12.3 独立作文 美利坚小组

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那些保持房间整洁有秩序地学生会更成功。
There is a widespread controversy concerning whether those who keep rooms tide and organized have more chance to be successful. Arguing for that people who care about neatness of rooms will not be more successful are some people who hold the opinions that it will waste much time. Contrary to the opinions of those people is my heartfelt agreement with this idea that people who keep room clean are likely to succeed for the following reasons.

First of all, people who keep their room at a clean situation will contribute to forming of their good habit. This is easy to understand. Those people are likely to care about details, which is essential to their future career development. If they keep their room tidy and organized, they may restrict themselves in many other ways, such as the attitude toward working and learning. As a result, they have less chance to make mistakes and more opportunities to succeed.

Furthermore, people who like to care about the appearance of rooms will get along well with other. Of course, no one like to get together with those whose room is in a mess. On the contrary, people who love to tidy their rooms will be likely to win respect from others surrounding. And they can development their friendship and might become friends and partner, which is conducive to their career development. As showed a recent research released by a university expert, people tend to stay with those who care about their images and appearance. Obviously, people who like cleanness will be more trusted and loved by others, which will contribute to their success.

Admittedly, it is comprehensive for some people to hold the opposite views. They suppose that people who do not like to arrange their room have more time to do other things like concentrating their energy on their studying. True as it seems, however, those people ignore one issue, that is, those will not develop good habits. And good habits are the key to success.

Obviously, all evidence support an unshakable conclusion that people who like to clean and organize their room are more likely to be success for they will care about their details and will get along with others.

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文章基本都是使用的复合句.这点值得我学习,但是不知道这样一来会不会给读者带来阅读的困难.我建议适当长短结合.也许这样一来更好.

那些保持房间整洁有秩序地学生会更成功。
There is a widespread controversy concerning whether those who keep rooms tide and organized have more chance to be successful. Arguing for that people who care about neatness of rooms will not be more successful are some people who hold the opinions that it will waste much time. Contrary to the opinions of those people is my heartfelt agreement with this idea that people who keep room clean are likely to succeed for the following reasons.

First of all, people who keep their room at a clean situation will contribute to forming of their good habit. This is easy to understand. Those people are likely to care about details, which is essential to their future career development. If they keep their room tidy and organized, they may restrict themselves in many other ways, such as the attitude toward working and learning. As a result, they have less chance to make mistakes and more opportunities to succeed.5 ^; r- T' r% O, |/ ]* P: [1 C

Furthermore, people who like to care about the appearance of rooms (这种说法第一次见到,从整个句子理解来看有点怪)will get along well with other. Of course, no one like (likes)to get together with those whose room is in a mess. On the contrary, people who love to tidy their rooms will be likely to win respect from others surrounding. And they can development their friendship and might become friends and partner,(前后单复数不一致) which is conducive to their career development. As showed a recent research released by a university expert, people tend to stay with those who care about their images and appearance. Obviously, people who like cleanness will be more trusted and loved by others, which will contribute to their success.: `: r% y0 Q1 P+ z

Admittedly, it is comprehensive for some people to hold the opposite views. They suppose that people who do not like to arrange their room have more time to do other things like concentrating their energy on their studying. True as it seems, however, those people ignore one issue, that is, those will not develop good habits. And good habits are the key to success.

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Obviously, all evidence support an unshakable conclusion that people who like to clean and organize their room are more likely to be success for they will care about their details and will get along with others.