第二个分论点完全可以再深化一下。

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8.17已改~..现在积分还不够没办法po上来
等下来发~~~
我和LZ一样都用了日本地震的例子哈..~但是觉得明显你写的比我好很多！学习了~~~:)