进军美利坚小组--轻舞作文贴

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还有几天就要再次出发征T，
在小组里记录自己在最后这段日子里的轨迹，
一切从写作开始，

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11.3 Test3 - Integrated Writing 3

The lecturer bolsters the idea stated in the passage that the giant-impact theory is not convincing. The following argument may aptly illustrate this point.
First of all, according to the lecture, the lecturer demonstrated that if there is a huge collision and giant-impact between space of Earth and Moon, there may be some huge mark on the surface of  the Earth. It is entirely possible that these mark will not disappear. Contrary to this hyposis, there are no mark being found.
Moreover, the lecturer support the argument stated in the reading passage. It is argued that if the Moon contains material that once made up the Earth, there may be water on the Moon when considering there are plenty water on the Earth. However, this is not the case. There is plenty of heat on the Moon. Considering  the high temprature on the Moon, water will be vaporated and could not exist on the Moon.
Finally, the lecturer validate the doubt stated in the reading passage. If the density of the Earth is much higher than of the Moon, the ratio of core to total mass of the Moon and of the Earth should be consistent, however the recent findings deny this hyposis.
To sum up, the giant-impact theory is questioned based on the above arguments.

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11.4
It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?3 X: ^5

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怎么是 bloster 呢？ The passage question the giant-impact theory, however the lecture shows agreement on this issue. 是不是把阅读看反了，听力中的点都到了

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我也是看了你的综合才发现自己看反了，reading criticizes the theory and lecture questions this citicizes,类似于双重否定取反.看了你的写作three points and evidences非常到位,肯定是good级别。

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11.4 独立作文


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Nowadays the explosive advancement of technology has knitted the world into such a seamless world that we are sourrounded by so many books and rich experience. In general, which source is more important depend on the specific circumstances.
On one hand, it is often held by people that all kinds of knowledge are contained in books. There are much comprehensive and well-established information in the books. Suppose we want to write an assay on modern politics, we have to look through many books for a good understanding of those abstract concepts in modern politics.  Thus gaining knowledge from books play a crucial role in our academic life. Knowledge gained from experience may no be used as widely as that from books.
On the other hand, if we want to learn how to swim, we must dive into the water and move our body to float above the water----that is we must learn the knowledge from experience.
Furthermore, as a rational man we human may gain knowledge from either sources or both of these two sources--books and experience. Considering the case in which we  write a paper on skills of swimming may aptly illustrate this point, we initially google "skills of swimming" on the internet and get millions of pieces of experience and information. After selecting and collecting useful information, we can further our understanding of swimming from professional books.
To sum up, wisely use of these sources under different circumstances and during different stages will lead us to a better understanding of knowledge.

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Nowadays the explosive advancement of technology has knitted the world into such a seamless world that we are sourrounded （surrounded）by so many books and rich experience. In general, which source is more important depend (depending)on the specific circumstances., l' D7 q$ I# H4 g3 i' S5 j- I( I+ l% ^
On one hand, it is often held by people that all kinds of knowledge are(is) contained in books. There are much comprehensive and well-established information in the books. Suppose we want to write an assay(essay) on modern politics, we have to look(go) through many books for a good understanding of those abstract concepts in modern politics.  Thus gaining knowledge from books play a crucial role in our academic life. Knowledge gained from experience may no(not) be used as widely as that from books. 论证比较空洞，例子不太好，没有起到作用，关于最后一句话 ，为什么没有书本广泛，你可以论证，然后例子证明
On the other hand, if we want to learn how to swim, we must dive into the water and move our body to float above the water----that is we must learn the knowledge from experience. 这段独立成段么，太单薄了
Furthermore, as a rational man we human may gain knowledge from either sources or both of these two sources--books and experience. 分论点不好，论证就乱了Considering the case in which we  write a paper on skills of swimming may aptly illustrate this point, we initially google "skills of swimming" on the internet and get millions of pieces of experience and information. After selecting and collecting useful information, we can further our understanding of swimming from professional books.
To sum up, wisely use of these sources under different circumstances and during different stages will lead us to a better understanding of knowledge
首先 中立态度的文章要把握到位，论证一定要充分,你时间紧字数有限的话，单就一点来写，这样观点鲜明，字数也上去了。分论点提的不好，个别语句表达不清楚，很乱的感觉。把文章结构理清，再在词语上多下功夫，加油

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canlanxingkong点评的非常到位，well-developed=论证充分=抓住一点举例论证
辛苦了，:lol

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11.5综合写作
120-test4

Test4 - Integrated Writing 4

The lecturer totally refutes the viewpoint stated in the passage. It is said in the lecture that the view Tunguska explosion was the result of a swamp gas was not convincing. The following conflicts with the reading passage may aptly illutrate this point.
First of all, that there was no traces left at the impact site does not necessarily indicates that no asteroid exploded above Tunguska.. Considering that scientists examed the impact site 90 years later during which the traces that explosion of asteroid left might have been destroyed by the force of nature. Before fragments were destroyed in Canada, scientists had examed the fragments immediate after the explosion.

Moreover, the lecturer refutes the judgement that if a large asteroid had slammed into Earth there must be a huge crater left. She raised the issue that there was the possibility that the slam took place in the low sky because of the huge air pressue.If so, there would not be any huge crater on the land.

Finally, the lecturer raises the issue if it was a huge cloud of mixed methane and air---that was a huge gasball that caused the explosion and left a huge crater, there might be many gasballs but not only one above the swampland. As a consequence, there must be many craters or other traces on the land. However this was not the case, therefore it is very likely that it is meteords that caused the explosion.

To sum up, the lecturer holds totally different viewpoints toward the Tunguska explosion.

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11.6 独立
How do movies or television influence people's behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer

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During the past one hundred years or so, exlosive advancement of technology has knitted the world into such a seamless web of mass media and information that people are increasingly being influenced by movies and television programmes. Generally speaking they play a crucial role in our daily life as a source of experience, entertainment, and relaxation to our understanding of the truth, of the happiness, or the nature of the society.

Creating topics of hot discussion among audience may be the major means that movies and televion influence the public's behavior. Through hot discussion, people's aesthetic values and values toward the world may be greatly influenced and shift into a new mode of behavior.Take Ugly Betty, the hottest TV programme in North America for example. This programme featured a common girl who competes jobs with many well-looking ladies and gentlement has spurred a hot disscusion among pulbic concerning what is beauty and what is ugliness. Invoved in this disscusion, people who have a common figure may become confidant in their looking and will be more optimistic about current life than before they watch this programme. People who has lose confidance of their looking may gain their self-confidance again just because of the trend of ugly being the beauty.

Improving people’s moods may be another means that movies and television influence the public. When I am in bad moods, watching funny movies and TV programmes, like Cat and Mouse is my common relaxation. Indulged in the funny plots really raise me up which regain the good moods toward daily life. When my girlfriend is not happy, love story is her priority. I often accompany her to cinema to watch Titantic or other love movies.

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11.4

Nowadays the explosive advancement of technology has knitted the world into such a seamless world that we are sourrounded by so many books and rich experience.（good） In general, which source is more important depend（s） on the specific circumstances.On one hand, it is often held by people that all kinds of knowledge are contained in books. There are much comprehensive and well-established information in the books. Suppose we want to write an assay（测验？） on modern politics , we have to look through many books for a good understanding of those abstract concepts in modern politics.  Thus gaining knowledge from books play a crucial role in our academic life. Knowledge gained from experience may no（t） be used as widely as that from books. # g; x3 s( F. E. \/ k+ qOn the other hand, if we want to learn how to swim, we must dive into the water and move our body to float above the water----that is we must learn the knowledge from experience.Furthermore, as a rational man we human (我们人类作文一个理性的人？)may gain knowledge from either sources (each source) or both of these two sources--books and experience. Considering the case in which (可以用一个同位语结构，that is) we  write a paper on skills of swimming (write the skills of swimming down on a paper )  may aptly illustrate this point, we initially google "skills of swimming" on the internet （只要写Internet）and get millions of pieces of experience and information. After selecting and collecting useful information, we can further our understanding of swimming from professional books. $ F  `) ~& B) }To sum up, wisely（修饰名词吧） use of these sources under different circumstances and during（OR at） different stages will lead us (in)to a better understanding of knowledge.

语言表达不错，句式用的也不错，结构也好，就是例子简单了

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呵呵，的确例子想来想去总感觉不能把G时的那些例子用上，就选了些简单的

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Test4 - Integrated Writing 4
The lecturer totally refutes the viewpoint stated in the passage. It is said in the lecture that the view Tunguska explosion was the result of a swamp gas was not convincing. The following conflicts with the reading passage may aptly illutrate this point.

First of all, that(去掉） there was no traces left at the impact site does not necessarily indicates（indicate) that no asteroid exploded above Tunguska.. Considering that scientists examed the impact site 90 years later during which the traces that explosion of asteroid left might have been destroyed by the force of nature. Before fragments were destroyed in Canada, scientists had examed the fragments immediate after the explosion.

Moreover, the lecturer refutes the judgement that if a large asteroid had slammed into Earth there must be a huge crater left. She raised the issue that there was the possibility that the slam took place in the low sky because of the huge air pressue.If so, there would not be any huge crater on the land.

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Finally, the lecturer raises the issue if it was a huge cloud of mixed methane and air---that was a huge gasball that caused the explosion and left a huge crater, there might be many gasballs but not only one above the swampland. As a consequence, there must be many craters or other traces on the land. However this was not the case, （and)therefore it is very likely that it is meteords that caused the explosion.% d$ @3 M6 r
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To sum up, the lecturer holds totally different viewpoints toward the Tunguska explosion.

后两点我没有怎么听明白所以不好评价，但是觉得句式很复杂，感觉有点乱