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本帖最后由 raikkonen36 于 2014-10-26 16:50 编辑
tesolchina 发表于 2014-10-26 13:19
People have long received great concern on the issue of how to create leaders. However, a widely r ...
谢谢老师的建议。括号内的是修改的。
People have long expressed great concern on the issue of how leaders are created . However, a widely recognized consensus on the issue has yet to be established, with one voice indicating that leaders are created by the demands that are placed on them. In my view, the demands that are placed on one indeed contribute to the process of becoming a leader. Nonetheless, the importance of one’s ability in the process should not be ignored. In fact, being a leader is always the result of the combination of both.
第一段那个receive concern是看到下面有个 attention回头来改的, 好像记得有个instigated/caused much concern弄混了,下次宁愿写重复的,也不愿写个没把握,不清楚的。那个has yet established,自己又出问题了 想写 has not yet established的。这个可以吗? how to create leaders 当时写的脑子里闪过,就没细看了。觉得考试哪有那么多时间,出什么问题到时再解决,希望多暴露点问题。
It is true that the demands that are placed on one plays a significant role for one to be a leader.
Such demands can stimulate one to fight against the challenges ahead, during which one could improve oneself continuously. In addition, meeting such demands can get widespread support, which lays a solid foundation for one to be a leader. For instance, under the Qin’s tyranny regime (tyranny), people lead a miserable life and have to face the dangers of starvation, exposure, and even death. Thus, people hope that one can overthrow the Qin’s regime and establish a new regime, and provide them with a chance of enjoying peaceful and happiness life. Under (in) this backdrop, Liu Bang, a functionary, devotes to meeting such demands. After four years of fighting, he lives up to the demands at last by the support of widespread support (the widespread support) and as a result, becomes the founding father of the Han dynasty.
那个under backdrop 又跟那个circumstance记混了。
Nonetheless, one’s ability should also receive great attention for one to be a leader, because the leader who is not able to handle challenges successfully always has to leave the leader position. For instance, if a football club does not get expected achievement, its manager would be dismissed. If, in a company, the manger cannot make his shareholders more profitable (create wealth for shareholders), he will be fired. If, in a state, the governor does not deal with some issues successfully, he would have to leave his position. Facing aggressive actions of Hitler, Chamberlain, the UK Prime Minister at that time, adopts the policy of appeasement. But, along with the Germany invasion of Poland in 1939, the Chamberlain government collapses instantaneously and he has to leave the leader position.
In fact, being a leader is always the result of the combination of the demands that are placed on one and one’s ability. If people have no opportunity to shoulder (satisfy)the demands that could be placed on them, they would have no chance to be leaders because there is no platform for them to show their ability and vice versa. Therefore, it is the combination of the demands that are placed on one and one’s ability that makes one being a leader. For instance, along with the collapse of Chamberlain government, the UK people are eager to have a leader who can lead them to fight against Hitler. They choose Churchill, who leads a retiring life as an average at that time. Why? As stated in Churchill’s memoir, if the event, the eruption of World War Two and the following collapse of the Chamberlain government, had not happened, he would have had no chance to outstand (distinguish) himself and be the UK Prime Minister. He was very excited for that he got the opportunity that leads the UK people to fight Hitler. The devotion of his past few years to hone him and thus be able to tackle different challenges successfully is the preparation for this moment.
In sum, the demands that are placed on one indeed play a significant role in the process of becoming a leader. Nonetheless, the importance of one’s ability in the process should not be ignored. In fact, being a leader is always the result of the combination of both.
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