1006G敛寒影的备考日记---为理想奋斗是件愉悦的事！

敛寒影UID：2613052

读了十篇别人的作文，我的读后感如下：
   

首先，作者的字数不够的一个直接原因是，论证部分没有展开的很充分，例如：第一篇的第二段中，关于第一个原因，指出儿童参与的可能还有其他的运动后，应

进一步指出，这些运动也可以致伤，这样就更透彻地点名了致伤是所有运动不可避免的，通过怎样的措施可以减少致伤，等等。正如第一次作业中学习的那样，论证

部分要合理地展开，通过这样进一步的深入，可以点到作者错误的具体的某一点上。第二篇的作者把存在的问题都点到了，可是字数还是不够，就是因为没有充分地

展开，错误之处会产生什么影响，错误的根源在哪里，这些错误与错误之间有没有什么必然的联系，等等，如果思考了这些问题，我们也就能更深入地认识题目中作

者思维的模式或是步骤，从而也可以更深入地认识问题。不过说起来容易，做起来就要慢慢体会了，我也是在写作中存在字数不够的问题，也是在慢慢体会怎样才能

充分地展开，说清楚问题的根源。
   

第二，关于分析性写作，我的理解是，在找错的过程中，要把目光放在逻辑思维上，即错误的根源，也就说这样的纠错更有说服力，而且能够指出错误之间的联系，

全文也就有系统性了。
   

第三，我觉得在分析的过程中，我们不仅仅要关注作者思维的不完整的方面，比如，继续从哪些方面思考，可以全面地解决问题，同时，我们还要关注题目中给出的

论证部分用的证据是否有效，或者说，这些证据是否是最好的，也就是说，是否还有其他更好的途径或是例证可以说明问题。我们可以跳出题目，从更高的地方来看

题目，有时，你批了半天的论据不是最好的论据，这样从另一个高度，就可以跳出思维的圈定范围，同时，拓展了思路。正如第三篇，题目中如果要证明S对抗头疼的

作用，应该列出怎样的证据，如果这样展开就充分了。
   

第四，关于开头部分，通过阅读ETS的范文和点评，我的体会是，首段在概括原文内容时要用自己的话，要清晰、简练，不一定要概括出全部的内容，或原文作者的

的逻辑关系，但一定要用简练的几个词指出你主要是针对什么进行批判，这里的什么可以指大方向或是根源，或是这种不合逻辑的理由所导致的错误。
   

读了这几篇作文，我觉得我们大多人的思维都差不多，找到的错误基本都是从这几方面，而语言也没有多么突出的，我现在的写作状态也是这样，但是怎样才能从众

多的作文中脱颖而出，ETS告诉我们关键还是看思维。所以，从哪个角度找错，怎样安排论证的过程，这些我也是在慢慢体会。

敛寒影UID：2613052

读了十篇别人的作文，我的读后感如下：
   
首先，作者的字数不够的一个直接原因是，论证部分没有展开的很充分，例如：第一篇的第二段中，关于第一个原因，指出儿童参与的可能还有其他的运动后，应进

一步指出，这些运动也可以致伤，这样就更透彻地点名了致伤是所有运动不可避免的，通过怎样的措施可以减少致伤，等等。正如第一次作业中学习的那样，论证部

分要合理地展开，通过这样进一步的深入，可以点到作者错误的具体的某一点上。第二篇的作者把存在的问题都点到了，可是字数还是不够，就是因为没有充分地展

开，错误之处会产生什么影响，错误的根源在哪里，这些错误与错误之间有没有什么必然的联系，等等，如果思考了这些问题，我们也就能更深入地认识题目中作者

思维的模式或是步骤，从而也可以更深入地认识问题。不过说起来容易，做起来就要慢慢体会了，我也是在写作中存在字数不够的问题，也是在慢慢体会怎样才能充

分地展开，说清楚问题的根源。
   

第二，关于分析性写作，我的理解是，在找错的过程中，要把目光放在逻辑思维上，即错误的根源，也就说这样的纠错更有说服力，而且能够指出错误之间的联系，

全文也就有系统性了。
   

第三，我觉得在分析的过程中，我们不仅仅要关注作者思维的不完整的方面，比如，继续从哪些方面思考，可以全面地解决问题，同时，我们还要关注题目中给出的

论证部分用的证据是否有效，或者说，这些证据是否是最好的，也就是说，是否还有其他更好的途径或是例证可以说明问题。我们可以跳出题目，从更高的地方来看

题目，有时，你批了半天的论据不是最好的论据，这样从另一个高度，就可以跳出思维的圈定范围，同时，拓展了思路。正如第三篇，题目中如果要证明S对抗头疼的

作用，应该列出怎样的证据，如果这样展开就充分了。
   

第四，关于开头部分，通过阅读ETS的范文和点评，我的体会是，首段在概括原文内容时要用自己的话，要清晰、简练，不一定要概括出全部的内容，或原文作者的

的逻辑关系，但一定要用简练的几个词指出你主要是针对什么进行批判，这里的什么可以指大方向或是根源，或是这种不合逻辑的理由所导致的错误。
   

读了这几篇作文，我觉得我们大多人的思维都差不多，找到的错误基本都是从这几方面，而语言也没有多么突出的，我现在的写作状态也是这样，但是怎样才能从众

多的作文中脱颖而出，ETS告诉我们关键还是看思维。所以，从哪个角度找错，怎样安排论证的过程，这些我也是在慢慢体会。

敛寒影UID：2613052

12.18
Comment:
The article begins with an example of a pest called mountain bark beetle destroyed pinewood, then the author analyze the causes for this disastrous outbreak. This example elicit the topic about warming climate change. The author explain the conception of Framework Convention on Climate Change, and indicate that anthropogenic activities influence the climate system, with the description of the phenomenon of the rising temperature in Arctic and melting sea-ice causing the rising of sea level. Following, the author turns to the example of mountain bark beetle in order to emphasize the human beings should start to behave in a different way. The author directly points out that the increasing carbon-dioxide emissions would means a 50% risk of a global temperature increase of 5℃. Furthermore, the author claimed  that we should adjust behavior to avert that threat. In the second part of this article the author analyze the reason of climate change, which  is neither a technological nor a economics problems but a policy problems. At last he give some suggestion on solving this problems such as strengthen international co-operation, come to international agreement, change economical mode.

Climate warming is a global problem, we all should pay close intention on the Copenhagen climate talks. We should raising our awareness on this topic and behave in a different way from now on like doing little things around us. It is a complex problem involving economy, political and technological aspects, and it is not enough only relying the policy of governments. In my opinion the non-government organization and the authority should work together fighting for protecting our unique earth, especially everyone play an important role in solving this crisis phase.

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Compared with other luxury items the art spending would hold their value in the longer term,because of this,the authorities figure that the biggest problem at the moment is not a lack of demand but a lack of good work to sell, and with the access of globalization the current downturn in the art market would bound to rise. It is the main idea of the first part. The second part is about prices of older works and the demand in contemporary art keep going up,part of the extra demand has come from a large increase in the number of museums.The masters of the art universe is the  wealthy people.At last the author depict the sale model convert to in the auction houses on consignment,and contrast the ownership structure of two auction house.

I am not familiar with the art field and I learn a lot after reading this article.I agree with the author that the demands in arts would not be reduce, contrarily, it should be increase with the trend more people becoming understanding and loving arts.As long as the economic crisis subside, the market in arts would bounce back soon. The pivotal problem is to create more outstanding works to attract buyers,as a result of searching way to increase the income of arts market. I am not quite comprehend with regard to the difference in ownership structure between the two auction houses and these contents need to dig deeper and understand slowly.

写作中能够用到的好的表达方式：
losing momentum 失去动力

At its peak in 2007 it was worth some $65 billion, reckons Clare McAndrew, founder of Arts Economics, a research firm—double the figure five years earlier. Since then it may have come down to $50 billion.

generates … far beyond …because it brings together…

became deeply …, especially…

The current downturn低迷时期 in the art market

been far more volatile不稳定的

What makes this slump different from the last, he says, is that there are still buyers in the market, whereas in the early 1990s, when interest rates were high, there was no demand even though many collectors wanted to sell.

bounce back很快恢复

In the longer run demand is bound to rise as wealth is spreading ever more widely across the globe.

By 2007 they were spread over 58 countries and their total number had tripled.
…keep going up as …, but few such … become … because …

Over the same period the number of wealthy private collectors has also increased many times over, and so has their diversity.

Many dealers now prefer to take art works on consignment以脱销方式, matching sellers to buyers for a commission rather than investing in stocks 有现货of art.

By comparison with…，…looks like….

One thing that differentiates … is …

敛寒影UID：2613052

12.20日comment:

The relationship between China and Amenrica is a hot topic lasting for a long time.The United States gradually feel the threat comes from China for its international status,as the increasingly growing comprehensive national power in China.China,as the largest creditor of United States,meant it could break the dollar,s reserve-currency status any time and would wreck their economy.Espacially,after the military parade in National Day,we shown a stronger country to the world.A lot of Chinese are surspicious of relationship between the two countries,but with the more common interests exist in dealing with the global issues such as the financial crisis,which would draw them closer together. The common interests in economic and security is increasing and our country is in a steadly growth,particularly, we hold a firm position all along on the issue of Taiwan,I think the future of relationship between them will be positive.Meanwhile,we should note the problems in the way of development,we still lags far behind in technology and innovation aspects,for instance,the infrastructure projects should be improved and the corruption should be put an end.Only make a clear understanding of our frailties,can we have a stable development.The most important is that the equals in co-operation is vital to solving the problems in the world,which is the view the author would like to emphasize.

好词好句：
determine ……, and that of the rest of …….
China that is growing richer and stronger while remaining tenaciously authoritarian
看修饰成分
With America’s economy in tatters and China’s still growing fast (albeit not as fast as before last year’s financial crisis), many politicians and intellectuals in both China and America feel that the balance of power is shifting more rapidly in China’s favour.
He and his Chinese counterpart Hu Jintao (pictured above) stress the need for co-operation and avoid playing up their simmering trade disputes, fearful of what failure to co-operate could mean.
in theory would allow it to wreck the American economy
These fears ignore the value-destroying (and, for China’s leaders, politically hugely embarrassing) effect that a sell-off of American debt would have on China’s dollar reserves.
Japan’s holdings were more than four times the size of China’s.描述倍数

see....as a cue to...
briefly slowed the rapid growth
Between the communist victory in 1949 and President Richard Nixon’s historic visit to China in 1972 there had been as little contact between the two countries as there is between America and North Korea today.
China’s military build-up in the past decade has been as spectacular as its economic growth, catalysed by the ever problematic issue of Taiwan, the biggest thorn in the Sino-American relationship.

敛寒影UID：2613052

12月22日Comment:
This article remarked on the debate of passage on health-care between the two parties,the Republicans and the Democrats.The Republicans,which is devote on making more general people enjoy the health-insurance right and encourage competition among private insurers, but with a tax on the rich and a expensive cost.On the other side,the Republicans with an insurance-policy surcharge.
The two bills are fund in very different ways,and it seems that the Democrats have the advantage over the Republicans.I noticed one point the two obviously opposite from commen situation that deep cuts to Medicare the health-insurance scheme for the elderly.Considering from the realism that the costly money saved should be used to solve more practical problems such as huge deficits urgently needs to tackle,but it is not humanism.Anyone wouldl get to old and the money been saved should not be substancialy on solving necessitous problems.So the two sides should get a reconciled bill in the final.
好词好句：
Amendment 改善
Whatsoever 无论什么
Strip of 剥夺
Be still a way off 有距离
Get into effect 生效
On the ground of 以。。。为理由
Insureance premium 保险费
By no means 决不
Stumbling block 障碍物，绊脚石
a “public option” of a government-backed insurance scheme that would compete with private insurers in order, supposedly, to keep costs down and guarantee access.
The Senate bill is "paid for", but only in the sense that it provides for large charges on the most expensive private insurance policies, and because it factors in deep cuts to Medicare the health-insurance scheme for the elderly.
As of today though, health-care reform, expensive and imperfect though it is, is looking a lot more likely.

敛寒影UID：2613052

12月21日Comment

The article talks around the topic that the recessions caused by economy crisis and the character of reversed world economy, which would not resemble the five years preceding the crisis. The article describes a theory that linked the economy to a piece of string stretched taut on a board,the more forcefully the string is pluched,the more sharply it snaps back.The lasting shortfall in demand will strain on the spending to curtail the use per unit of output, explain properly why the unemployment will remain high after the economy crisis be subdued.Besides the main idea of the article,the author also demonstrates that the right to be correct is not a flow but a stock,although I am not totoally understand the reason.
This theory is not the same as I considered that the market economy could adjust itself to get a balance ultimitly,with the trending of demands and spending corrolate with each other.However,the author regard that the ceiling on production would get lower and do not attain the point before the crisis.I still believe that the demand is corresponding with level of gaining and spending ability,with the recover of economy in the world,hoping we can have a glorious economy as crisis before.

敛寒影UID：2613052

12.23
最近过的真是混乱，白天当小编，晚上才能学习，真想早点结束这样的日子，专心学习！
今天看完了debate,没写comment，终于能有时间接上了单词的任务，难句还要抓紧继续跟进呀！
看了大家的日志，在期末考试中还能完成既定的计划，惭愧的我不好意思在这里多说些什么，嗨~我要加油了，向大家学习，充分地安排好时间！
明天继续fighting for!

敛寒影UID：2613052

12.23-24
comment


This debate is very wonderful.The proposed side remark on specialficially that senior executives pays are worth what they are paid.There are two resons,one is that CEOs pays has decreased while the salary of other well-paid groups is increasing,considering the three components:salary,bonous and stock-based pay,and the other reason is that they earn high pay through their control and contribution rather than performance.Contrary to public perception,Mr Kaplan critic the argue public doubted one by one.After reading this part,I am firmly convinced that the CEOs are paid what they are worth,relavating to the performance,capability and responsibility.Ms Minow directly figure out unkown measures on forcing market with two representative example,and she argues that because of the phenominon exists,CEOs are overpaid.The two suitable cases Ms Minow refute the defending side is not strong,for they are considered typical in several efficient field not all of them.Compared with Mr Kaplan, Ms Minow did not prove his position further more.



In my appinion,I think the position of senior executives deserve more responsibility and working pressure,the ability they need to afford the position decides they earn high pay what they worth.



好的表达方式
Bosses who were once paid ten times as much as shopfloor workers are now sometimes paid as much as 300 times as much.倍数的表达
。。。 multiples of 几倍
But thereafter, starting in Americaand slowly spreading to the rest of the world, the multiples increasedexponentially.
The debate about executive pay, though never cool,is particularly hot at the moment.
。。。indeed,particularly in relation to...,such as....
focuse heavily on.......；concentrate so heavily on....
集中于。。。
bail out 帮助。。。摆脱困境
raise question galore 提出了丰富的问题
thrash out 力求解决
I argue below that thecritics are wrong and that there are many misperceptions of CEO pay.
contrary to public perception
Similarly, the view that CEOs are not paid forperformance is wrong. In fact, the opposite is true and boardsincreasingly fire them for poor performance.
appear to haveincreased the market value 提高市场份额
have not done betterand, by some measures, have done worse.
Those who argue CEOs areoverpaid have to explain how CEOs can be overpaid and not subject tomarket forces, when the other groups are paid at least as well and aresubject to market forces.这句话是很有针对性的批判
are all but guaranteed to continue to create....
It inevitably led to failures like......
severely demaged the credibility of ..... as a whole
do not come close to.....,which will increase
Instead of telling。。。，。。。signed off on.。。。，making it clear to everyone that。。。
Ifthis is pay for performance, what exactly is the performance we arepaying for?很有力的反击

demotivate 使士气低落
sanguine 乐观的
exponentially 指数地
mediocre 平庸的
tenure 职位的保有权
lack lustre tenure 低迷的任期
credit crunch 信贷紧缩
been exacerbated by 被恶化，被激怒
avalanche 纷至沓来
compensation committee 薪酬委员会

敛寒影UID：2613052

COMMENT:

To begin with,I will clear up the idears of the two sides on the debate.The proposer,s rubuttal remarks on defending primarily,and then figure out the unreasonable points in the opposition,s arguments.First of all,he concludes the claims Ms Minow holds and reiterates the point that the income of CEOs are decreased and actually related with companies, performance.The fact is that the lion,s share CEOs received of their pay in stock which has been kept as shares in companies proportional matches the wealth they lose in the finacial crisis.Secondly,he demonstrates that his argument is authoritative and credible which is oposite of Ms Minow,s position.Then he points out several limitation in her arguments and indicates the real causes of finacial crisis.

Consistent with Mr Kaplan,s debate,Ms Minow rebut specificially.Her arguments also devided into two parts.She emphasized again that the subsides of government bouncing back the companies illuminates again that the incomes of CEOs is not related with their performance.The reason is that government could not prevent the behavior of shareing bonous and the companies make excuse of it such as keeping the emplyees from leaving.Meanwhile,the funds of Treasury Department has no detailed control on executive compensation obligations.This is an other opportunity for companies to take the agency costs as bonous which has been called risk management.In a wold,the theoretical pay is further from the realised pay.According to Mr Kaplan,s debate, Ms Minow also figures out some defect in his argument.One is the invalid talking point about the net worth,the other is that the high pay with the relavant of CEOs is obscure that they are not set by boards as CEOs.At last she point out seven deadly sins found in executive compensation plans.

Take no consideration of the real truth about the debate,only focusing on the rebuttal remarks of the two sides,it is more intense and hard to decide who win.Compared with their debate before, Mr Kaplan incread the part of disputoin,and thanks to this,we have seen a more exciting debate on the opposition,s arguments that Ms Minow holds.It seems that Ms Minow,s rebuttle remarks is more clear and targeted to some extent in this term.Whatever we really want is a fair and equitable economic market not the same as Ms Minow depicts.

好词好句：

Mr Kaplan argues that the most powerful criticism of executive pay-that bosses get upside and no downside-is simply false.

there are plenty of devices such as golden parachutes that cannot possibly be justified by performance.

He suggests that extreme pay differentials can damage companies by attracting the wrong sort of bosses and demotivating the rank and file.

We need to focus more on the overall picture, around the world as well as in the United States, rather than on a few attention-grabbing anecdotes.

Ironically, neither do her two anecdotes.

These CEOs' financial reversals were part of a robust system of pay-for-performance widely used by most U.S. companies.

lost a large fraction of their wealth and, in many cases, their jobs.

It is irresponsible to claim that CEOs do not bear any downside risk.

all without having any detailedinformation about the scope of AIG's very substantial, and verycontroversial, executive compensation obligations.

confirms Yermack's analysis and also clearly refutes Ms Minow's conclusion.

First, we disagree on the calculations thatsupport the conclusion that CEO play has been declining. Our figures,based not on theoretical pay but on realised pay, are as follows.

Been propped by 一直支撑

Reiterate the point 反复地强调观点

Plenty of devices很多策略

Attention-grabbing anecdote引人注目的轶事

Take account of考虑

The lion,s share最大份额

In direct contradiction to与。。。相反

Have been much better off已经好得多

Diamentrically opposed to直接地反对。。。

Consistent with this与之相一致的。。

Bounce back卷土重来

Inspector general监察长

Clamp down on施压于

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加油啊，正如你所说的，坚定地走下去哦(>^ω^<)喵

敛寒影UID：2613052

12.26
COMMENT
This passage is mainly about introducing several methods to improving the security of passwords.In order to protect our private information,the passwords should considering three factors, the length, complexity and randomness.I have never known how resourceful the intruders are,meanwhile,I have recognized some intereting way on how to set the encryption rigorously,such as using a mnemonic constructed from the first letters. Science and technology is a double-edged sword, they continue to bring us new problems, while creating solutions to them.

The important role this article plays is that it brings some reflection for us as we shoule considering using the high-technology appropriatly.Have you opened the busines of online bank?Are you give your moble phone number to the random agency undefendedly once they asked for?We should reconsider the way we behaved is safe or not.It is possible that the old way such as the passage mentioned like recording the passwors in notebook is a good way in some situation.Whatever, the passage surpports some useful way to creat an secure passwaod.

好词好句：
That takes a lot of patience and computing power, and tends to be the sort of thing only intelligence agencies indulge in.

Choose passwords that are strong enough to make cracking them too time consuming for thieves to bother.

keep abreast of保持与。。。并列
heaven forbid但愿不会如此
scraps of paper便签条
interspersed with 用。。。点缀着
as a matter of course自然，不用说，照例.

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敛寒影UID：2613052

12.27
Comment:

This article aims to tell us that in this contemporary world people searching for new novelty,the value of old-fashioned, cluttered and sentimental paintings are remain steadfastly or even more valuable.With the reflection of inflation,it is astute to collect anctic paintings that steadly quality exchanging more money in the future than before.Also a good opportunity for art dealer to earn more from the access selling the paintings twice from the first collector.The author applied the example of illustrious paintings as “Prince’s Dock, Hull” which John Atkinson Grimshaw painted, “The Old Dealer” which Spencelayh painted and “On the Cliffs” which Laura Knight painted bidding up as high as two or four times what the auction house had predicted.

This idea that the art spending would hold their value in the longer term appears in the passage we have read few days before.Like investing assets in the bussiness of real estate,paintings would be an luxurious item to keep the value in the inflation.In my oppinion,the reason is that the paintings bring us the aethetic enjoyment and raise the resonance of people on the issues.Besides,that record the history of an ancient year in the past and the feeling in the painting can not be repeat but taste after seeing it.The paintings brings more value of spritual that never be chaged in the long term,so the prices should be increased rather than degressive.

好词好句：

Its success lay in the high prices achieved for those that sold, half of which were bid up哄抬 beyond their high estimate.


His works are often dark social commentaries注释，解说词 featuring streets and portsides, full of ships’ rigging and lamplight that seems visually interchangeable with moonlight.



Behind them the sea, silvery, shimmering and full of light, has the same idyllic quality of water painted at the time by the Scottish Colourists.


if anything  如果没有什么区别的话

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