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  With the development of economics, most people , not worrying if there would be enough food to eat as past , do improve the quality of life and enjoy the beatiful world. Many people go to cinema together to see a movie becase it is ,they think ,more fun to enjoy than at home alonely. As far as I concerned, I strongly agree with this activity. There are no less three reasons rendered as follow.
  The first and foremost reason why I agree the above statement is that
the appropriate atmospheren in cinema is good to enjoy the movie. The wide and high screen makes you see every action clearly. As the high quality of voice and peacful and dark surroudings , your hearts and emotion goes up and down along with sharp development of movie.If some cinemas has 3 dimension , you even cannot distinguish where you are ,  maybe in the movie.The experience of seeing a  movie in the cinema is really fantastic.
  Another equal aspect is that sometimes paying fees to entrance for the movie makes you totally enjoy the happiness and comfort the movie brings.Maybe that is a phsylogical funtion that you can enjoy much more to pay some money. Last month ,my parents and I went to the cinema for the movie 2012, which cause a great neverse to us. Moreover, we realized that we should cherich what we have now and take measures to protect our plannet. The feeling of comfort and something else we got from the movie really satisfied our family.
From these obvious aspects , there is a personal reason. When I was a little child , my parents and I lived in a city far fome now what we live which is not properous. We see a movie in the playgroud , where there is a big sceen and people sit around in outside.At that time , I enjoyed movie very much and dream of seeing a movie in the cinema ,which came  true untill our family moved to the newcity. Therefore ,I can get more fun than the ordinary ones.
To sum up, from what we have discussed , we may safely make a conclusion that seeing a movie in the cinema makes people more enjoyable that that at home. And also my dream has come true.

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With the increasing of our students ' ages year by year, more and more students has participated in housework of their own families.There is a  current idea that students who keep their rooms clean has more possibilities to be successful. As far as I am concerned , I strongly agree with the opinion. There are no less three reasons rendered as follow.
  The first and foremost reason why I agree with the above statement is that students who get used to keeping their rooms clean can make everything perfect and no mistakes.To keep room  in order and clean , that is to say , he or she has a strong willing to  solve every problem and question immediately in his or her study , which can not be delied to the next day. Doing housework everyday when he or she return home means  he or she also often concludes in this day what kownledge they have learned and which aspects they havenot acquire well and need to go on learning . They get used to concluding and meanwhile they are also good at making conlusions ,which has more possibilities to be successful.
  Another equally aspect is that students who get used to keeping their room clean must keep their external appearance good-looking ,which makes others want to make friends with them in firt sight. Everyone all has a beautiful-loving heart and also everyone want to make friends with good-looking ones. More chances will come to those students and they can contact with more different people , even getting help .
  From these obvious aspects , there is a personal reason that I love clean very much .Every time I return home , the first thing on my brain is to clean my room , and then I can enjoy the feeling of confortable and quiet at home. Imagining that your room is very dirty and something around you is out of order , it is unlikely that you have a good and relaxed emotion to study  or do other things. Therefore, a cleam atmosphere can give you a good feeling and active emotion to live in life.
  To sum up, from what have been discussed, we may safely to draw conclusions that those students who get used to making  their rooms clean  makes them several benefits,such as doing things perfectly and often conluding , more chances to make friends and having a active emotion to live. Therefor, those students have more chances to be successful.

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好长·~~~~~~~啊!

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With the increasing of our students ' ages year by year, more and more students hashave participated in housework of their own families.There is a  current idea that students who keep their rooms clean hashave more possibilities to be successful. As far as I am concerned , I strongly agree with the opinion. There are noat? less three reasons renderedto render as follow

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发表于 2009-12-4 10:31:57 |只看该作者
The first and foremost reason why I agree with the above statement is that students who get used to keeping their rooms clean can make everything perfect and no mistakes.主题句应简洁明了To keep room  in order and clean , that is to saythat is 就可以了 , he or she has a strong willing to  solve every problem and question immediately in his or her study , which can not be delied to the next day. Doing housework everyday when he or she return home means  he or she also often concludes in this day what kownledge they have learned and which这块有问题,但是不会改 aspects they havenot acquire well and need to go on learning . They get used to concluding and meanwhile they are also good at making conlusions ,which hashave more possibilities to be successful.$ X&?????

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发表于 2009-12-4 10:37:55 |只看该作者
Another equally aspect is that students who get used to keeping their room clean must keep their external appearance good-looking ,which makes others want to make friends with themthem指代不明,另外此句冗长且啰嗦 in firt sight. Everyone all用all后面has错,everyone后面能加all吗 has a beautiful-loving heart and also everyone此处everyone可省略 wantwants to make friends with good-looking ones. More chances will come to those students and they can contact with more different people , even getting help .9 o+

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From these obvious aspects , there is a personal reason that I love clean very much .Every time I return home , the first thing on my brain is to clean my room , and then I can enjoy the feeling of confortablefeeling of confortable 不好,用confortable 就可以了 and quiet at home. Imagining that your room is very dirty and something around you is out of order , it is unlikely that you have a good and relaxed emotion to study  or do other things. Therefore, a cleamclean? atmosphere can give you a good feeling and active emotion to live in life.

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发表于 2009-12-4 10:43:25 |只看该作者
To sum up, from what have been discussed, we may safely to draw conclusions that those students who get used to making  their rooms clean  makes them several benefits,such as doing things perfectly and often conluding不懂,啥意思 , more chances to make friends and having a active emotion to live整个such as 句子好像缺少连词and连接. Therefor, those students我个人觉得是不是应该在这个地方把什么情况给具体说出来 have more chances to be successful.

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发表于 2009-12-4 10:44:47 |只看该作者
私人理由,是不是在最无奈的情况下才要写的啊,写私人理由好像就让结论缺少力度了吧

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