issue214 (8天，天才少年问题，限时，请大家批评。^-^ )

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214"Society should identify those children who have special talents and abilities and begin training them at an early age so that they can eventually excel in their areas of ability. Otherwise, these talents are likely to remain undeveloped."

syllabus:
1.经验上来说这些人不成功
2.提前教育给这些心智不全的孩子太多压力。
3.限制他们的视野。
4.没有玩耍欢乐的时间，也没有了从中学习的机会


Should society inculcate the talented students at an early age so that they can excel in their areas of ability? I suspect the effectiveness of the measure because not only talented children cannot surely grow into successful people, but also early training sacrifices too much children's happiness and limits their ken, which do harm to the children's development to some extent.

From my observations, there are a large proportion of early-trained children that have certain psychological problems. The university I am studying in has already stopped the enrolment of special classes for talented children who are among 14 to 18 years old because there is little successful experience in the past few years. Many students claimed they were under too much pressure that they could hardly stand it. One of my friends is one of these talented children who has received special early training from university for about two years. Last year, he suspected his study and he told me he could not bear the tremendous pressure from the hope of parents and university and the envy from other students, and he said this was not the life he wanted.

This kind of tragedies may result from undue education that society gives these children. These children after all, are immature, who are easily influenced by others and hard to control and adjust themselves. Society's early special training is so intensive and tough that it hurts the children and their heart although the original idea is good.

In addition, the training often limits these children's ken. For example, the gifted children who are good at mathematics and excel in the Olympic Competition are trained to learn much knowledge of physical subjects; even, sometimes they are fixed to learn exclusively mathematics. This is dangerous since no one can ensure that the gift of mathematics can last for ever and they would maintain the enthusiasm for mathematics. Otherwise, they can just be confined in the subject can hardly have other development in other fields because they even have little basic knowledge of those fields.

What is more, the early training is at the cost of much time that usually children have fun, which is somewhat cruel. Many gifted children was brought to accept early training by their parents or under their teachers' recommendations. But at that time, they had no idea about what they wanted and what they would lose. There is a saying "Let young people dance as they like because they can only be young once." Talented children spend much more time than do common children on their area of ability, consequently they have much less time to play and have fun at their best age. Moreover, children can gain knowledge through playing which they cannot obtain via traditional study. Children can learn how to communicate, compromise and cooperate with others, all of which are part-and-parcel of interpersonal skills that helps to the development of the gifted children. Therefore, while they are receiving certain kind of special training, they lose the chance to receive some other essential training for their lives.

Education, after all should be natural and follow gradually. Undue education may harm the talented children, who are the same in other areas as other children. A natural environment and a moderate competition condition would be good catalysts to their growth while too early special training can do more harm than good to them.

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[ 本帖最后由 iq28 于 2007-6-26 04:31 编辑 ]

gdhdannyUID：125843

Should society inculcate（要接宾语！） the talented students at an early age so that they can excel in their areas of ability（area of ability?）? I suspect the effectiveness of the measure because not only talented children cannot surely grow into successful people, but also early training sacrifices too much children's happiness and limits their ken, which do harm to the children's development to some extent.

From my observations, there are a large proportion of early-trained children that have certain psychological problems. The university I am studying in has already stopped the enrolment of special classes for talented children who are among 14 to 18 years old because there is little successful experience（instance） in the past few years. Many students claimed they were under too much pressure that they could hardly stand it. One of my friends is one of these talented children who has（have） received special early training from university for about two years. Last year, he suspected his study and he told me he could not bear the tremendous pressure from the hope of parents and university and the envy from other students, and he said this was not the life he wanted.（好多的he啊，建议用些分词连接）
这一段最好能加上几句分析，说清楚心理压力就是教育的必然结果，进入天才班-〉受人期盼-〉自己有压力。不要只从天才自己的话中分析，应该有对社会对于天才的看法的描述。

This kind of tragedies may result from undue education that society gives these children. These children after all, are immature, who are easily influenced by others and hard to control and adjust themselves. Society's early special training is so intensive and tough that it hurts the children and their heart（复数） although the original idea is good.

In addition, the training often limits these children's ken. For example, the gifted children who are good at mathematics and excel in the Olympic Competition are trained to learn much knowledge of physical subjects; even, sometimes they are fixed to learn exclusively mathematics. This is dangerous since no one can ensure that the gift of mathematics can last for ever and they would maintain the enthusiasm for mathematics. Otherwise, they can just be confined in the subject can（and can） hardly have other development in other fields because they even（为什么用这个词？） have little basic knowledge of those fields.

What is more, the early training is at the cost of much time that（when） usually children have fun, which is somewhat cruel. Many gifted children was（were） brought to accept early training by their parents or under their teachers' recommendations. But at that time, they had no idea about what they wanted and what they would lose. There is a saying "Let young people dance as they like because they can only be young once." Talented children spend much more time than do common children on their area of ability, consequently they have much less time to play and have fun at their best age. Moreover, children can gain knowledge through playing which they cannot obtain via traditional study. Children can learn how to communicate, compromise and cooperate with others, all of which are part-and-parcel of interpersonal skills that helps to the development of the gifted children. Therefore, while they are receiving certain kind of special training, they lose the chance to receive some other essential training for their lives.

Education, after all should be natural and follow（followed） gradually. Undue education may harm the talented children, who are the same in other areas as other children. A natural environment and a moderate competition condition would be good catalysts to their growth while too early special training can do more harm than good to them.

很好的说！
整篇文章看完后觉得很有条理性，理由说得也很到位，观点清楚，非常不错。
39分钟就能写出这样的文章实在难得。加油！

322612UID：157648

是啊是啊！是写的很好，虽然长句子不多但都表述得很清楚

第2段可以适当加一些论述，比如说为什么会造成心理上的问题，还有那个朋友的事例，可以添加一些她怎么又心理上的问题，这样更有说服力。

第3段我认为可以和第2段和并在一起。

结尾段如果和第一段的后面那一部分互换是不是会更好一些，因为我觉得最后总结比开头就总结要好一些。而你最后一段的那些论述可以作为开头的背景描述

个人意见，我是菜鸟，凭感觉改的，如有不妥还望海涵啊

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谢谢朋友们的帮助！

1.Danny说的the area of ability似乎是题目上的厄:(
2.incalcate the talented students with more knowledge? 什么宾语？这个词可能用得不太好!@#$%^&*
3.嗯，他的经历太复杂我表达不好...第三段和第二段倒是的确可以放在一起的，反正说的是一个问题的。嗯！
4.我感觉要是选个好点的话还是选结尾吧，欲扬先抑是不是比较好点？呵呵。不过开头的话not only but also的确是一般的样子......

bennywu320UID：157820

Sorry, I totally disagree your conclusion.

No development and guide is another kind of cruel behavior to the children. He or she may finally blame you more for this big mistake.

Children should have the right to develop their special ability and potential during this golden time. Researches have proved that listerning Mozart's music will help the children to become more wise and emotional. That's the answer.

Even the machine should be operated well, the piece of art was well designed before exhibition, how it comes to a children. As a chinese saying tells us, no education is the significant fault made by his or her father.

Actually, the arguer fails to provide the evidence that children could learn more from crazy play or lazy sleep. To better evaluate your suggestion, we should fully consider the positive effect as well as the negative feedback inside this problem simultaneously.

forwwwUID：154260

Hey man, you can develop your own opinion. There is no right or wrong, only well developed or pointless.

飘翎UID：145870

我的语法比较烂，就不帮改了~~

1.经验上来说这些人不成功
2.提前教育给这些心智不全的孩子太多压力。
3.限制他们的视野。
4.没有玩耍欢乐的时间，也没有了从中学习的机会

谈一谈思路吧，我觉得这个论题一般举的例子应该都是叙述性或者生活的~久像body1的那种，感觉第一段可以和第二段合起来写，从你同学的角度来谈他的感受。

在限制ken的时候可以重点谈过于专门训练而忽视了其它科目的学习，这里可以引入个门学科都是相互影响的，比如，学科学的，其阅读能力不好，理解能力有限，或者art从某种程度上来讲可以发挥人们的想象力和调节心情，经典的例子Einstein与violin。

至于body4嘛，我觉得可以从社交能力入手。因为与众不同，另眼看待。导致的最终结果就是，不合群，就不仅仅是压力的问题，这样的孩子一般都是不会make friends and communicates with oters 这样早就的直接后或就是，即使他们成才也未必会为社会贡献巨大。我觉得这个可以放在心理压力的后面写……

如果我列提纲的话就会从两个大方面，一个是academic不会达到预期的效果，另外一个就是abnormal psychological characteristic along with lacking social experience and ability of communication,怎样都不是一个well-around 的好孩子

飘翎UID：145870

bennywu320：
Children should have the right to develop their special ability and potential during this golden time. Researches have proved that listerning Mozart's music will help the children to become more wise and emotional. That's the answer.
偶觉得这个例子不能证明你的观点，仅仅能够说明我们可以采取更好的方法来教育和开发孩子的iq,如果你要举例子的话，你就举微软microsoft的牛人吧，李开复，17岁科大少年班硕士，BillGates,嗯，3岁看cyclopaedia,这差不多吧……

Even the machine should be operated well, the piece of art was well designed before exhibition, how it comes to a children. As a chinese saying tells us, no education is the significant fault made by his or her father.
还是没有看出能说明什么，好像这个不符合老米的value standard,如果在美国你打孩子你会丧失监护权……

Actually, the arguer fails to provide the evidence that children could learn more from crazy play or lazy sleep. To better evaluate your suggestion, we should fully consider the positive effect as well as the negative feedback inside this problem simultaneously.
而且你不能认为孩子睡觉是lazy,因为他们正在长身体……
所以，我把你这个当a来改了，不要郁闷……

bennywu320UID：157820

Genius without Education is just like silver in the Mine.