人生第一篇issue……101(苍天那。。。）

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      真的实在寻寻觅觅了很久以后的第一篇……虽然说看了很久的书但是总体还是感觉不明晰，觉得还是自己动手写才能有收获……各位狠拍，我一定会回改的，小女子谢谢各位了……






TOPIC: ISSUE101 - "Governments should provide funding for artists so that the arts can flourish and be available to all people."
WORDS: 460
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2009/11/15 TVXQ? 5:08:15

The speaker asserts that in order to flourish the arts therefore making it availableto all people, government should funding for artists, in which I find several flaws. I concede that governments' funding can help arts a lot; however, the feasibility and sufficiency are both remain questionable.

There's no doubt that governments' help is of great use, mainly for two reasons. Firstly, some certain governments have the great economic ability to help artists since they can manipulate great resources, such as revenue, investments and so on. They are more effectual than other organizations in helping artists when it comes to economy. Secondly, governments' influence is of great power since governments generally have great prestige among its citizens. Consider what would these citizen think if a government invested a lot in the development of arts by providing funding for certain great artists. They will follow the government and pay great attention to arts in their daily lives; therefore arts of the region can flourish to some extent.

On the other hand are my two mainly misgivings about the issue. What comes first is the feasibility. Although governments can distribute great resource and power, at the same time, however, problems waiting for solving is significant and numerous, too. How can a government invest great money to several individuals for them to improving arts, which can only help indicate their own thoughts, while turning blind eyes to those suffering people without foodstuff, clothing, and shelters? What's more, even solving the citizen's basic problems, new problems will always come out while the resource a government have is limited. After all, arts are not one of human's basic needs that deserve governments' great attention while there are son many serious problems remain.

The other misgiving is the sufficiency of the measure. As far as I know, art's popularity involves many factors other than funding, such as citizen's appreciation ability and artists' creativity and skills. Without the first one, arts cannot be prevailing
since people's interests are lacked. And without the later, arts cannot be flourishing since no excellent works that deserve flourishing, or works that cater people's need exist . Let's consider art works before Renaissance for example. These works, especially those conservative works about religion, which gain great funding and support from church, are ultimately forgotten because they fly in the face of the current trend of opening of the mind. Both the abilities of artist and public cannot be enhanced by funding, no matter where does the funding come from.

In sum, I agree with the speaker insofar as governments' funding is helpful in nourishing arts because of governments' related sufficency
of revenue and influence. However, the help is limited, since no government can input infinite money in developing
arts, and art's developments need several factors that have no relationship with money.

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The speaker asserts that in order to flourish-可以吗 the arts therefore making-这种语法行吗 it available to all people, government should funding
for-fund  artists, in which I find several flaws. I concede that governments' funding can help arts a lot; however, the feasibility and sufficiency are-去掉 both remain questionable.

There's nodoubt that governments' help is of great use, mainly for two reasons.Firstly, some certain governments have the great economic abilityto help artists since they can manipulate great resources, such asrevenue, investments and so on. They are more effectual than otherorganizations in helping artists when itcomes to economy. Secondly, governments' influence is of great powersince governments generally have great prestigeamong its citizens. Consider what would these citizen think if agovernment invested a lot in the development of arts by providing funding for certain great artists. They will follow the government and pay great attention to arts in their daily lives; therefore arts of the region can flourish to some extent.

Onthe other hand are能这么说吗 my two mainly misgivings about the issue. What comesfirst is the feasibility. Although governments can distribute greatresource and power, at the same time, however, problems waiting forsolving is significant and numerous, too.How can a government invest great money不一定great to several individuals for themto improving arts, which can only help indicate their own thoughts, while turning blind eyes to those suffering people without foodstuff, clothing, and shelters? What's more, even solving thecitizen's basic problems, new problems will always come out while theresource a government have is limited. After all, arts are not one ofhuman's basic needs that deserve governments' great attention while there are son many serious problems remain. 感觉比较偏激。有人吃不饱，政府就不能资助艺术？政府哪天才能保证所有人都吃饱呢。

The other misgiving is the sufficiency of the measure. As far as I know, art's popularity involves many factors other than funding, such as citizen's appreciation ability and artists' creativity and skills. Without the first one, arts cannot be prevailing since people's interests are lacked. And withoutthe later, arts cannot be flourishing since no excellent works thatdeserve flourishing, or works that cater people's need exist.Let's consider art works before Renaissance for example. These works,especially those conservative works about religion, which gain greatfunding and support from church, are ultimately forgotten because theyfly in the face of thecurrent trend of opening of the mind. 没有说服力，需实例。而且那时候也有好的作品的。如果认为很多不好就不资助，那怎么产生好的呢？繁荣和永久价值也不一样吧。Both the abilities of artist andpublic cannot be enhanced by funding, no matter where does the fundingcome from.

In sum, I agree with the speaker insofar as governments' funding is helpful in nourishing arts because of governments' related sufficency of revenue and influence. However, the help is limited, since no government can input infinite money in developing arts, and art's developments need several factors that have no relationship with money.太绝对了。至少没说服我。

觉得文章写得有点像argument，给我的感觉是你在针对题目一点一点批。不过段落写得挺清楚。有的 词，句子结构 不常见，不知道对不对。
你是45min写的。