Daily Writing - WoYaoChiJiTui的作文本

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2月12日二战，希望作文再接再厉啦
大家共勉

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2.9独立
已改~

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2.9改

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2.9作业一篇
独立

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修改在这里，水平有限啦见谅

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写的很好啊~。。词语句型都变化都很多。。学习啦
既然能写到500多字 ，为什么不写两个正面一个反面这种形式的呢？应该更全面吧

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2月8日作业一篇
独立
修改的同学辛苦了，兔年吉祥

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改好了，写得不错~~主要是拼写问题要注意~

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2.5作业一篇
独立

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2月4日作业一篇
独立
修改的同学辛苦了，兔年吉祥

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新年快乐。

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2.3作业两篇
独立
综合
Happy new year 兔 you！！！
大过年的，修改的童鞋辛苦了

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Happiness is unversally valued as the ultimate nature of life and human beings would immediately go into rapture at the merely mention of this item. But interpretation of different people varies. For

may

part（）, the information I have acknowledged over past few years leads me to believe that people living in villeges are more successful and happier than those who go outside.

The first plain truth I'm presenting here is that outside world has been filled with competitions, which in some fields may be even treated as invisible battles - for example, competitions for job or promotion. Consistent with this situation, a news commentator just slightly exaggerates when he claims “It's not surprising at all if close friends abruptly fall out with each other over an interview opportunity”. According to social experts, people going outside have actually gone into the dilemma where under tremendous stress they have no choice but to fight for limited surviving resources. Seen as "Steam engines" by psychological theories, patience and energy of these citizens are always exhausted by long-time working and firece competition while success and happiness are still smiling on the horizon - visible but unreachable.（长句很多，是个优势，但是长短句要搭配使用就更好）
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On the contrary, things are totally different when it comes to the countryside. Though community there is less developed, residents living in the country need to be self-suffient(sufficient) in most aspects of life, which in turn makes them have less devotion to material things. Without that great pressure of survival, they are ready to enjoy an air of freedom and do something simply for physical and mental pleasure. Consequently, they are certain to accept the sense of joy more often in this relaxing atmosphere.! V" r5 |9 ^) n  U7 m2 C4 B

In addition, communicating furnishes another advantage of people in the country. As mentioned above, people who go outside are exposed to mountains of competitions which has caused them to fear contact others sincerely. That's because due to the large population in cities, any person may turn out to be their potnetial rival in sudden. Only by living alone can they feel a bit of safety. However, country people  have never suffered from this problem. Support comes from the fact in remote areas people tend to live together and share belongings to everyone - not only family members but also neighbors and even strangers. In this lifestyle, they are more willing to communicate with others, exchange ideas and then make friends. Now it is generally believed that friendship is one of the essential factor（s） in happiness and success since it is an emotional access to healthy mental conditions.（叙述得感觉有点冗长。。还是用电短句吧）
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To sum up, there is no doubt that people living in villeges are more successful and happier than those who go outside. Happiness and success - so at least it seems to me - have nothing to do with money or status but everything to do with freedom and satisfactory emotion. It is fair that those who are blind to this primary principle would only struggling for dream while countryside residents could live a happy and successful life

挺好的，就是看起来有点累。
对不起我的独立有点晚，我在2.3日中午会贴出来，求修改哟
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建议修整文风 将这篇文章改到450字左右 将有质的飞跃

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Happiness is unversally valued as the ultimate nature of life and human beings would immediately go into rapture at the merely mention of this item. But interpretation of different people varies. For may part（）, the information I have acknowledged over past few years leads me to believe that people living in villeges are more successful and happier than those who go outside.

The first plain truth I'm presenting here is that outside world has been filled with competitions, which in some fields may be even treated as invisible battles - for example, competitions for job or promotion. Consistent with this situation, a news commentator just slightly exaggerates when he claims “It's not surprising at all if close friends abruptly fall out with each other over an interview opportunity”. According to social experts, people going outside have actually gone into the dilemma where under tremendous stress they have no choice but to fight for limited surviving resources. Seen as "Steam engines" by psychological theories, patience and energy of these citizens are always exhausted by long-time working and firece competition while success and happiness are still smiling on the horizon - visible but unreachable.

On the contrary, things are totally different when it comes to the countryside. Though community there is less developed, residents living in the country need to be self-suffient(sufficient) in most aspects of life, which in turn makes them have less devotion to material things. Without that great pressure of survival, they are ready to enjoy an air of freedom and do something simply for physical and mental pleasure. Consequently, they are certain to accept the sense of joy more often in this relaxing atmosphere.

In addition, communicating furnishes another advantage of people in the country. As mentioned above, people who go outside are exposed to mountains of competitions which has caused them to fear contact others sincerely. That's because due to the large population in cities, any person may turn out to be their potnetial rival in sudden. Only by living alone can they feel a bit of safety. However, country people  have never suffered from this problem. Support comes from the fact in remote areas people tend to live together and share belongings to everyone - not only family members but also neighbors and even strangers. In this lifestyle, they are more willing to communicate with others, exchange ideas and then make friends. Now it is generally believed that friendship is one of the essential factor（s） in happiness and success since it is an emotional access to healthy mental conditions.

To sum up, there is no doubt that people living in villeges are more successful and happier than those who go outside. Happiness and success - so at least it seems to me - have nothing to do with money or status but everything to do with freedom and satisfactory emotion. It is fair that those who are blind to this primary principle would only struggling for dream while countryside residents could live a happy and successful life

500字 用词精当 例子充实 绝对是接近满分的文章
然而接近不代表真正拿到满分 高分的文章 绝不在于炫耀你字数的多少， 而是增一分则嫌多 减一分则嫌少   
这篇文章 在用词上一流 在表意上却拖沓   最多只能到28的水平