annskya 9.9作文

annskyaUID: 181142

Some people prefer to complain in writing,because they found it was very difficult to speak out directly.Expecially,In some Asia country,speaking angry words in person is considered as somekind of insultation and bad manner.But if I was in a situation that I have to complain,I would love to do it in person.The reason is as below:

First,although complaination,it was also some kind of communication.If we want to pretect our right and be best benifit from it,we should better know our listener's reaction.And talking in person can give us this information instantly.Comparing to it,complaining in writing is one-side communication.We don't know our listener's reaction untill they gave us an answer.It cost time and make things complicated.Obviously,as a communicaion,the second one is much more negative and unefficiant.

Second,is it last longer,am I feel worse.If complain in person,I can get an answer quickly.Than't mean it will be over quickly.But If I write a letter,I have to mail or email it,and wait.During the period of waiting time,most likely you will stay in the "trouble mood".And this problem will never get deal with untill you get a answer.Therefore you made yourself a negertive position.On another words,it is them who are in control,but not you.

Third,I know it may be sound naive,but complain instantly can make I feel better instantly!Someone afraid to act when they were in crazy mood.But don't forget,when you percharse a product or pervice,you paid for it.They lost their place when they offer you something doen't mach the price.Thus,I think you have the right to be angry,to express your hurt.Let them know,they earn you a good answer and press them to make up it.Angry is not good for health.I  prefer to get rid of it as soon as possible.
Above all,when I suffered from a bad product or poor service,I prefer to express my feeling in person.From this I can protect my profit best and save my precious time.Most of all,this can make me make me feel happy.


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新人报道，第一篇作文（超时>_<）。

其实我还没太搞清状况，不知道怎么个分组法（也不知道我写对了题目没有，大汗）

总之写了再说，请大家多多包涵！

goback211UID: 2419259

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明天再给你评吧，你这个是明天的

annskyaUID: 181142

Everyone who live in modern city has experienced some kind of traffic jams. Imaging that, you were in a hurry, but the waiting seemed endless. What should you do with this? Many people think imposing toll during rush-hour on rush-road can help. But I can not agree with this.My consideration is as follows.

First,rush-hour tolls efficacy is questionable.If tolls can solve traffic problems,why is there still bad traffic on highways?I believe everyone who drives has the experience.You paid for the highway,but you still have to wait for bad traffic.That is because there were so many people considering the same thing," I want to get back home soon,no matter paying extra money". This is a perfect example to state that a toll can not work out at every situation.

Even if the rush-hour toll policy works, who will benefit from this policy most? It will be the people who can afford the extra money effortlessly. But how about poorer people? Obviously,some of them maybe can not get out in rush hours because their economic conditions.It is definitly unfair. In general,governments build roads by citizen's tax.Every citizen has the right to use them. Thus,we have reason to consider that charging a rush-hour toll is some kind of discrimination to poor people.

Most importantly,rush-hour tax is not the only way to deal with traffic problems.We have many other more reasonable and efficient methods. For instance,goverments can pay for advertisement to call people to go out at different time,or encourage the using of public transport such as the bus or subway. Or they can also offer some new services such as " rush hour warning" to let people know reality road conditions, leaving them their rights for decidions. By all those methods,poor people's right can be protected while traffic problems can somewhat be solved.

I won't deny that the smart use of a toll can be somewhat advantagious. However considering it's disavatages and the other possibilities for traffic problems,I strongly surggest that rush-hour toll should not be put into practice.

gy0510150556UID: 2546647

小狗也明天给你评，赫赫:)

annskyaUID: 181142

9.11  高分写作 practice 10  L1 J7 Y+ Y#

The article regards Zebras' stripes as a protection from predators and expained it in three perspects.However the professor doesn't agree with any of the explaination for the funcation of Zebras stripes.

First,the article says the vertical stripes on zebras can creat optical illusion.The professor doesn't deny it,but she added that zebras's predators such as lion are not chase zebras only by sight,thus even if stripes can help creat illusion,stripes can not really help zebras escape from their predators.

Second,the article points that when zebras travel in group,stripes can help to image a scien that keep predators such as lion away.For this point, the professor agrees that stripes can create the scien.But she doesn't agree that this can keep predators away as she pointed out that lion and other predators don't lay on sight only, they can smell. Thus,stripes cannot help zebras form predators.

Last,the author says stripes can help zebras to creat a camouflage when they hide in tall grass and this can help them to hide form predators. The professor doesn't deny that zebras' stripes can make a camouflage for them but she also pointed that zebras flee away but not stay still to hide when they were in danger.

In sum,the professor doesn't deny strips work as making illusion,and help ezbras to hide.But she pointed that even strips can do this, it can not enough to help them escape from predators.

goback211UID: 2419259

The article regards(其实这个词不怎么用) Zebras' stripes as a protection from predatorsand expained it in three perspects. However the professor doesn't agree with any of the explaination for the funcationof Zebras stripes.
Firstly, thearticle says the vertical stripes on zebras can creatoptical illusion. The professor doesn't deny it, but she added that zebras's predators such as lion are not chase(动词不能这么用) zebras only by sight, thuseven if stripes can help creat illusion, stripescan not really help zebras escape from their predators.
Secondly, thearticle points that when zebras travel in group, stripes can help to image a scien that keep predators such as lion away(意思不准确，看看原文). For this point, theprofessor agrees that stripes can create the scien.But she doesn't agree that this can keep predators away as she pointed out thatlion and other predators don't lay on sight only, they can smell. Thus, stripescannot help zebras form predators.;
Last, the author says stripes can helpzebras to creat a camouflage when they hide intall grass and this can help them to hide form predators. The professor doesn'tdeny(都是这样的句子，换一下吧) that zebras' stripes can make a camouflage for them but she also pointed(用现在式) that zebras flee awaybut not stay still to hide when they were in danger.
In sum, the professor doesn't deny stripswork as making illusion, and help ezbras to hide. But she pointed(时态) that even strips can dothis, it can not enough to help them escape from predators.

新手写成这样不错，建议你以后写完之后放到word里看看，错字多，而且标点之后的空格经常少，以后注意。再就是注意时态
评的不好，见谅

ly8768UID: 2452066

3# annskya

Everyone who live(lives) in modern city has experienced some kind of traffic jams. Imaging that, you were in a hurry, but the waiting(好像没这么说的) seemed endless. What should you do with this? Many people think imposing toll during rush-hour on rush-road can help. But I can not(cannot) agree with this. My consideration is as follows.

First, rush-hour tolls efficacy is questionable. If tolls can solve traffic problems, why is there still bad traffic on high ways? I believe everyone who drives has the experience. You paid for the highway, but you still have to wait for bad traffic. That is because there were so many people considering the same thing," I want to get back home soon, no matter paying extra money". This is a perfect example to state that a toll can not(cannot) work out at every situation.


Even if the rush-hour toll policy works, who will benefit from this policy most? It will be the people who can afford the extra money effortlessly. But how about poorer(poor) people? Obviously, some of them maybe can not(cannot) get out in rush hours because their economic conditions(这句么明白什么意思). It is definitely unfair. In general, governments build roads by citizen's tax. Every citizen has the right to use them. Thus, we have reason to consider that charging a rush-hour toll is some kind of discrimination to poor people.

Most importantly, rush-hour tax is not the only way to deal with traffic problems. We have many other more reasonable and efficient methods. For instance, governments can pay for advertisement to call people to go out at different time, or encourage the using of public transport such as the bus or subway. Or they can also offer some new services such as " rush hour warning" to let people know reality road conditions, leaving them their rights for decidions(decisions). By all those methods, poor people's right can be protected while traffic problems can somewhat be solved.

I won't deny that the smart use of a toll can be somewhat advantageous. However considering it's disavatages(disadvantages) and the other possibilities for traffic problems, I strongly surggest(suggest) that rush-hour toll should not be put into practice.
观点不错，注意错别字

annskyaUID: 181142

9。12

When we learn a new language, we are asked to learn both speaking and writing. For example, to understand a non-native English speaker's English skill, TOEFL text includes both speaking and writing sections. Why? It's because both writing and speaking skills are very important for communication in their own ways.

I guess there is no one questioning the impotency of speaking as a basic communication skill. It conveys information instantly. Speed can be very important for communication. Here is an example. You and your lover had a bad accident. He/She lost mind and you were badly hurt. What would you do then? Shout out loudly to call a help? Or write a letter to pass by? I think only person who goes crazy will choose the later one. The reason is obviously, speaking can save you time.   

However can we say that writing is not important? To answer this question, let's image another situation. For instance, you gave a splendid presentation for a new product. Your boss loves it and asked you to give him a copy of your whole idea. What will be waiting for you if you can not write down your idea properly? No doubt, you will lose the chance or even your job! Writing's is more and more important in modern society. Almost every company ask their employees to be educated with writing skill.

Thus, can we simply say which one of the two skills is important than another one? I cannot deny that in some spectacular situations, one of them is more important than the other one. But I believe that they are both important in their own ways. If you cannot write, you can not enjoy the convenience of email, the romance of love letter. If you cannot speak, you cannot use phone call, tell your girlfriend how cute she is. Which is more important? It depends on circumstances.

fish1044UID: 2190500

When we learn a new language, we are asked to learn both speaking and writing. For example, to understand（tests） a non-native English speaker's English skill, TOEFL text(可以删掉，或者用test) includes both speaking and writing sections. Why? It's（删掉） because both writing and speaking skills are very important for communication in their own ways." e, ~  f$ ~' K
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    I guess there is no one questioning the impotency（no one will question the importance） of speaking as a basic communication skill. It conveys information instantly. Speed(Speach) can be very important for communication. Here is an example. You and your lover had a bad accident. He/She lost mind and you were badly hurt. What would you do then? Shout out loudly to call for a help? Or write a letter to pass by? I think only person who goes crazy will choose the later one. The reason is obviously(obvious), speaking can save your time.   - ^; X2 Y# P3 D: M8 l8 X
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    However, can we say that writing is not important? To answer this question, let's image another situation. For instance, you gave a splendid presentation for a new product. Your boss loves it and asked you to give him a copy of your whole idea. What will be waiting for you if you can not write down your idea properly? No doubt, you will lose the chance or even your job! Writing's is more and more important in modern society. Almost every company ask their employees to be educated with writing skill.(这段写得不错)( _# A! r, U' l* f8 W# ~0 U( N+ G
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Thus, can we simply say which one of the two skills is more important than another one（删掉）? I cannot deny that in some spectacular situations, one of them is more important than the other one. But I believe that they are both important in their own ways. If you cannot write, you can not enjoy the convenience of email, the romance of love letter. If you cannot speak, you cannot use phone call, tell your girlfriend how cute she is. Which is more important? It depends on the circumstances.（这个结尾也比较不错）

虽然整篇没有什么华丽的语言，但是表达很清晰，属于不错的文章了。

annskyaUID: 181142

9。15作业


In these days, you must know someone who has changed jobs, If you yourself haven't. In Japan, here are more and more young employees jumped form one company to another. It seems like that working for one employer is more and more difficult. But that does not mean, stay in one company is impossible.

First, let we see what happened in Japan. In the past, almost every Japanese employee stayed in one company all of his/her life. They showed high loyalty to their company. And the company thought that taking care of their employees was their responsibility. But, this situation changed a lot recently. However, we can still see the old culture exist wildly. College students begin job hunting at least one year before their graduation. Because they know if they can be employed by a good company, their whole life can be largely guaranteed. That’s why they take the job hunting super seriously. Thus, in Japan, if a guy can find a position and does make some stupid fails on it, it is still very likely that he/she can stay there forever.

Second, there are people around me did it and the circumstances made me believe that, if they like it, people can still do it. I work in Okinawa Japan as a high school teacher. When every day changes dramatically in large city like TOKYO, life in Okinawa, a small island, still keeps it's slow pace. High school teachers work for Okinawa local government. If you can get a teaching license and make no unforgivable mistakes, the local government cannot fire you. That’s why many of my co-workers just stayed all their life in the same positions. As changes happened so slowly here, I believe many teachers can also retire form the only one job.

In sum, although agreeing with that staying at one job is more and more difficult these days, I believe stay at one job is still possible, especially in some remote places of Asia countries.

fish1044UID: 2190500

In these days, you must know someone who has changed jobs(你的意思是you should have known somebody who had changed jobs吗？), If you didn't yourself haven't(删掉). In Japan, here（there） are more and more young employees jumped form one company to another. It seems like that working for one employer is more and more difficult. But that does not mean, stay in one company is impossible.


First, let we（us） see what happened in Japan. In the past, almost every Japanese employee stayed in one company all of his/her life. They showed high loyalty（这次没错，但是可以试试faithful） to their company. And the company thought that taking care of their employees was their responsibility. But（though）, this situation changed a lot recently.（,） However, we can still see（删掉） the old culture still exist wildly. College students begin job hunting at least one year before their graduation. Because they know if they can be employed by a good company, their whole life can be largely guaranteed. That’s why they take the(这里是泛指，不需要the) job hunting super seriously. Thus, in Japan, if a guy can find a position and does make some stupid fails on it, it is still very likely that he/she can stay there forever.& A1 z* j: x, ^! z  U
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    Second, there are people around me did it(这里的it指什么？) and the circumstances made me believe that, if they like it(这里的it指什么？) , people can still do it(这里的it指什么？) . I work in Okinawa Japan as a high school teacher. When every day changes dramatically in large city like TOKYO, life in Okinawa, a small island, still keeps it's slow pace. High school teachers work for Okinawa local government. If you can get a teaching license and make no unforgivable mistakes, the local government cannot fire you. That’s why many of my co-workers just stayed all their life in the same positions. As changes happened so slowly here, I believe many teachers can also retire form the only one job.（这个是真的经历吗？）3 q: J( b5 f1 N: X1 s' H
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    In sum, although agreeing with that staying at one job is more and more difficult these days, I believe stay at one job is still possible, especially in some remote places of Asia countries.（感觉这一段像是第二个原因的总结）

    写作文的时候要注意理顺自己的思路哦。这篇文章逻辑上比语言上的问题要大点，呵呵