ARGUMENT242=美丽G程=小组第五次作业by猫斯基

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In this editorial, the writer takes it for granted that all schools and colleges should adopt the honor codes, since it is well functioned in College G, at least according to the writer's description apparently. They seem to be quite logical, while more flaws can be dogged out after comprehensive analysis.
  Firstly, no evidence is presented that it is the honor codes that should be responsible for the decreased cheating reports. Since it is quite possible that while students are busy with their papers, there is less likelihood they can detect who is cheating or not compared with teachers's monitor. Maybe more students explores the advantage during such an scarce opportunity, through with, the real cheating students increased rather than declined. In addition, the winter provides no evidence to us students in G would like to report to the teacher even if they saw the cheating faculty, perhaps owing to their shyness or unwilling to communicate with teachers. Simultaneously, only one year's drop--the first year is not representative to all the years following. Even if five years later, the number fell dramatically as well, however, the writer did not show us how the numbers are like during the middle four years, it is possible that the average number is actually much larger than that when old mean is in function.
  Next, no evidence is presented that College G can be on behalf of all the universities or colleges, which means even if it is successful in College G, it is unwarranted that it can be available in all the other schools. Since the writer does not convince us that form students in College G to its teacher faculties and even its teaching equipments can be the representation of most universities and colleges, so hardly can we believe that it is reasonable for these institutions to adopt honor codes while abandon the old method.
  Thirdly, the survey conducted is quite dubious. Since the survey is organized by the G honor council, surely they want to get some information favorable to them, it is quite possible that they omitted some averse noise deliberately. Besides, people who respond to the survey may probably lack typicality. Furthermore, whether they are anonymous or they replied to the survey carefully are not given. Apart from the above, the phrase "a majority of students: is quite misleading, it is much likely the majority are just whose ones who are quite honest and would never cheat whether there is honor code or not. Last, only judging from the last sentence, we can not figure out that maybe even more students would not dare to cheat if old way is still undertaken. In sum, only putting forward a blurry survey, little information can we get that whether the honor code is really better than the old one.
  By and large, the overall argument presented to us is quite misleading. Since the writer is neither able to convince us that honor code does function better than old-fashioned system in College G, nor can he prove that G is representative of all the university and colleges or such honor code can operate perfectly in all the other schools, even the survey he provided is quite suspect, hardly can we suggest that institutions worrying their more and more cheating students can pull themselves from such a plight through this honor code.

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word在这。。。刚才忘了。。加上了

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呃呃呃，把题目加上。。算是水了一贴
TOPIC: ARGUMENT242 - The following appeared as an editorial in the student newspaper of Groveton College.

"To combat the recently reported dramatic rise in cheating among college and university students, these institutions should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's, which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. Groveton's honor code replaced an old-fashioned system in which students were closely monitored by teachers and an average of thirty cases of cheating per year were reported. The honor code has proven far more successful: in the first year it was in place, students reported twenty-one cases of cheating; five years later, this figure had dropped to fourteen. Moreover, in a recent survey conducted by the Groveton honor council, a majority of students said that they would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without."

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写得不是很有章法，遣词造句还需要提高。
下面这三个长句比较awkward。


Even if five years later, the number fell dramatically as well, however, the writer did not show us how the numbers are like during the middle four years, it is possible that the average number is actually much larger than that when old mean is in function.  

Since the writer does not convince us that form students in College G to its teacher faculties and even its teaching equipments can be the representation of most universities and colleges, so hardly can we believe that it is reasonable for these institutions to adopt honor codes while abandon the old method.

Since the writer is neither able to convince us that honor code does function better than old-fashioned system in College G, nor can he prove that G is representative of all the university and colleges or such honor code can operate perfectly in all the other schools, even the survey he provided is quite suspect, hardly can we suggest that institutions worrying their more and more cheating students can pull themselves from such a plight through this honor code.

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....明天我就重新写吧。。。。