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我觉得这篇文章就是不停的向怎么变着法的说不让朋友犯错误 特烦 绞尽脑汁啊还是觉得自己啰嗦  唉唉 狠拍吧


Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that may destroy the friendship


Some people suggest that letting a friend make a mistake is better than doing something that may destroy the friendship. However, I find the opinion somehow indefensible and selfish, without even taking the behalf of the friend into consideration. I hold that it is better for us to make every effort to prevent our friends from making any possible mistake for the reasons as follows.

To begin with, we may help keep our friends away from harms and dangers by preventing them from making possible mistakes. Some people assert that we can learn from mistakes we made. However, it should not be ignored that many mistakes have unpredictable consequences, which may lead to dangers and harms. For example, accepting a cigarette from a stranger may be supposed merely a small mistake by many young people, especially some teenagers. Nevertheless, the cigarette may contain drugs which could possibly cause an addiction that would ultimately ruin the person's life. In the light of this example, it is definitely necessary for us to prevent our friends from making this kind of dangerous mistakes.

In addition, the attempt to appoint out the mistakes before our friends make them can benefit ourselves as well. Persuading others to accept our opinions is one of the essential abilities of effective communicating. It is very possible that our friends may not take our suggestions at the very beginning, so we will have to discuss and debate the problem with them on the rational basis. Through this process, our abilities such as critical thinking and problem analysis can be greatly improved, while at the same time we may gain a better understanding of the problems of our own's. Therefore, appointing out the possible mistakes of our friends can also have a positive influence on ourselves.

Lastly, the act of helping our friends avoid mistakes can contribute to consolidate our friendship instead of destroying it. The friendship between Ann and I can exemplify the idea properly. When we were preparing our final thesis together, I found that one of the chapter in her thesis was simply copied from a published book. I pointed out the serious consequences of the mistake and she accepted it honestly. Then We discussed about how to rewrite the chapter together and both got great hints from the discussion. Since then, we have been exchanging our opinions about all the reports and tests we have got and our friendship became even stronger than before.

To sum up, preventing our friends from making possible mistakes can effectively protect our friends as well as benefit ourselves. Moreover, our friendship may be strengthened through the process of persuasion and discussion. All things considered, it is justified to help our friends avoid possible mistakes.

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Lastly,the act of helping our friends avoid mistakes can contribute to consolidate ourfriendship instead of destroying it. The friendship between Ann and I canexemplify the idea properly. When we were preparing our final thesis together,I found that one of the chapter in her thesis was simply copied from apublished book. I pointed out the serious consequences of the mistake and sheaccepted it honestly. Then We discussed about how to rewrite the chaptertogether and both got great hints from the discussion. Since then, we have beenexchanging our opinions about all the reports and tests we have got and ourfriendship became even stronger than before.

To sum up, preventing our friends from making possiblemistakes can effectively protect our friends as well as benefit ourselves.Moreover, our friendship may be strengthened through the process of persuasionand discussion. All things considered, it is justified to help our friendsavoid possible mistakes.


读了五遍，实在找不到有什么错误，不是俺不认真，只是写得太好找不到错误。赞！！!

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fancy又在前面同学的基础上修改；fancy被添到你们组了，别忘记评fancy的了。P; _- L& w2 `! K% U3 E0 \% E 5 t8 x' c  [0 d8 Y. r Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that may destroy the friendship3 m- R3 N$ r+ o0 i. \; D6 D, I Some people suggest that letting a friend make a mistake is better than doing something that may destroy the friendship. However, I find the opinion somehow indefensible and selfish, without even taking the behalf of the friend into consideration. I hold that it is better for us to make every effort to prevent our friends from making any possible mistake for the reasons as follows.+ q9 K6 S- X8 k3 C3 u8h  c" e5 w7 k: A, ^- N& g3 x( T7 q 开头很平稳，立场很坚决。 To begin with, we may （can，主题句最好不要用这样不太坚决的词） help keep our friends away from harms and dangers by preventing them from making possible mistakes. Some people assert that we can learn from mistakes we made. However, it should not be ignored that many mistakes have unpredictable consequences, which may lead to dangers and harms.For example, accepting a cigarette from a stranger may be supposed merely a small mistake by many young people, especially some teenagers. Nevertheless,the cigarette may contain drugs which could possibly cause an addiction thatwould ultimately ruin the person's life. In the light of this example, it is definitely necessary for us to prevent our friends from making this kind of dangerous mistakes. In addition, the attempt to appoint(point) out the mistakes before our friends make them can benefit ourselves as well. Persuading others to accept our opinions is one of the essential abilities of effective communicating. It is very possible that our friends may not take our suggestions at the very beginning, so we will have to discuss and debate the problem with them on the rational basis. Through this process, our abilities such as critical thinking and problem analysis can be greatly improved, while at the same time we may gain a better understanding of the problems of our own's. Therefore, appointing(pointing)out the possible mistakes of our friends can also have a positive influence on ourselves.' s' Y  d) [) `: Z, T# K+ E8 m# [ 这个positive influence 好像绕的有点远，或者可以直接把第二句作为首句，毕竟这段只论述了只一个positive influence。 . P/ R" x# d0 `# d9 X 5 s  T+ U3 V; w6 O9 M1 a Lastly,the act of helping our friends avoid mistakes can contribute to consolidate ourfriendship instead of destroying it. The friendship between my friend Ann (加一个避免突兀) and I can exemplify the idea properly. When we were preparing our final thesis together,I found that one of the chapter in her thesis was simply copied from a published book. I pointed out the serious consequences of the mistake and she accepted it honestly. Then We discussed about how to rewrite the chapter together and both got great hints from the discussion. Since then, we have been exchanging our opinions about all the reports and tests we have got and ourfriendship became even stronger than before. To sum up, preventing our friends from making possible mistakes can effectively protect our friends as well as benefit ourselves.Moreover, our friendship may be strengthened through the process of persuasionand discussion. All things considered, it is justified to help our friendsavoid possible mistakes. : g% d   l0 O' ~  [1 T0 t' t 读了五遍，实在找不到有什么错误，不是俺不认真，只是写得太好找不到错误。赞！！! 很不错，三点理由都很清楚，虽然第二点可以在充实一下，如对自己的积极影响，可以再加上：自己也能加深印象，然后避免此类错误。 句子很流畅，没有综合写作那么长那么绕了。 可以努力再打造一些闪亮的词句，加油。

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Some people suggest that letting a friend make a mistake is better than doing something that may destroy the friendship. However, I find the opinion somehow indefensible and selfish, without even taking the behalf of the friend into consideration. I hold that it is better for us to make every effort to prevent our friends from making any possible mistake for the reasons as follows.

To begin with, we may help keep our friends away from harms and dangers by preventing them from making possible(题目是指出错误，不是预防错误) mistakes. Some people assert that we can learn from mistakes we made. However, it should not be ignored that many mistakes have unpredictable consequences, which may lead to dangers and harms. For example, accepting a cigarette from a stranger may be supposed merely a small mistake by many young people, especially some teenagers. Nevertheless, the cigarette may contain drugs which could possibly cause an addiction that would ultimately ruin the person's life. In the light of this example, it is definitely necessary for us to prevent our friends from making this kind of dangerous mistakes.

In addition, the attempt to appoint out the mistakes before our friends make them can benefit ourselves as well. Persuading others to accept our opinions is one of the essential abilities of effective communicating. It is very possible that our friends may not take our suggestions at the very beginning, so we will have to discuss and debate the problem with them on the rational basis. Through this process, our abilities such as critical thinking and problem analysis can be greatly improved, while at the same time we may gain a better understanding of the problems of our own's. Therefore, appointing out the possible mistakes of our friends can also have a positive influence on ourselves.

这个理由还不错

Lastly, the act of helping our friends avoid mistakes can contribute to consolidate our friendship instead of destroying it. The friendship between Ann and I can exemplify the idea properly. When we were preparing our final thesis together, I found that one of the chapter in her thesis was simply copied from a published book. I pointed out the serious consequences of the mistake and she accepted it honestly. Then We discussed about how to rewrite the chapter together and both got great hints from the discussion. Since then, we have been exchanging our opinions about all the reports and tests we have got and our friendship became even stronger than before.

这个还是和题目的意思矛盾了，题目说的是指出朋友的错误还是做些有可能毁灭友情的事情，所以不存在指出错误加深友情的论点。

To sum up, preventing our friends from making possible mistakes can effectively protect our friends as well as benefit ourselves. Moreover, our friendship may be strengthened through the process of persuasion and discussion. All things considered, it is justified to help our friends avoid possible mistakes.

感觉在总结分论点的时候还是需要好好总结一下，需要多考虑下