03 的作文

happyfaith2008UID: 2709856

11月28日
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In the reading passage we find that many employees want to work four days per week with less pay. While, in the lecture we know some opposite information.

At first we can know from the reading part that changing the five-day week into the four-day week would create more profits for company since the employees can have enough time to complish their work with fewer costly errors. And at the same time, companies only need to pay the employees eighty percent of the nomal rate. Secondly, the shorten workweek would allow companies to hire more staff which can reduce the unemployment rates. Thirdly, employees could have more free time to relax themselves which can improve the quality of their lives.

In the lecture we can get some different information. First of all, companies would spend more money if they accept employees to work a four-day week. The professor says companies need hire new workers and provide extra training, office space and computers for them. In addition, workers need to do the same mount of work as five-day week since the cost of the company would incresae. Finally if employees have a four-day work they will decrease their job ability and may lose their jobs when the economic down.

happyfaith2008UID: 2709856

TPO 1W 独立写作

The universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should reveive equal financial support.

There is no doubt that the main responsibily of a university or college is to improve the stduents’ academic ability. However, increasing number of people think the universities and colleges should concentrate on sports and social activities. Some even hold the opinion that those activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should be reveive aqual financial support. Personal speaking, I totally disagree with the saying. In the following passages, I will give specific reasons to demonstrate my point of view.

First of all, the univeresity is a good place for students to enlarge their knowledge instead of joining sports and social activeties. Needless to say, universities have put mountains of money to purchase the equipment for students’ study, such as the teaching buildings, the libraries and the laboratories.
Students can make full use of these facilities to enrich their professional knowledge. Otherwise the duty of the teachers in university is to help students and students can get the aid from their teachers whenever they meet some difficulties. If students always take part in sports and social activities it will make a waste of such a good study condition. So classes and libraries are much more important than sports and social activities.

Secondly, college life is so short and studnts can only have limited time to utilize the classes and libraries, however, students can do sports and social activities after graduation. We all know that college life is just one short period of one’s life, which is only about four years. If we don’t put our hearts on study and waste such period of time, it will be hard for us to get such a good study environment again. Otherwise, if we don’t pay attention to sports and social activities in universities we can do these after graduation. For example, we can do some exercise in the park or gymnasium in the morning and we can also attend some parties or bars in the evening.

Finally, universities don’t aways have much money to give sports and social activities equal to classes and libraries. There are always many probelms in a university. We can often hear students complain of the poor living envirenment in school dormitory, the terrible unsavory food in school canteen, and the crowded library. Universities also need variety of money to sovle these prolems. It’s impossible for universities to give sports and social activities much financial support.

Taking all the fctors into account, we can safely arrive the conclusion that sports and social activities are not as important as classes and libraries and should not receive equal financial support.

happyfaith2008UID: 2709856

补上28号没交的独立写作作文。走过路过的大哥大姐，有时间可以给提点建议哦！


11.28 Do you agree or disagree: people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place.


Nowadays more and more people like to travel to diffrent places. Some of them like to live in different places for several years or even move to another place. However, some people still like to live in their hometown for their whole lives. Should people live in one place all life or move to another place?Maybe we can get different answers. Personally speaking, I consider that people should move to another place. In the following passages, I will give specific reasons to explain my point of view.

First of all, if we move to another place, we would have an opportunity to select the best place we like to live. For example, when tourers meet the place the like best they can move there. They don’t need to waste time and money on the transport. When businessman find a good place to develop their career they can directly move there with their families. And they don’t need to travel back and forth. When students get the oppertunities to enter their ideal universities they can go to live there no matter the univercities are in their cities. The list can till go on. With so many benefits we can not doubt that we should move to another place to get the best place for us.

Secondly, moving to another place can help us know more about the world. We have known that diffrent places have different culture. When we move to anew place we can experience the interesting custom there. For instance, if we live abroad, we can deeply understand the living habit and belief of the residents there. Thus we may have less racism. On the other hand, we can not deny that there are many undeveloped countries and regions where people are suffering the starving or diseases. Everybody has the responsibility to help the people there get rid of their poor situation. We can do some donations. We can also move there to do some help, which can let them feel the care from the rich. In so doing, we may appreciate more about our lives.

Taking all the factors into account, we can safely arrrive the conclusion that people should move to another place, which we can choose the best place for us to live and at the same time we can comprehend more about the world and contribute to build a better world. It not only benefits individuals, but also the whole world.

yuminjiaUID: 2659628

Nowadays more and more people like to travel to diffrent places. Some of them like to live in different places for several years （or even move to another place. 这个不是重复吗） However(这个里改成while 比较好， 因为some…,while others…..是一对),
other people still like to live in their hometown for their whole lives. Should people live in one place all life or move to another place? Maybe we can get different answers. Personally speaking, I consider that people should move to another place( choose the latter option这样就 不和前面重复了). In the following passages, I will give specific reasons to explain my point of view.3 A* i+ a; {/ U) d
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First of all, if we move to another place, we would have an opportunity to select the best place we like to live. For example, when tourists meet the place( the like best )they can move there. They don’t need to waste time and money on the transport. When businessman find a good place to develop their career they can (directly )move there with their families. without hesitation .(And 这2句之间不是并列关系吧 )in the sense that they don’t need to travel back and forth. When students get the opportunities to enter their ideal universities they can go to live there no matter the universities are in their cities. The list can till go on. With so many benefits we can not doubt ，（that删 ）we should move to another place to get the best place（ 什么叫得到更好的地方？？） for us.
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Secondly, moving to another place can help us know more about the world. We have known that different places have different（ 换成diverse, 避免重复） culture. When we move to a new place we can experience the interesting custom there. For instance, if we live aboard, we can deeply understand the living habit and belief of the residents there. Thus we may have less racism. On the other hand, we can not deny that there are many undeveloped countries and regions where people are suffering from the starving or diseases. Everybody has the responsibility to help the people there get rid of their poor situation. (We can do some donations.这句和主题关系不大，删掉) for this reason, We can (also ) move there to do some help, which can let them feel warmth from worldwide. Meanwhile, (In so doing, ) we may appreciate more about our lives from doing so.
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1 e3 Y) m3 T# U& a1 O# ZTaking all the factors into account, we can safely arrive the conclusion that people should move to another place, which we can choose the best place for us to live and at the same time we can comprehend more about the world and contribute to build a better world. It not only benefits individuals, but also the whole world.

有些词汇应该多变化下，否则就重复了。/不确定的词组最好不要写,否则NATIVE 一读就不顺~~~~~~~~~

soarer0474UID: 2665789

怎么不见你11.30的文章？

happyfaith2008UID: 2709856

11月30日的独立作文 走过路过的高手们帮忙看看给点建议哦！

Children should only play sports for fun, or play sports in competition or contests?孩子参加运动，是应该只参加游戏性质的运动还是应该也参加竞技性的运动.


We have known that people are more and more interested in doing sports. And chilren also like to play sports. Some people think that children should only paly sports for fun. However, some people consider that children also need play sports in competition. Personally speaking, I totally agree with the latter opinion. In the fellowing passages, I will use spesific resons to explain my point of view.

First of all, playing sports in comptition can let the chidren do better in the game. We can not deny that if chilren are in compition they will be expected to get good results by their friends. Friends will watch them play sports and cheer them. With the friends’ encouragement and expectation children will be braver and they may try their best to practice and show their best in the competition. I can still remember the exciting sports meeting hold in my high school. At that sports meeting my classmate David got the first place at the one hundred meter race. All of the classmates were impressed by his excellent performance. He told us that it was cheers from us that made him full of power and got the prize.

Secondly, to paly sports in competition can help children know how to work as a team. As the developing of the global world, individuals are no longer work along. People tend to coorporate with others. If chidren take part in some sports in contest, such as football, basketball, and baseball, they can definitely know the importance of team work. Take the basketball match as an example. We have known that Jordan Michael could not shoot a basket if his teammates don’t pass the ball to him. We can also say that Jordan is a good team memember and that made a great help to his success.


Finally, if children play sports in comprtition they will get much fun. Suppose a child has signed for the school sports meeting
as a high-jump player. He practices it everyday. Although he feels very tired after training, he can see himself getting better and better. At that big day, he will not ony fight for himself but also for his class and his classmates, teachers, and even his competitors will put their sight on him. He is definitely a hero when he tries his best to change himself to get the first place. However, if children only paly sports for fun, how could they experience the exciting moment and the happiness of being a player?

Taking all the factors into account, we can safely draw the conclusion that children should not only play sports for fun. Since they can gat the benefits of performing better on certain sports, knowing how to work as a team and obtaining much fun, we should encourage children play sports in competition.

happyfaith2008UID: 2709856

12月1日 独立作文

Some scientists are responsible for the negative impacts that made their discoveries. What do you think?

As the developing of the technology, the modern socienty has provided us variety of new products which have taken a lot of benefits for us. However, we can not deny ignore the negative impacts they have brought. It is true that these new inventions are based on the the discoveries of scientists. A great number of people voice that some scientists are responsible for the bad influence that made by their discoveries. While, others think it has nothing to do with those scientists. As far as I concern, I agree with the latter opinion.

First of all, needless to day, scientists’ job is just to explore the unknown areas and open a wider window for us to know the world and they are not responsible for the negative impacts. We have known that mountains of discoveries are reported by scientists every year, from the theory of evolution to the big bang. We have invented thousands of products by using those discoveries, including some products which have negative impacts. But if these products are not put in market by businessmen, we could not suffer these bad results. Take the opium as an example. Opium was first used as a kind of medicine when scientists discovered it. While bussimen plant it and sell them to individuals in a great amount which make people addict to it and even make them die. Scientists just expore it, however, business men put it into market.

Second, it is the consumers themselves opt to use these products which have negative impacts. We can totally stop using these products, but most people don’t want to give up the convenient that the products take. We can always hear the citizons complain about the air pollutioon in the big cities. But we can still see that growing number of the production of the cars which are definitely the main air polluter in cities. Why are so many cars manufactured? Because the consumer still want them even though they have seen the bad effects.

Finnaly, I believe government ahoul be reponsible for the negative impacts instead of some scientists. Government has duties to make sure the health develop of our cocienty. When some discover is found by a scientist, government should determine how to make use of it. When some negative impacts happen government has to make rational policy to reduce the bad influence and scientists are innocent.

So scientists have nothing to do with the negative impacts that made by their discoveries. And the businessmen, consumers and government should take the reaponsibilties.

hualazimiUID: 2707120

As the developing(建议该成development) of the technology, the modern socienty has provided us a variety of new products which have taken （brought）a lot of benefits for（to） us. However, we can not deny ignore the negative（这个是几重否定了？） impacts they have brought. It is true that these new inventions are based on the the discoveries of scientists. A great number of people voice that some scientists are responsible for the bad influence that（去掉that） made by their discoveries. While, others think it has nothing to do with those scientists. As far as I concern, I agree with the latter opinion.

First of all, needless to day（什么意思呢，我没太看懂耶，求教！）, scientists’ job is just to explore the unknown areas and open a wider window for us to know the world and they are not responsible for the negative impacts. We have known that mountains of discoveries（用的好） are reported by scientists every year, from the theory of evolution to the big bang. We have invented thousands of products by using those discoveries, including some products which have negative impacts. But if these products are not put into market by businessmen,拼写有误 we could not suffer these bad results. Take the opium as an example. Opium was first used as a kind of medicine when scientists discovered it. While bussimen plant it and sell them to individuals in a great amount which make people addict to it and even make them die. Scientists just expore 拼写有误it, however, business men put it into market.2 }; a0 _# e. t, D7 t  a1 t

Second, it is the consumers themselves opt to use these products which have negative impacts. We can totally stop using these products, but most people don’t want to give up the convenient that the products take（bring）. We can always hear the citizons complain about the air pollutioon in the big cities. But we can still see that growing number of the production of the cars which are definitely the main air polluter in cities. Why are so many cars manufactured? Because the consumer still want them even though they have seen the bad effects.

Finnaly, I believe government ahoul be reponsible for the negative impacts instead of some scientists. Government has duties to make sure the health development of our cocienty. When some discover is found by a scientist, government should determine how to make use of it. When some negative impacts happen government has to make rational policy to reduce the bad influence and scientists are innocent.（观点不错，应该可以再扩充一下）

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So scientists have nothing to do with the negative impacts that made by their discoveries. And the businessmen, consumers and government should take the reaponsibilties.

happyfaith2008UID: 2709856

12.2 It is more fun to see a movie in the cinema with other people than see a movie at home.

Since movie has been invented, an increasing number of people like to watch movies, fron the young child to the old man. Some people would opt to watch a movie in a cinema with advanced equipment. While, others tend to enjoy their movies at home. Personally speaking, I believe it is more fun to see a movie at home. In the following paragraphs I will give specific reasons to introduce my piont of view.

First of all, it is more convenient to watch a movie at home than in a cinema. Needless to say, if we are going to see a film in a cinema, we should search amount of information, such as the information about when will the film play, where the cinema located is, and how to book the ticket. Once we have got the ticket, we will begin to worry about the weather and traffic at that day. However, if we decide to enjoy the movie at home, we only need to sit in front of the DVD player. We can dress what we like, atching the film while eating food, and reteat the movie whenever we want. That’s really much more convenient.

Second, I can save much money if I watch a film at home istead of at a cinema. The comman price of a movie ticket in my city is about thirty yuan. If I want to watch some latest movies the price will be at least twice as it. I am a movie fun. I always watch movies about once a week. As a student I could not afford the tickets if I go to the cinema to watch tmovies. So I choose to rent a DVD or borrow one from my friend. That is definitely much cheaper than going to the cinema.

Third, it is not quite comfortable to watch a movie in a cinema. As we have known, the cinema is a public place. There will be various people watching the same movie with you at the one place. They have different habits and we can not aviod the conflicts between them. For exmple, a man maybe unhappy if there is another person near him eating food all the time when he is addicted to the movie. If, even worse, the two persons have a quarrel, the people nearby will totally be interrupted. On the other hand, when we are watching a movie the light is very dark and some accidents may happen. The old man may fall down and the child may ger lost in the dark. So you can hear children crying or people talking lound. As for me I would worried about my security of my belongings. Because one of my friends David once told me that he lost his bag when was in a cinema. With these factors, how can we watch a movie in a cinema comfortable?

In sum, we can safely draw the conclusion that it is more fun to see a movie at home. Since we can aviod the uncomfortable feelings, coupled with the benefits of convinience and money-saving, we have no doubt to believe that it is much more fun to watch a film at home and at leat I will go back to my dormitory today to enjoy my favorite movies.

happyfaith2008UID: 2709856

12月1日 综合写作 teamwork

In this set of materials we can know from the reading passages that the best way to complish a new project is to organize a group of team and in the lecture we can get opposite information.

In the reading part, we can know that we can get high efficiency and creative solutions since we have great resources and all the group memembers will take responsibility for the decision instead of the individuals. While, the professor says some group memembers did not contribute to the team, but they still enjoy the achievements made by other memembers. The award of a group would be given to the whole team, instead of the real contributers.

On the other hand the writer also says individuals will feel better when they follow the decision which is made by all the memembers and at the same time they have more opportunities to be shine in a group if their ideas are recognized as important. However, the professor tells us that a team will have a low efficiency if they always have meetings to reach an aggreement. And the words of the influencer of a group will determine which solution they should opt instead of all the memembers. If the solution is wrong, all the group memembers will be blamed.

shirley072UID: 2712200

Since movie has been invented, an increasing number of people like to watch movies, fron the young child to the old man. Some people would opt to watch a movie in a cinema with advanced equipment. While, others tend to enjoy their movies at home. Personally speaking, I believe it is more fun to see a movie at home. In the following paragraphs I will give specific reasons to introduce my piont of view.

First of all, it is more convenient to watch a movie at home than in a cinema. Needless to say, if we are going to see a film in a cinema, we should search (collect) amount of information, such as the information (重复) about when will the film play, where the cinema located（去掉）is, and how to book the ticket（such as后面最好是简单的名词吧，要不去掉such as，换一个说法）. Once we have got the ticket, we will begin to worry about the weather and traffic at that day. However, if we decide to enjoy the movie at home, we only need to sit in front of the DVD player. We can dress what（whatever）we like, atching the film while eating food, and reteat the movie whenever we want. That’s really much more convenient.

Second, I can save much money if I watch a film at home istead of at a cinema. The comman price of a movie ticket in my city is about thirty yuan. If I want to watch some latest movies the price will be at least twice as it. I am a movie fun. I always watch movies about（去掉）once a week. As a student I could not afford the tickets if I go to the cinema to watch tmovies. So I choose to rent a DVD or borrow one from my friend. That is definitely much cheaper than going to the cinema.

Third, it is not quite comfortable to watch a movie in a cinema. As we have known, the cinema is a public place. There will be various people watching the same movie with you at the one place. They have different habits and we can not aviod the conflicts between them（They may have some bad habits that we cannot tolerate,我是觉得不同的习惯不一定就是坏习惯，要不就直接说坏习惯好了）. For exmple, a man maybe unhappy if there is another person near him eating food all the time when he is addicted to the movie（把when he is…提前）. If, even worse, the two persons have a quarrel, the people nearby will totally be interrupted. On the other hand, when we are watching a movie the light is very dark and some accidents may happen. The old man may fall down and the child may ger lost in the dark. So you can hear children crying or people talking lound. As for me I would worried（worry） about my（the）security of my belongings. Because one of my friends David once told me that he lost his bag when was in a cinema. With these factors, how can we watch a movie in a cinema comfortable?

In sum, we can safely draw the conclusion that it is more fun to see a movie at home. Since we can aviod the uncomfortable feelings, coupled with the benefits of convinience and money-saving, we have no doubt to believe that it is much more fun to watch a film at home and at leat I will go back to my dormitory today to enjoy my favorite movies.

所有的拼写错误都没有改，太多了。。。楼主写得太飞扬啦哈哈
不过真的有很多短语用得非常不错，简单顺畅读着很舒服也
我觉得写得不错呵呵

名字是个词儿UID: 2707493

11月28日
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Atfirst we can know from［we notice in］ the reading part that changing the five-day week［schedual，下同］into the four-day week
would create more profits for company since theemployees can have enough time to complish their work with fewer costlyerrors. And at the same time, companies only need to pay the employeeseighty percent of the nomal rate. Secondly, the shorten workweek wouldallow companies to hire more staff which can reduce the unemploymentrates. Thirdly, employees could have more free time to relax themselveswhich can improve the quality of their lives.6 c# C* _! @& L

4 H1 u3 y4 B1 k% a0 HInthe lecture we can get[notice] some different information. First of all,companies would spend more money if they accept employees to work afour-day week. The professor says companies need hire new workers andprovide extra training, office space and computers for them. Inaddition, workers need to do the same mount of work as five-day weeksince the cost of the company would incresae. Finally if employees havea four-day work they will decrease their job ability and may lose theirjobs when the economic [加is] down.

我又去听了一下音频，要求是summarize the point made in the lecture，所以我觉得你用一整段去总结reading passage比较冒险。还是以lecture的内容为主线好一点吧。个人意见:)
03对语言的掌握不错，语法很强，长句也不失控，保持。

莘梓UID: 2732079

12月1日 综合写作 teamwork

In this set of materials we can know from the reading passages that the best way to complish a new project is to organize a group of team (貌似没有这种说法，要不就是group,要不就是team)and in the lecture we can get opposite information.

In the reading part, we can know that we can get high efficiency and creative solutions since we have great resources and all the group memembers will take responsibility for the decision instead of the individuals（意思不准确哈，应该说several individuals）. While, the professor says that(这种that不能省) some group memembers这个单词打的好有趣 did not contribute to the team, but they still enjoy the achievements made by other memembers. （这话说得挺好的）The award of a group would be given to the whole team, instead of the real contributers.（表达不准确哈，改为The real contributers cannot get what they deserve, for the team members will share the result averagely. 仅供参考哈）

On the other hand the writer also says that individuals will feel better when they follow the decision which is made by all the memembers and at the same time they have more opportunities to be(删) shine in a group if their ideas are recognized as important. However, the professor tells us that a team will have a（可数吗？） low efficiency if they always have meetings to reach an aggreement. And the words of the influencer of a group will determine which solution they should opt（这词我第一次看到呢，收藏了） instead of all the memembers（句式分析一下，这个短语的意思很不清楚，如果要表达这个意思，可以说成The influencers' words will determine which solution the team should opt, instead of all the members'.）. If the solution is wrong, all the group memembers will be blamed.  
总体写的不错，结构清晰，内容准确，问题就是语言不准，中国人完全能理解楼主的意思，但是一分析句子，或者你把它翻译成汉语的时候，问题就暴露了，楼主要注意这种问题，一旦解决文章必会上一档次的，加油加油，共同努力！！！

soarer0474UID: 2665789

11月30日的独立作文 走过路过的高手们帮忙看看给点建议哦！
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Children should only play sports for fun, or play sports in competition or contests?孩子参加运动，是应该只参加游戏性质的运动还是应该也参加竞技性的运动.: i3 \3 t1 l5 I( o0 e

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We have known that people are more and more interested in doing sports. And chilren also like to play sports. Some people think that children should only paly sports for fun. However, some people consider that children also need play sports in competition. Personally speaking, I totally agree with the latter opinion. In the fellowing passages, I will use spesific resons to explain my point of view.(太冗长了表达的，选个短一些的)
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First of all, playing sports in comptition can let the chidren do better in the game. We can not deny that if chilren are in compition they will be expected to get good results by their friends什么意思？. Friends will watch them play sports and cheer them up. With the friends’ encouragement and expectation children will be braver and they may try their best to practice and show their best in the competition. I can still remember the exciting sports meeting hold in my high school. At that sports meeting my classmate David got the first place at the one hundred meter race. All of the classmates were impressed by his excellent performance. He told us that it was cheers from us that made him full of power and got the prize.最好引申一下
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Secondly, to paly sports in competition can help children know how to work as a team member. As the developing of the global（去掉） world, individuals are no longer work along
（alone）. People tend to coorporate with others. If chidren take part in some sports in contest, such as football, basketball, and baseball, they can definitely know the importance of team work. Take the basketball match as an example. We have known that Jordan Michael could not shoot a basket if his teammates don’t pass the ball to him. We can also say that Jordan is a good team memember and that made a great help to his success. 1 w* B. ~: F  ]( {  r5 O! W% m

Finally, if children play sports in comprtition they will get much fun. Suppose a child has signed for the school sports meeting" [% L" p9 i6 o
as a high-jump player. He practices it everyday. Although he feels very tired after training, he can see himself getting better and better. At that big day, he will not ony fight for himself but also for his class and his classmates, teachers, and even his competitors will put their sight on him. He is definitely a hero when he tries his best to change himself to get the first place. However, if children only paly sports for fun, how could they experience the exciting moment and the happiness of being a player?. Z) @- @$ M& ]5 B5 n
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Taking all the factors into account, we can safely draw the conclusion that children should not only play sports for fun. Since they can gat the benefits of performing better on certain sports, knowing how to work as a team member and obtaining much fun, we should encourage children play sports in competition.

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较多的拼写错误， 自己在word里改一下吧
2.
语言不够简练，尤其第一段和最后一段
bu不好意思本来前两天改了的，存了word里忘记给你发上来了

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12月1日 综合写作 teamwork

In this set of materials we can know(常见是learn) from the reading passages that the best way to complish a new project is to organize a group of team and in the lecture we can get opposite information.

In the reading part, we can know that we can get high efficiency and creative solutions since(if) we have great resources and all the group memembers will take responsibility for the decision instead of the individuals. While, the professor says some group memembers did not contribute to the team, but they still(多余了吧)  enjoy the achievements made by other memembers. The award of a group would be given to the whole team, instead of the real contributers(孤闻寡陋地说这词没见过，sponsor ？又不太合意).

On the other hand the writer also（删） says individuals will feel better when they follow the decision which is made by all the memembers and at the same time they have more opportunities to be shine in a group if their ideas are recognized as important（are paid more attention to 仅供参考）. However, the professor tells us that a team will have a low efficiency if they always have meetings to reach an aggreement. And the words of the influencer of a group will determine which solution they should opt instead of all the memembers. If the solution is wrong, all the group memembers will be blamed（最后句英雄所见略同，臭美一下）.

总：文章还是很赞，要点覆盖全面。但是主干论点支撑还不清晰，读下来到处都是教授的观点，共勉。