【Daily Writing 作文特训小组】『无尽、HD』的作文练习帖

foreverendlessUID：3134774

今天开帖，8.28，虽然是新增考试，据说是新题，希望好好打基础先。。。还是对自己有信心的
G考砸了，托福先好好准备吧。。一步一步来。如果有各种意见麻烦各种拍砖！直接大红字修改嗯！

今天第一次写综合写作，听力不太好，肯定会漏不少要点，直接把写的原文贴上来了，只改了错词，有理解错误的地方一定指出！

tequilawineUID：2702008

sorry for late,

wq1102UID：2962374

9.8 改好了~

wencheng2961188UID：2826634

70# foreverendless

9月8日独立

楼主跑题啦。

Nowadays, the whole society puts more focus on the scientific development, especially the government (去掉吧). A lot of inventions are based on the scientific research, which is funded by local government. Since the scientific research has significant meanings to human beings, the government should continue to support this process, as I think.

开题没扣题啊。题目是问是否同意政府支持无实际用处的研究。你说成应该支持scientific research 没有限定到题目给的范围内。

First and foremost, although some scientific research has no practical use at ^a certain time, it provides background for ^the future development. Scientific research is a relatively long process, which needs continuing investment and contribution (这个词用在这句话不恰当。). The government should value more on the progress and experience, analyzing why people don't prefer the products based on ^the related technology. (感觉你认为没有practical use 的东西就是人们不需要的产品。但我认为目前有应用价值的东西就是有practical use的。) Only does (去掉) focusing on the results contributes nothing to the progress. Take Apple's smartphone as example. In 2000, Apple launched a PDA called Newton, which was under long time researching. (Apple took a long time to research a PDA called Newton) The related technology was named handset input devices. In fact, the sales were low because people didn't know when to use it (不知道什么时候去用它。没理解。). However, in the past 10 years, the US government has done a lot to promote mobile device development, including hiring more researchers worldwide and investing on building 4G network. (美国政府投资4G网和mobile device研究都是人们大众能用的到的东西。是有practical use的， 即使不挣钱也是有用的。) As a result, after iPhone was launched with many innovative and human based functions, Apple now becomes the world's most profitable smartphone company. Also, the States has the most advanced mobile technologies in the world.

感觉除了例子不对劲外。语言没什么可改的。可能是我太差了。


Furthermore, compared with practical uses, lots of scientific researches (is (are) more influential)改(have more influence) on the whole（去掉） society. From ecosystem to medical equipment, several researches aim at improving (这个词修饰人类不太恰当吧) both the human beings and environments. The core functions of (我感觉aim at的 和 core function 应该是一个东西才对啊) such researches are to convey ideas to the public about the importance of saving our planet.

So the government can depend on such research as a media. Take electric cars as example. It took Honda, a Japanese motor manufacturer, nearly 20 years to develop. Although it required a huge amount of money, the Japanese government supported the company all the time.(尽管它需要很多钱，政府还是一直支持他。这和题目没有关系啊。应该是即使它没有用，政府还是支持他啊) This project successfully brought the idea of clear fuels and ^was environmental friendly to common people. Nowadays, Japan has the highest rate of electric cars in the world, which directly relates to the support of the government.

感觉举的例子不恰当啊。文法没什么错误。润饰句子方面我真的帮不上什么忙。惭愧！

In a summary, scientific research means a lot (contributes) not only to the background to (of) the future development, but also ^to the benefits of (去掉) the society. Admittedly, some scientific researches is (are) not worth to be invested, so the government should have clear criteria to prevent this from happening. (楼主太跑题了) In some countries, it's acceptable that there are numbers of restrictions about funding to the research. As a consequence, such bad influences are eliminated. If governments in more countries can support local scientific research, we will have more comfortable lives in ^the near future.

darlingruiruiUID：2840976

谢谢大家
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Working at home using computers or telephones is better than working in the office.

It totally changes the traditional conception of working place since the computers and telephones came into being. Some people prefer to work in home rather than at office since it is convenient for them to arrange their time and enjoy a more comfortable working environment. However, I still stick to agree with that we should work at office.

To start with, it is really at office offer us a working atmosphere because lots of our workmates are engaging in the hard affairs and how can we leave behind? That will encourage us to compete with them in order to finish the task better and faster. Also office is an open place that allows us to share work experience with our mates and when we encounter problems, it is easy to turn to them for help. The manager can also supervise his employees more directly and it is said that under someone's supervise people would perform better. That's all working at home cannot be comparable.

Second, not all work which will use telephone or computer is suit to work at home. For instance, if you are a secretary, you need use computer to deal with what your boss hands you and then arrange the workers with telephone or even face to face but how could it be done if you are at home. When you want to print some profiles, need you buy a printer at home and pay for a high electric fee at the end of the month? If you still say yes, do not you think that it is more respectful or necessary to talk with others face to face which can let people see your sweet smile and feel warm rather than hear the cold and simply voice?

Although I have to admit that working at home really have such a convenience for us on many aspects. We can lie down on the bed, drink the cool beverage and even work when we are bathing or on the toilet. But we should also consider our family members and work efficiency. The manager cannot evaluate the workers and when pay for them the bonus, it is harder for him to decide who deserves and workers may have lots of complains because none of them know whether they really do their best at home. However, work at office can avoid all these unnecessary problems.

Overall, work is such a strict thing that needs no errors or mistakes approximately and work at office also helps to develop a positive work environment which can prompt the company up always. At the meanwhile, we also receive a lot of friendship. So I cannot find other reasons to persuade me not to work at office.

darlingruiruiUID：2840976

谢谢大家
有些人觉得他们可以靠自己或者家人的帮助，解决important problems.因此，人们不需要政府的帮助。
Every person is a single union of the society and the gathering of them consist of the government and nation. To some extent, the problem they face is also the challenge to the country, however, when the problem relates to personal enthusiasm(emotion) they will get help from their friends or family instead. So in my opinion, who we ask for when we encounter difficulties depends on the problem itself.

To start with, it is the responsibility of country to help its people to get out of the hard time and secure their safety or rights when someone intents to infringe. What's more, some problems can be only solved by the government, for instance, the war between two countries, weapons are controlled by the government and they should fight for freedom for its people and never let the invaders to occupy the land or their culture. Also the government is the representative and only the government has the ability and right to negotiate with the world to get a peaceful environment for well developing. You can take the Second World War as the example. Another thing I want to say is that the law is drafted by country and only they have the ability to fulfill it when people's rights are despoiled such as the food safety, the fair opportunities for people to employ or even the basic living rights. So you see above, the problem can not be dissolved by people themselves and we should depend on country.

Another thing that we can't solve by ourselves in the country is the living environment. Because we hand out much tax to government and what they need to do is to ameliorate the condition we live in. Such as build the roads, set up more parks and provide more instruments for people to develop their physics health and offer more places to enhance citizen's spiritual level. All will need a lot of money and should be well projected. Just depend on personal viewpoints are not only a waste of time with low efficiency but also hardly to get an unify. If this dissatisfaction accumulates for a long time, it will definitely shake the stabilization of the country. So it is the problem needs the country to compromise.

Although our government has so many abilities, they will do little help on personal emotional problems. At this time, it is better for us to turn to our relatives and friends because they know more than any other communities or organizations. They may be more willing to be a good listener to our difficulties such as the lovelorn or the quarrelling with family members and provide us solutions sincerely. If we ask for help from the governments, I admit they will give their hands but they may not deal with them in time or may increase the difficulty. So under this circumstance, families and friends is the first choice than others.

In sum, different problems turn to different people. Never pretend to be bravados or be a useless person, then all problems will be solved easily and what we need to do at last is to enjoy the happy life in harmony.

darlingruiruiUID：2840976

我的作文也求批改啊，谢谢大家了
题目：Do you agree with the following statement? People holding different views cannot achieve success as a team.

Everyone in the team works together and shares sorrow and happiness since they always have the same goal to achieve success. When encounter a problem, they discuss with each other and come up various solutions. Then each approach will be carefully analyzed with its merits and shortages and members will finally select the best one or make a compromise. During this progress, there is often this circumstance that someone always takes the opposition and he is easily considered to be someone who is unharmonious and will not get success. However, I still think that a team really needs someone like that and someone like that may be more success than others.

For a team, I think it really needs a person who holds different views. For instance, when the team got a task or a problem, the first thing for them to do is to search for the materials about it and make their own ideas and solutions. When they took out their project, everyone was confident in their solution and thought it was perfect but indeed they may ignore some key points. However, if a person with cool brain can scrutinize the project carefully and even point out some faults. That would help the team avoid some unnecessary troubles or lost or help them reach the destination more directly. Because I think a real good team is one that lets its members to present different opinions and others are willing to accept them or even make a concession. Finally they put out a well-discussed project and get a success, what they receive is not only just on the economy but a better understanding of their mates and the reliance on them. It is more important for a team to develop rather than get a success.

Also, as an individual, I think he should equip a critical thinking, never accept an idea easily or refuse it absolutely. Because in a team, it needs a person to lead the team and have the responsibility for it. This person is not someone to make everyone happy but can guide them by right means. And this can make him outstanding from others and can easily be appreciated by his manager. It could be an opportunity for him to prompt up. Then I will say this behavior makes him more easily success than others. His advantages are shown during this situation especially his wisdom. Even this person may be not the best or the cleverest among workers but his ability to hold the whole situation is a basic requirement of a leader or a successor and his shortages can be compensated(弥补) by his team. So the person like that has more chances to get success.

Additionally, I have to admit that someone with opposite ideas may make others feel boring or even they will isolate him or expel him out of the team but if he can explain his intention well to his mates and let them know he has no offence. I think a rational one will more likely to work with this person. It is also a chance for them to check themselves and really a process to improve oneself. It is an interaction which is benefit for both sides.

Overall, I will reiterate my view that a team needs such a person who can shout out a team's errors and endure others' scoffs can help it form a good working atmosphere and make it have more competitiveness and one with that character will have a great mind to success. You know what I mean--independence but never separation or isolation.

foreverendlessUID：3134774

9.8 不好意思传的太晚了

heyxUID：2943262

修改好了！~

永动鸡UID：3006486

RE.
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heyxUID：2943262

65# foreverendless
我点了回复后，出现参与/回复主题的界面，没看到上传附件的按钮？在那边？

谢谢了，我知道我的权限不够！~要多回点帖子~

hanqiUID：2313191

改好了，基本没怎么改。不同的点都提到了的，也没什么小毛病。呵呵，膜拜一下

foreverendlessUID：3134774

这个

heyxUID：2943262

63# foreverendless
没找到，难道我的回复界面，不一样吗？楼主可不可以给个截图啊~麻烦了

foreverendlessUID：3134774

62# heyx

帖子拖到最上面点回复，里面有添加附件，注意是doc不要用docx