【寄托八月组】作文互改8.22-8·23- I53A48

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题目采用AW高频。


八月组每两天一次小组作业互评。参加互改鼓励不强制，请量力而行，保证写作和互评质量。

时间说明：8.22晚24点结束占座，并且用附件上传自己的习作，并附上方便大家讨论的大纲总结，回复互评伙伴楼层完成互评，8.23午来看分组信息，请注意，如果只占座不上传习作，我会把上传习作的分组，未上传的分组。或者可与互评伙伴协调好互评时间。欢迎在楼内各种讨论分享，秉承小组共享互助宗旨，有拖延不改的欢迎发帖或私信举报，情节严重封ID。

I53: If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it are justifiable.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

A48:The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.

"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

占座ddl：8.22晚24点； 互评ddl：8.23晚24点

liliudodoUID: 3261082

一占，再占，日日占，占到考试了，占占占。

BruceeeUID: 3459673

根据昨天363759209的建议，我做了一些改进，想让他看看，所以希望今天版主把我和363759209分在一组 ^ ^

这次写issue例子还是写了不少，同时尝试加一些分析，但是...用时1h，写了650+ - -。。。30mins时候只完成开头段和那个主题段，写成这样上了考场就悲剧了。。。怎样破题更容易写？是不是最好之前看一下高频的提纲？


argu以前听课听老师讲过，所以简单，3mins写了630字。ARGU果然提前准备啊。

363759209UID: 3435752

占个座~

david-dingUID: 3395460

Issue就不贴了..史上最烂
Argue倒是快得很，23m新纪录 - -

liliudodoUID: 3261082

死是清凉的夜，生是闷热的风

david-dingUID: 3395460

liliudodo 发表于 2014-8-22 23:10
死是清凉的夜，生是闷热的风

363759209UID: 3435752

Bruceee 发表于 2014-8-22 10:00
根据昨天363759209的建议，我做了一些改进，想让他看看，所以希望今天版主把我和363759209分在一组 ^ ^

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argument我还没写，等哈传呀~

liliudodoUID: 3261082

david-ding 发表于 2014-8-22 21:11
Issue就不贴了..史上最烂
Argue倒是快得很，23m新纪录 - -

谢谢鼓励，一直努力

363759209UID: 3435752

Bruceee 发表于 2014-8-22 10:00
根据昨天363759209的建议，我做了一些改进，想让他看看，所以希望今天版主把我和363759209分在一组 ^ ^

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亲的argument写的比我好多了，没办法改啊，当范文哈~

BruceeeUID: 3459673

363759209 发表于 2014-8-23 22:19
亲的argument写的比我好多了，没办法改啊，当范文哈~

不好意思，昨天有点事，批改晚啦~issue写得很好呀，学习了~

BruceeeUID: 3459673

363759209 发表于 2014-8-23 22:19
亲的argument写的比我好多了，没办法改啊，当范文哈~

谢谢亲仔细的修改，说的都很有道理~确实我的作文感觉没有往题目靠，这点需要改进一下~