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题目：ARGUMENT 42 - The following appeared in a proposal from the economic minister of the country of Paraterra.

"In order to strengthen its lagging economy, last year the government of the nearby country of Bellegea began an advertising campaign to promote ecologically sound tourism (ecotourism). This year the number of foreign visitors arriving at Bellegea's main airport doubled, and per capita income in Bellegea increased by ten percent. To provide more income for the population of Paraterra and also preserve the natural environment of our tiny country, we too should begin to promote ecotourism. To ensure that our advertising campaign is successful, we should hire the current director of Bellegea's National Tourism Office as a consultant for the campaign."
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In this argument, the arguer recommends that in order to strength the lagging economy, the governor should take the similar action as Bellegea and hire the current director for campaign. To support his or her suggestion, the arguer bases on the assumption that show that Bellegea have succeeded in the economic development. However, the detail condition of the two countries is unknown and the assumption is unwarranted.

To begin with, the arguer unfairly assumes that Bellegea's economic promotion by its tourism policy. The fact that the number of foreign visitors arriving at main airport doubled dose not necessary show the tourist really increases. It is quite possible that most of them just transfer airplane rather than stay there, and main airport's arriver doubled dose not guarantee the total augment of visitors. And even granted that the ecotourism is really attractable, it does not necessary means that economic development is the direct result of it. What is more, per capita income rises and at the same time the amount of capita decrease dramatically, the total income of Bellegea may not increase. Since the arguer can not provide additional information to substantiate the fact of economic development in Bellegea, the suggestion is ungrounded.

Even accepting the tourism of Bellegea really enhance the economic development, it still inconvincible to conclude that by adopting the same action, Paraterra can successfully achieve the same goal. Probably Bellegea is abundant of natural tourism resources, where live diversity rare animals or it is a beach country there the sun shines brightly on the surface of peaceful blue sea and boundless sand beach. Compared with Bellegea, Paraterra is only tiny country lacks interest place to visit. The policy of ecotourism is unsuitable there. In addition, without complementary  evidences, that ecotourism can definitely preserve the natural environment is ungrounded.

Last, hiring the current director of Bellegea's National Tourism Office as a consultant for the campaign to ensure a successful advertising campaign is like water without sources. The arguer does not provide information that the efficient performance of Bellegea's National Tourism Office constitutes the only factors leading to its advertising winning. It should also take into account that the reasons why Bellegea's National Tourism Office do well is due to its familiarity with the Bellegea’s environmental condition. Simply hire the office which does not master any information about Paraterra without consideration may possibly lead to a failure.

Since the argument has so many questions to clarify, it lacks ability to convince the other. To better support the argument, the arguer should offer additional information on the aspects such as the similarity of the two countries and the concrete performance of the Bellegea's National Tourism Office.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-9-5 at 16:58 ]

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In this argument, the arguer recommends that in order to strength the lagging economy, the governor should take the similar action as Bellegea and hire the current director for campaign. To support his or her suggestion, the arguer bases on the assumption that show这个地方表达有点怪怪的 that Bellegea have succeeded in the economic development. However, the detail condition of the two countries is unknown and the assumption is unwarranted.

To begin with, the arguer unfairly assumes that Bellegea's economic promotion （is caused） by its tourism policy从句缺谓语？. The fact that the number of foreign visitors arriving at main airport doubled dose not necessary show （that） the tourist really increases. It is quite possible that most of them just transfer airplane机场？or飞机？ rather than stay there, and main airport's arriver doubled dose not guarantee the total augment of visitors. And even granted that the ecotourism is really attractable, it does not necessary means that economic development is the direct result of it （是否有必要举个别的导致收入增加的例子？）. What is more, per capita income rises and at the same time the amount of capita decrease dramatically, the total income of Bellegea may not increase （因为人数少了？）. Since the arguer can not provide additional information to substantiate the fact of economic development in Bellegea, the suggestion is ungrounded.

Even accepting the tourism of Bellegea really enhance the economic development, it still inconvincible to conclude that by adopting the same action, Paraterra can successfully achieve the same goal. Probably Bellegea is abundant of natural tourism resources, where live diversity（改为various） rare animals or it is a beach country there the sun shines brightly on the surface of peaceful blue sea and boundless sand beach. Compared with Bellegea, Paraterra is only tiny country lacks interest place to visit. The policy of ecotourism is unsuitable there. In addition,（总结而不是另外一条原因，是否应去掉？） without complementary  evidences, that ecotourism can definitely preserve the natural environment is ungrounded.

Last, hiring the current director of Bellegea's National Tourism Office as a consultant for the campaign to ensure a successful advertising campaign is like water without sources. The arguer does not provide information that the efficient performance of Bellegea's National Tourism Office constitutes the only factors leading to its advertising winning. It should also take into account that the reasons why Bellegea's National Tourism Office do well is due to its familiarity with the Bellegea’s environmental condition. Simply hire the office which （who） does not master any information about Paraterra without consideration may possibly lead to a failure.（恩，好！）

Since the argument has so many questions to clarify, it lacks ability to convince the other. To better support the argument, the arguer should offer additional information on the aspects such as the similarity of the two countries and the concrete performance of the Bellegea's National Tourism Office.

考虑比较全面，只是批判的点多了以后，限于字数很难都展开

foreveraUID: 202035

In this argument, the arguer recommends that in order to strength the lagging economy, the governor should take the similar action as Bellegea and hire the current director for campaign. To support his or her suggestion, the arguer bases on the assumption that show that Bellegea have succeeded in the economic development.这句表达的不好~~~base不是作者主要的动作 However, the detail condition of the two countries is unknown and the assumption is unwarranted.好象不够全面吧

To begin with, the arguer unfairly assumes that Bellegea's economic promotion by its tourism policy从句没有主语. The fact that the number of foreign visitors arriving at main airport doubled dose not necessary show the tourist really increases. It is quite possible that most of them just transfer airplane 倒飞机的意思？rather than stay there, and main airport's arriver doubled dose not guarantee the total augment of visitors. And even granted that the ecotourism is really attractable, it does not necessary means that economic development is the direct result of it. What is more, per capita income rises and at the same time the amount of capita decrease dramatically, the total income of Bellegea may not increase这一点有点牵强。。。. Since the arguer can not provide additional information to substantiate the fact of economic development in Bellegea, the suggestion is ungrounded.

Even accepting the tourism of Bellegea really enhance the economic development, it still inconvincible to conclude that by adopting the same action, Paraterra can successfully achieve the same goal. Probably Bellegea is abundant of natural tourism resources, where live diversity rare animals or it is a beach country there the sun shines brightly on the surface of peaceful blue sea and boundless sand beach. Compared with Bellegea, Paraterra is only tiny country lacks interest place to visit. The policy of ecotourism is unsuitable there. In addition, without complementary  evidences, that ecotourism can definitely preserve the natural environment is ungrounded.

Last, hiring the current director of Bellegea's National Tourism Office as a consultant for the campaign to ensure a successful advertising campaign is like water without sources啥意思？. The arguer does not provide information that the efficient performance of Bellegea's National Tourism Office constitutes the only factors leading to its advertising winning. It should also take into account that the reasons why Bellegea's National Tourism Office do well is due to its familiarity with the Bellegea’s environmental condition. 举点具体的原因来Simply hire the office which does not master any information about Paraterra without consideration may possibly lead to a failure.

Since the argument has so many questions to clarify, it lacks ability to convince the other. To better support the argument, the arguer should offer additional information on the aspects such as the similarity of the two countries and the concrete performance of the Bellegea's National Tourism Office.

总体来说还比较不错~~~~

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