2009 美利坚作文 我是翠花8.28

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The passage demonstrates that the fireball exploded due to the asteroid is not acceptable with its theory. And the professor refutes what the article contains is wrong in the following contends.

To begin with, the author mentions that scientists did not find out any trace at the impact site; and if it really happened, there should be any clue left in Tunguska. The lecture acclaims that those scientists went to there to research the information 19 years after it happened. The fragment probably already disappeared due to natural changes. Therefore, nothing discovered in Tunguska cannot show that the fireball was not from the asteroid.word 说这句不对 麻烦大家给看看..语法

The passage also proves that there is no any crater on the area of Tunguska. If something had explored on the earth, it should have brought destruction. However, the professor asserts her conviction that the exploration may happen in the middle of the atmosphere, which would not impact any place in the earth. As how can it be if the fireball did not hit the ground?

In the end, 最后一点没听出来什么是什么...

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The passage demonstrates that the fireball exploded due to the asteroid （应该是asteroid impact theory吧） is not acceptable with its theory. And the professor refutes what the article contains is wrong in the following contends.

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To begin with, the author （用reading比较好） mentions that scientists did not find out （out多余） any trace at the impact site; and if it really happened, there should be any clue left in Tunguska. The lecture acclaims that those scientists went to there to research the information 19 years after it happened. The fragment probably already disappeared due to natural changes. Therefore, （the fact） that nothing had been discovered in Tunguska cannot show that the fireball was not from the asteroid.word 说这句不对 麻烦大家给看看..语法 一个完整句子不能直接做主语，主语从句要加个that，或者用fact作主语，用that引导的同位语从句修饰fact。show感觉比较口语，可以用：mean, prove, demonstrate，support, justify, lend credible evidence to , 等。

The passage also proves （prove是证明，这里是站在听力的立场反驳阅读，所以最好用argue、claim、assert等词） that there is no any crater on the area of （in就好） Tunguska. If something had explored on the earth （范围太大了，there 就好）, it should have brought destruction. However, the professor asserts her conviction that the exploration may happen in the middle of the atmosphere, which would not impact any place in the earth. As how can it be if the fireball did not hit the ground? （不是我们自己在反驳就不用这么激动，客观陈述就好）- r8 r' s$ M- g1 `, i% C

In the end, 最后一点没听出来什么是什么... 好像是关于爆炸产生的冲击波的形状，文章说是蝴蝶翅膀形，听力说是 one certer circle吧。

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The passage demonstrates that the fireball exploded due to the asteroid is not acceptable with its theory.（对passage的观点描述看这样行不行 the passage criticizes the asteroid theory of the Tungska explosion and instead, comes up with a new explanation -swamp gas theory） And the professor refutes what the article contains is wrong(is wrong 去掉) in the following contends.（contend是竞争，是不是想讲contents,用reasons 也行）

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To begin with, the author mentions that scientists did not find out any trace at the impact site（well done）; and if it really happened, there should be any clue left in Tunguska. The lecture acclaims that those scientists went to there to research the information 19 years after it happened. The fragment probably already disappeared due to natural changes. Therefore, nothing discovered in Tunguska cannot show that the fireball was not from the asteroid.word 说这句不对 麻烦大家给看看..语法（感觉对，但可以改动一下，not太多了，no traces ever found in Tunguska never weakens the asteroid theory.）

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The passage also proves that there is no any crater on the area of Tunguska. If something had explored on the earth, it should have brought destruction. However, the professor asserts her conviction that the exploration may happen in the middle of(lower) the atmosphere, which would not impact any place in the earth. As how can it be if the fireball did not hit the ground?(感觉用个肯定句语气上强一些)0() G6 W# p- k/ s; i6 W
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In the end, 最后一点没听出来什么是什么...
第一次改你的作文，建议是找一些模版，仿着写几篇，会很上手的，我的经验，赫赫