Daily Writing Camp-作文特训小组--wendy的作文贴，欢迎互改

wendy316UID：2566643

这是 本人的第2篇独立作文，用时2小时（好久啊，憋着出来的），8月27日考试，看了论坛上很多人写的之后，决定鼓足勇气交流下（总觉得自己只有高中水平），谢谢大家，欢迎互改。


9/11/2009
Do you agree with the following statement?
It is only worth watchingmovies that can teach us something about real life?


Movies, presenting everything to youin a straightforward form, play a significant role that can provide us experiencesin our social life, reflect miscellaneous historical senes, tell a fairy tale andgive us sufficient fantasy about the furture. Thus, we can hardly choose which movie we deserve to watch, as they all offer disparate informations that we need.

Admittedly, integrant movies relateand reflect reality in our current socity, reminding us the qualities we shouldhave. Forrest Gump, a movie which descibes a man acted by famous star Tom Hanks only have IQ of 75 and deformed legs when he was young, is inspring us. Although he suffered from these unfair destiny, his optimistic and fortitude spiritcolored his life which include being a shining member of football team incampus, being a hero who saved people lives in Vietnam War, being an ambassador representing the USA to join in the Pingpong competition in China and so on. As all the things he get through, he has a cathching phrase that life is like a bottle of chocalate, and you never know what you are going to get.

However, some movies are delectable for the eyes and other sensations. At the first glance, you would impress by the magnificant scene in three-dimension, four-dimension and IMAX. That’s why you like the series of Transformers, isn’t it? Hot and Sexy Magan Fox, imposing “blownup” in the battle scenes, and the moment that the autobots tansform dazzle theeyes. We pay our tickets to appreciate these, and it bears watching.

Moreover, it ls absolutely true that people nowadays undergo great pressure that come from various directions, including work, school, economy and so forth. Investigation shows that we should release pressure in appropriate ways, such as watching comedy movies. Kungfu Panda teaches us no more than that the good will always defeat the evil or youcan success if you really do your best. Whereas, it is fun that Po, the panda do Kungfu, do some cute movements and say something entertaining. Funny movies provide a temporary escape for the views who may betired because of either high-pace jobs or heavy study tasks. When it comes to reliving stress, noting is better than big langhs.

In summary, there are multifarious movies which bring us experience in real life, visual impact and happiness are definitely worth to watch. Only through watching, can we enjoy all the taste of movies, not only about teaching us in the real life.

april0515UID：2997208

23# wendy316 改好啦~不好意思 迟了些

wendy316UID：2566643

呵呵，莫惊慌，要淡定。 22# carol0607

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21# wendy316


刚过来瞅瞅 发现之前发的批改不见鸟 把我吓得

我就又发了一遍  等发完了 页面又显示之前的了……郁闷……

wendy316UID：2566643

肿么了？ 20# carol0607

carol0607UID：3022610

~

carol0607UID：3022610

sorry  来迟了

qnwh2011UID：3148380

17# qnwh2011
A team, containing plentiful members in the same field, has numerous and various opinions may have negative influence to success. How can they deal with one thing with manifold methods? How can they spend lots of time just to discuss whose(which one’s )idea is better (perfect)? How can they have different principles to make an excellent team? The answer is definitely no, thus, they demand just one significant way to solve the problem and get to a victory as a team (in their occupationis ( I would rather to get rid of this part).

To begin with, team members have their own thoughts reflect that they have different principles in their particular ways. In China, an old proverb said by Confucius “There is no point on people taking counsel together who follow different ways”, which is really convinced that different people who have their own thoughts can not get together as an ally. For instance, one of my classmats and I were doing the same experiment as a team to get 355nm laser, however, we modeled the different structures of laser resonator to obtain the output laser at 355nm. I just insisted my method has more efficiency and energy than his. After a long discussion, we can not come to an agreement. So we decided to do experiment separately that we can prove which structure is the best. Thus a team holding different can hardly success as a team.

Moreover, team members who have their own views may cause the project don’t move quickly. Why? Because it took so long to reach consensus; it took numbers of meetings to reach an agreement among the team members. On the other hand, there were other instances where one or two people play the key role to make the final decision of a team (managed to become very influential over what their group did). Following their thoughts, when influencers said “It will never work” that the idea would be dropped instead of being further discussed. And even though some of views were really brilliant, they would never shine in this team. Can you guess the ending to this project? It failed since the moment they held various view about one project and could not get the solution.

To sum up, It is too hard for a team that gets many members, having their own different opinions, to achieve success. (I think the end can write a little bit more, then it will be very perfect.)

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16# wendy316
TPO 4

In the lecture and the reading passage, the speaker focuses on whether the dinosaurs are the endotherms, which keep their bodies temperature constant.( the first sentence is kind of confusing for me because I don’t know how to correct it, hehe)The professor
gives three evidences to prove that dinosaurs are not the endotherms, which contradicts to the points (that) in the lecture.

To begin with, only endotherms can keep their body temperate in the normal range even surrounded by cold atmosphere like the polar regions where the dinosaurs’ fossils have been found. This directly contracts what the speaker says there are two possibilities that dinosaurs are not endotherms. Firstly, the weather that the fossil created was much warmer than today in polar region. Secondly, the dinosaurs may migrate to warmer region during the hash climate.

Moreover, the issue of leg position and movement being used as a reason to classify that the dinosaurs are not endotherms does not please the professor either. It is said that the legs of dinosaurs which are in the position of underneath body can support the enormous body weights, but not to sustain the physical movement, for instance running.

Furthermore, the professor points out that the presence of haversian canals but also implies the growth rings which appear in fossils. These rings due to the thickening that indicates the dinosaurs weren’t actually growing continuously, but to stop growing or grow slowly in the chilly climate. This pattern perfectly fit the character of endotherms(I think we should cut off this sentence, how do you think?).

To sum up, all the evidences of the lecture indicate that the speaker disagreed with the points that mentioned in the reading passage.


Thank you very much for revising my articles. As far as I can see, there are only several minor mistakes in yours. Let’s work together to crack Toefl writing.

wendy316UID：2566643

8月9日的独立和综合

冰雪蜂鸟UID：2754485

综合的修改随后奉上~

sunboyqq16UID：2937158

Finished!
综合&独立 revised by sunboy

lyn7981UID：2758158

8.8 独立 Annie修改稿
看了楼主的文章实在觉得功底差很多，请楼主多多指导我的作文：https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1284659-3-1.html

wendy316UID：2566643

2011年8月8日的综合作文，TPO3

wendy316UID：2566643

2011年8月8日的独立作文，谢谢与我互改的同学哈。