issue51---鄙人的第一篇习作(请求大家帮忙指点,谢谢!)

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51. Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.


People today place much more expectation on school than they used to do. The speaker asserts that the real effective way for education is especially designed to make the needs of the students' desire and interests. In my view, however, the speaker's statement is partly correct, and some other aspects also should be under deeply consideration.

First, consider the essence of the education the assertion makes its sense. As known to almost all the people, the effectiveness of education is to teach students the knowledge and the ways how to get them they want. Only relying on this, students will get the capability to solve the problems and make their lives easily. If the education could not meet the needs of the students and stir up their interests, how bad, we can image, the students will be, and how terrible the education is. Without good ability or great interests or both of them, poor, hunger and ignorance are their "good" friends that keep company with them through their lives, which disobeys the education's mission and effectiveness.

Yet the effective of education lies in its generalization. It means that education should be designed to be understood and accepted by the public. Generalization has its advantages to teachers and students and ultimately gets the goal of effectiveness. Take cartoon, a generalized education publisher, as an example, one, without much special knowledge, will grasp the meaning in a short time after he or she browse it. Another good example is Einstein's theory of relativity, compared with cartoon, it is hard to be understood by most people including the college students whose major is Physics. In Biology, when talking about recombination and repair, few people make clearly know about the details. So generalization is a most effective way for education.

Moreover, over-specified education will narrow down the students' ken and capability of acclimation for further career. A talent, good skill at mathematics, is only taught it for a long time and makes contact with formula and principle all the time. In this case, the possibility to ignorance to other fields is much larger than ordinary students taught with Biology, Chemistry, History, etc. Only with the capability to solve the mathematical problems, it may be hard for him to find a job, for capability of each other is related together among different fields. As more and more relationships are built up, over-specified education can not adapt for today's schools, teachers and students.

In sum, it seems that effective education should be designed to meet the receivers' desire and interests is completely correct, however, when consider more aspects, the speaker assertion begs the question. A good effective education should be designed to the public, amplify the students ken and improve the students' capability which is acquired by society.


请大家帮忙指出其中的好与不好,谢谢!

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原帖由 yuemugong 于 2008-2-19 19:21 发表
2楼说的和我想的不谋而合。另外，
First, consider the essence of the education the assertion makes its sense.搂主能不能帮我讲讲这句子的结构和意思，以及用它做为第二段论点的理由。我感觉有点儿问题拿捏不准

这句开头的consider应为considering吧,这样没语法错误了吧
当初写的时候是考虑到education的essence,觉得该issue讲的通,所以把教育的本质作为正面加以论述了,不知道是否可以^

同时感谢楼上的指点!

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2楼说的和我想的不谋而合。另外，
First, consider the essence of the education the assertion makes its sense.搂主能不能帮我讲讲这句子的结构和意思，以及用它做为第二段论点的理由。我感觉有点儿问题拿捏不准

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我觉得,有通才和专才来论证,没有用教育面向个人\社会这个角度来论证好.
不知道是否是这样..

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People today place much more expectation on school than they used to do. The speaker asserts that the real effective way for education is especially designed to satisify the needs of the students. In my view, however, the speaker's statement is partly correct, and some other aspects also also去掉么 should be under deeply consideration.

First, consider the essence of the education the assertion makes its sense. As known to almost all the people, the effectiveness of education is to teach students the knowledge and the ways how to get them they want. Only relying on this, students will get the capability to solve the problems and make their lives meaningful. If the education could not meet the needs of the students and stir up their interests, how bad, we can image, the students will be, and how terrible the education is. Without good ability or great interests or both of them, poor, hunger and ignorance are their "good" friends that keep company with them through their lives, which disobeys the education's mission and effectiveness.

Yet the effective of education lies in its generalization. It means that education should be designed to be understood and accepted by the public. Generalization has its advantages to teachers and students and ultimately gets the goal of effectiveness. Take cartoon, a generalized education publisher, as an example, one, without much special knowledge, will grasp the meaning in a short time after he or she browse it. Another good example is Einstein's theory of relativity, compared with cartoon, it is hard to be understood by most people including the college students whose major is Physics. In Biology, when talking about recombination and repair, few people make clearly comprehension about the details. So generalization is a most effective way for education.

Moreover, over-specified education will narrow down the students' ken and capability of acclimation for further career. A talent, good skill at mathematics, is only taught it for a long time and makes contact with formula and principle all the time. In this case, the possibility to ignorance to other fields is much larger than ordinary students taught with Biology, Chemistry, History, etc. Only with the capability to solve the mathematical problems, it may be hard for him to find a job, for capability of each other is related together among different fields. As more and more relationships are built up, over-specified education can not adapt for today's schools, teachers and students.

In sum, it seems that effective education should be designed to meet the receivers' desire and interests is completely correct, however, when consider more aspects, the speaker assertion begs the question. A good effective education should be designed to the public, amplify the students ken and improve the students' capability which is acquired by society

不知道这个观点能不能加上
学生不良的兴趣和要求是不能满足的。

结构很清晰 语法上有些错误。

欢迎对在下的文章多提意见