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发表于 2009-11-5 13:45:53 |显示全部楼层
11月5日作文 by ice--breaker
11.5 Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay.


Everything existing in the world has its own reasonThe eduction institute which have developed for a long time absolutely has its superiority to human beingThe teacher as the most crucial of the instituteobviously take an essential part to human beingIt is true that people can learn all by themselves but the teacher curtail the learning time as well as make the process more interesting and esaySo I support the viewpoint that it is always better to have a teacher.Details are as follows.

First and foremost,the teacher can make your learning easier than learn all by yourself .Facing with the unfamiliar knowledge ,the ordinary people are always confused and do not know how to start learning.The teachers can give you a direction and provide you with all kinds of information related to the subject.In most of the case ,the teacher are so proficient in the field that they can explan the knowledge to you in a very patient way which can be understood by the students according to their own experience.Moreover ,the knowledge obtained from the teacher is more systematic and comprehensive.

On the other hands,there is much more fun to study with a teacher ,whereas learning by oneself is very boring and lonely.Meanwhile ,they can promote the enthusiasm
towards study.For one thing,the skillful teacher always add various curious story to their lecture or explain the theory in a very humorous way.The magic fafairy tale concerning the Beauty and Beat from my history teacher is one of my most impressive memory in my childhood.Till now I am still found of history very much.

Besides,teachers can act as a friend to you,not only can they teacher us the dull academic knowledge but also
tell us the important principle that may be beneficial in our whole life as well as encourage us when we confronted with some failure.Helen,the famous writer ,couldn’t achieve her success without her teacher ,the one who devoted all her life to Helen,the one who consoled and inspire her when Helen was run down by too much work.

Considering all the above factors into consideration,We can safely draw the conclusion that it is better to have a teacher.And as the Chinese old saying goes that the teacher is definitely the architect of the spirit of our human being .
as is tale,so is life

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发表于 2009-11-5 16:06:42 |显示全部楼层
1. 你可以把它放到word里面check一下拼写么?
2. 你可以复习一下基础语法么?
3. 叫Hellen的作家很多,应该写全名Hellen Keller。另:她老师的名字是Anne Sullivan

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发表于 2009-11-6 06:28:39 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 heqiang_1001 于 2009-11-6 06:41 编辑

Everything existing in the world has its own reason。The eduction institute ,which have developed for a long time ,absolutely has its superiority to human being。The teacher ,as the most crucial (差个名词,part?factor?)of the institute,obviously take an essential part to human being。It is true that people can learn all by themselves but the teacher curtail the learning time as well as make the process more interesting and esay。So I support the viewpoint that it is always better to have a teacher.Details are as follows.

First and foremost,the teacher can make your learn(make sb do sth) easier than learn all by yourself . Facing with the unfamiliar knowledge ,the (去掉)ordinary people are always confused and do not know how to start learning.The(去掉) teachers can give you a direction and provide you with all kinds of information related to the subject.In most of the case ,the teacher are so proficient in the field that they can explan(explain) the knowledge to you in a very patient way which can be understood by the students according to their own experience.Moreover ,the knowledge obtained from the teacher is more systematic and comprehensive.虽然没有例子,但这些论证都很到位,学习。

On the other hands,there is much more fun to study with a teacher ,whereas learning by oneself is very boring and lonely.Meanwhile ,they can promote the enthusiasm towards study.For one thing,the skillful teacher always add various curious story to their lecture or explain the theory in a very humorous way.The magic fafairy tale concerning the Beauty and Beat(Beast?) from my history teacher is one of my most impressive memory in my childhood.Till now I am still found of history very much.美女和野兽&历史 什么关系啊?这不沾边啊

Besides,teachers can act as a friend to you,not only can they teach us the dull academic knowledge but also tell us the important principle that may be beneficial in our whole life as well as encourage us when we confronted with some failures. Helen,the famous writer ,couldn’t achieve her success without her teacher ,the one who devoted all her life to Helen,the one who consoled and inspire her when Helen was run down by too much work.

Considering all the above factors into consideration,We can safely draw the conclusion that it is better to have a teacher.And as the Chinese old saying goes that the teacher is definitely the architect of the spirit of our human being .

整体还挺好的我觉得。第三段那个例子觉得不是很妥当。有一些小的语法和拼写错误。

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发表于 2009-11-6 21:06:03 |显示全部楼层
Everything existing in the world has its own reason。The eduction(education) institute ,which have(has) developed for a long time ,absolutely has its superiority to (是比什么优越的词组)human being。The teacher ,as the most crucial (part)of the institute,obviously takes an essential part to human being。It is true that people can learn all by themselves but the teacher who can curtail the learning time as well as make(making)  the process more interesting and esay。So I support
the viewpoint that it is always better to have a teacher.Details are as follows.

First and foremost,the teacher can make your learning easier than learning all by yourself .Facing with the unfamiliar knowledge ,the ordinary people are always confused and do not know how to start learning.The teachers can give you a direction and provide you with all kinds of information related to the subject.In most of the cases ,the teacher are so proficient in the field that they can explan the knowledge to you in a very patient way which can be understood by the students according to their own experiences.Moreover ,the knowledge obtained from the teacher is more systematic and comprehensive.很好这句

On the other hands,there is much more fun to study with a teacher ,whereas learning by oneself is very boring and lonely.Meanwhile ,they(已经没在一句了,不能指代 teacher) can promote the enthusiasm
towards study.For one thing,the skillful teacher always add variously curious story to their lecture or explain the theory in a very humorous way.The magic fafairy tale concerning the Beauty and Beat from my history teacher is one of my most impressive memory in my childhood.Till now I am still found (fond) of history very much.

Besides,teachers can act as a friend to you,not only can they teach us the dull academic knowledge but also tell us (not only ....but also 用的时候要对称哈, 你前面用的是not only can te they .....后面就该but also can they....) the important principle that may be beneficial in our whole life as well as encourage us when we confronted with some failures(这句 结构有点问题哈 调整下) . Helen,the famous writer ,couldn’t achieve her success without her teacher ,the one who devoted all her life to Helen,the one who consoled and inspire her when Helen was run down by too much work.


注意语法,拼写错误。结构不错哈,加油

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