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发表于 2009-8-27 23:31:01 |显示全部楼层
Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that may destroy the friendship


There is a growing concern over the issue that whether it is appropriate to let a friend make a mistake or point out the shortcomings in time. Those who prefer the first opinion holds that figuring out the mistake of a friend will definitely destroy the friendship between them. Nevertheless, from my point of view, it is more benificial to warn the friend of his/her errors.

Frankly speaking, people has the tendency to listen to the praise from others. That is the direction from one of the drawbacks of human beings’ nature- vanity. For one thing, the extoling words are more sound than the critics, thus give people a happy mood. On the other hand, the praising words
Looking on the running wheel of history, we could take a glance of aboundant of kings were defeated by the blind laudatory words from the treacherous, ultimately lead to the utter collapse of the whole country. The sweet words will lead to detrimental situations.

However, figuring out the mistakes of the friends are more beneficial. On the one hand, it will help the friend to correct the errors so that make timely regulation. This will help the friend in the long run.
On the other hand, those who point out the drawbacks of the friend are truly friend which trust worthy for the latter time.
One of the great thinkers once said, as I paraphrased” True friend should act like a mirror”. This reminds me of my old friend Anna. One year ago, I was fortunate enough to obtain the opportunity to participate in the English Speaking Contest held in my school. In order to get a satisfied grade, I practised over and over again. Everyone had seen my effort. Friends aroud me all preached up my performance and I was so confident. At this time, my friend Anna walked to me and critised my over self-inflation. She pointed out that there were still many shortcomings in my way of performing and the expression. At first, I was so shocked by her words. But after contemplating for a several hours, I realised that she is the only person who truly cared about me. Consequently, I performed just in according with her advise. The result is so satifying. I appreciated her sincerely help and come to acknowledge that she is the person worthing to joining in hands with forever. My personal experience has informed me that only truly friend can give you any advise at the expense of your temporary misunderstanding.

To sum up, true friend is just like a mirror to assit you to look yourself more clearly. Figuring out the mistakes does not impede the improvement of your friendship. On the contary, it will help build a more sound firendship.
triumph…………

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There is a growing concern over the issue that whether it is appropriate to let a friend make a mistake or point out the shortcomings in time. Those who prefer the first opinion holds that figuring out the mistake of a friend will definitely destroy the friendship between them. Nevertheless, from my point of view, it is more benificial(beneficial) to warn the friend of his/her errors.

Frankly speaking, people has(have) the tendency to listen to the praise from others. That is the direction from one of the drawbacks of human beings’ nature- vanity. For one thing, the extoling(extolling) words are more sound(sounder) than the critics, thus give people a happy mood. On the other hand, the praising words
Looking on the running wheel of history, we could take a glance of aboundant(abundant) of kings were defeated by the blind laudatory words from the treacherous, ultimately lead to the utter collapse of the whole country. The sweet words will lead to detrimental situations.% F3 t% |% O$ a
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However, figuring out the mistakes of the friends are(is) more beneficial. On the one hand, it will help the friend to correct the errors so that make timely regulation. This will help the friend in the long run.7 s* p$ `4 k) ^) k- t
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One of the great thinkers once said, as I paraphrased” True friend should act like a mirror”. This reminds me of my old friend Anna. One year ago, I was fortunate enough to obtain the opportunity to participate in the English Speaking Contest held in my school. In order to get a satisfied grade, I practised(practiced) over and over again. Everyone had seen my effort. Friends aroud(around) me all preached up my performance and I was so confident. At this time, my friend Anna walked to me and critised(criticized) my over self-inflation. She pointed out that there were still many shortcomings in my way of performing and the expression. At first, I was so shocked by her words. But after contemplating for a several hours, I realised(realized) that she is the only person who truly cared about me. Consequently, I performed just in according with her advise(advice). The result is so satifying(satisfying). I appreciated her sincerely help and come to acknowledge that she is the person worthy to joining in hands with forever. My personal experience has informed me that only truly friend can give you any advise(advice) at the expense of your temporary misunderstanding.

To sum up, true friend is just like a mirror to assit(assist) you to look yourself more clearly. Figuring out the mistakes does not impede the improvement of your friendship. On the contary(contrary), it will help build a more sound(sounder) firendship(friendship).

总体不错,例子与理由都很充分,注意小错误!

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发表于 2009-8-28 13:10:06 |显示全部楼层
楼上说了很多单词问题,我就说说内容和结构.

There is a growing concern over the issue that whether it is appropriate to let a friend make a mistake or point out the shortcomings in time. Those who prefer the first opinion holds that figuring out the mistake of a friend will definitely destroy the friendship between them. Nevertheless, from my point of view, it is more benificial to warn the friend of his/her errors.开头很快阐明观点,很好的

Frankly speaking, people has the tendency to listen to the praise from others. That is the direction from one of the drawbacks of human beings’ nature- vanity. For one thing, the extoling words are more sound than the critics, thus give people a happy mood. On the other hand, the praising words

Looking on the running wheel of history, we could take a glance of aboundant of kings were defeated by the blind laudatory words from the treacherous, ultimately lead to the utter collapse of the whole country. The sweet words will lead to detrimental situations我觉得题目主要是说跟朋友说意见会导致友谊破裂, 所以人类喜欢奉承的话还是一带而过好, 显得多了.
ver, figuring out the mistakes of the friends are more beneficial. On the one hand, it will help the friend to correct the errors so that make timely regulation. This will help the friend in the long run.; m$ V9 T" B# u+ h! s5 @2 W
On the other hand, those who point out the drawbacks of the friend are truly friend which trust worthy for the latter time同意!!.One of the great thinkers once said, as I paraphrased” True friend should act like a mirror这个引用的好”. This reminds me of my old friend Anna. One year ago, I was fortunate enough to obtain the opportunity to participate in the English Speaking Contest held in my school. In order to get a satisfied grade, I practised over and over again. Everyone had seen my effort. Friends aroud me all preached up my performance and I was so confident. At this time, my friend Anna walked to me and critised my over self-inflation. She pointed out that there were still many shortcomings in my way of performing and the expression. At first, I was so shocked by her words. But after contemplating for a several hours, I realised that she is the only person who truly cared about me. Consequently, I performed just in according with her advise. The result is so satifying. I appreciated her sincerely help and come to acknowledge that she is the person worthing to joining in hands with forever. My personal experience has informed me that only truly friend can give you any advise at the expense of your temporary misunderstanding这个例子很好的,,很生动. 因为是过去的事情我想过去式更合适吧.而且前半部用的是过去,后面的现在时态.
To sum up, true friend is just like a mirror to assit you to look yourself more clearly. Figuring out the mistakes does not impede the improvement of your friendship. On the contary, it will help build a more sound firendship. 结尾总结性很强的. 写作功底很好的,句子既有简单又有复杂. 语法功底也不错.

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