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Issue29
"Public figures such as actors, politicians, and athletes should expect people to be interested in their private lives. When they seek a public role, they should expect that they will lose at least some of their privacy."


This statement is fundamentally correct; public figures should indeed expect to lose their privacy. After all, we are a society of voyeurs wishing to transform our mundane lives; and one way to do so is to live vicariously through the experiences of others whose lives appear more interesting than our own. Moreover, the media recognize this societal foible and exploit it at every opportunity. Nevertheless, a more accurate statement would draw a distinction between political figures and other public figures; the former have even less reason than the latter to expect to be left alone, for the reason that their duty as public servants legitimizes public scrutiny of their private lives.

倘若是同意>反对（即使部分反对）的立场，不妨可模仿这种写法：
This statement is fundamentally correct;接着重复原文，然后Nevertheless, a more accurate statement would draw a distinction between……提出部分反对意见，或者是在原题范围内进行细分，最后补充自己为何提出此反对意见的原因。


The chief reason why I generally agree with the statement is that, for better or worse, intense media attention to the lives of public figures raises a presumption in the collective mind of the viewing or reading public that our public figures' lives are far more interesting than our own. This presumption is understandable. After all, I think most people would agree that given the opportunity for even fleeting fame they would embrace it without hesitation. Peering into the private lives of those who have achieved our dreams allows us to live vicariously(身历其境地) through those lives.

精华：The chief reason why I generally agree with the statement is that, for better or worse,
      在下一段继续阐明时用到：Another reason why I generally agree with the statement has to do with the forces that……
有用的词组：（may）raise a presumption in the collective mind of…

Another reason why I generally agree with the statement has to do with the forces that motivate the media. For the most part, the media consist of large corporations whose chief objective is to maximize shareholder profits. In pursuit of that objective the media are simply giving the public what they demand a voyeuristic look into the private lives of public figures. One need look no further than a newsstand, local-television news broadcast, or talk show to find ample evidence that this is so. For better or worse, we love to peer at people on public pedestals, and we love to watch them fall off. The media know this all too well, and exploit our obsession at every opportunity.

词组：For the most part,
In pursuit of
exploit our obsession at every opportunity
One need look no further than
这两段主要从内因（公众需求）和外因（媒体为赚钱想尽一切创造机会）来分析原文的正确性。接着在下一段回应第一段的Nevertheless 后提出的补充观点，也就是指出其原文的逻辑错误和缺失。

Nevertheless, the statement should be qualified in that a political figure has less reason to expect privacy than other public figures. Why? The private affairs of public servants become our business when those affairs adversely affect our servants' ability to serve us effectively, or when our servants betray our trust. For example, several years ago the chancellor of auniversity located in my city was expelled from office for misusing university funds to renovate his posh personal residence. The scandal became front-page news in the campus newspaper, and prompted a useful system-wide reform. Also consider the Clinton sex scandal, which sparked a debate about the powers and duties of legal prosecutors vis4-vis the chief executive. Also, the court rulings about executive privilege and immunity, and even the impeachment proceedings, all of which resulted from the scandal, might serve as useful legal precedents for the future.

精华片断：Nevertheless, the statement should be qualified in that…
          public servants 公务员
          betray our trust
          prompted a useful system-wide reform
         

Admittedly, intense public scrutiny of the personal lives of public figures can carry harmful consequences, for the public figure as well as the society. For instance, the Clinton scandal resulted in enormous financial costs to taxpayers, and it harmed many individuals caught up in the legal process. And for more that a year the scandal served chiefly to distract us from our most pressing national and global problems. Yet, until as a society we come to appreciate the potentially harmful effects of our preoccupation with the lives of public figures, they can expect to remain the cynosures of our attention.

精彩片断：carry harmful consequences
served chiefly to distract us from our most pressing national and global problems
          we come to appreciate the potentially harmful effects of our preoccupation with the lives of public figures
          remain the cynosures of our attention

          最后一段为谨慎起见作者就提出的衍生观点作出某种程度的让步，并且就原文的有害影响作出说明。

总的来说，遣词造句等无太让人拍案的感觉，比较平实，但胜在作者各段表意清楚，逻辑性较强。5分是能保证的。但总体给人感觉还是有argument的影子，不能给阅卷者有太好的印象。有模版感觉。

天地无用UID: 112318

第一段的结尾，这两句话逻辑上我觉得有点别扭，或者是我理解错了?
the former have even less reason than the latter to
expect to be left alone, for the reason that their duty as public servants legitimizes public
scrutiny of their private lives.
前者较之后者更不愿被忽略，因为他们的作为社会公仆的责任使公众保护他们隐私合法化

tomatoeggsUID: 82073

最初由 天地无用 发表
[B]第一段的结尾，这两句话逻辑上我觉得有点别扭，或者是我理解错了?
the former have even less reason than the latter to
expect to be left alone, for the reason that their duty as public servants legitimiz... [/B]

是这样的。（个人意见）因为政府人员（政治家）的职责决定了他们的隐私必然受到公众的（无情）监控和评判（如克林顿和来文斯基），所以他们较之一些明星艺人们更加不可能被人遗忘。

天地无用UID: 112318

okok,是我晕了,scrutiny看security

tomatoeggsUID: 82073

最初由 天地无用 发表
[B]okok,是我晕了,scrutiny看security [/B]

呵呵，下次别再那么乌龙了！