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With the ever fast pace of modern society, each group of people are undergoing various pressures, ranging from pressures from family, work, and study. For students, their major pressure comes from school work. It is not rare to witness students in different grades burying their heads in piles of books and doing homework overnight. However, I cannot help pondering over one question: is it really necessary for students to do homework every day? Although some people may back up this assertion, I believe that the answer vary depends on the different stages the students are in.

  Concerning students in primary school, I firmly believe that compared with spending their time doing homework every day, they should allot most of their time in developing creativity, imagination as well as hobby. Age seven to thirteen is of great significance for the development of children. Parents, along with teachers, should provide students in this age stage with enough freedom and choice to develop their physical and mental ability. For example, parents should give their children enough time to communicate and interact with other children, from which children can develop their communicative ability. It is also a wise choice for parents and teachers to cultivate children’s hobbies, such as piano, swimming, logic thinking, and so on, all of which are beneficial for not only children’s physical but also mental capability. On the contrary, too much homework for children in this stage would probably frustrate children’s learning interest, making their feel weary of studying.

  However, for students in senior high school, it is a sensible for teachers to assign homework every day. Considering the situation in China, the main goal for students in senior high school is to study hard and prepare for the College Entrance Examination, through which they can grasp the chance for further college education. Homework is, therefore, beneficial in the multiply aspects. For example, homework can assist students to review their lessons and reassure the students whether or not they have already truly grasped the lessons. Meanwhile, by working on daily homework, students can also put what they have learned on class into practice. These benefits are all favorable for students whose aim is to further their study after graduation from senior high school.

  Comparatively, after entering university, the significance of daily homework declines again due to the change of students' major task in the university. As it is widely acknowledged, university students should learn to think critically in their academic field, enhance their problem-solving ability, and improve their communicative and practical ability, which are all essential capabilities in job-hunting after graduation. Therefore, most of students' time should be spent in doing researches, participating in seminars and discussion and so on. Students are expected to rely mostly on themselves to perfect their capabilities. Teacher are supposed to, instead of assigning homework every day, lead students to the threshold of knowledge and grant them every chance to explore the knowledge they truly like. Only in this way can college education cultivate more and more qualified students to serve for its society generation by generation.

  Hence, there is no point asserting hastily whether assigning homework daily is necessary or not. It all depends on which stage the students are in. Homework does benefit students when their aim is to further their education. Nevertheless, for students either in primary stage or in university, homework is of little significance. Consequently, teachers had better to have a second thought before assigning homework for their students.

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发表于 2009-12-22 15:36:46 |显示全部楼层
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With the ever fast pace of modern society, each group of people are undergoing various pressures, ranging from pressures from family, work and study. For students, their major pressure comes from school work. It is not rare to witness students in different grades burying their heads in piles of books and doing homework overnight. However, I cannot help pondering over one question: is it really necessary for students to do homework every day? Although some people may back up this assertion, I believe that the answer vary depends on the different stages the students are in.
  Concerning students in primary school, I firmly believe that compared with spending their time doing homework every day, they should allot most of their time in developing creativity, imagination as well as hobby. Age seven to thirteen is of great significance for the development of children. Parents, along with teachers, should provide students in this age stage with enough freedom and choice to develop their physical and mental ability. For example, parents should give their children enough time to communicate and interact with other children, from which children can develop their communicative ability. It is also a wise choice for parents and teachers to cultivate children’s hobbies, such as piano, swimming, logic thinking, and so on, all of which are beneficial for not only children’s physical but also mental capability. On the contrary, too much homework for children in this stage would probably frustrate children’s learning interest, making their feel weary of studying.
  However, for students in senior high school, it is a sensible for teachers to assign homework every day. Considering the situation in China, the main goal for students in senior high school is to study hard and prepare for the College Entrance Examination, (through which they can grasp the chance for further college education.删掉) Homework is, therefore, beneficial in the multiply aspects. For example, homework can assist students to review their lessons and reassure the students whether or not they have already truly grasped the lessons. Meanwhile, by working on daily homework, students can also put what they have learned on class into practice. These benefits are all favorable for students whose aim is to further their study after graduation from senior high school.
  Comparatively, after entering university, the significance of daily homework declines again due to the change of students' major task in the university. As it is widely acknowledged, university students should learn to think critically in their academic field, enhance their problem-solving ability, and improve their communicative and practical ability, which are all essential capabilities in job-hunting after graduation. Therefore, most of students' time should be spent on doing researches, participating in seminars and discussion and so on. Students are expected to rely mostly on themselves to perfect their capabilities. Teacher are supposed to, instead of assigning homework every day, lead students to the threshold of knowledge and grant them every chance to explore the knowledge they truly like. Only in this way can college education cultivate more and more qualified students to serve for its society generation by generation.
  Hence, there is no point asserting hastily whether assigning homework daily is necessary or not. It all depends on which stage the students are in. Homework does benefit students when its aim is to further their education. Nevertheless, for students either in primary stage or in university, homework is of little significance. Consequently, teachers had better to have a second thought before assigning homework to their students.


先膜拜下楼楼写了这么长的文章.整体读下来明显的语法用词错误没啥.
就分论点,我觉得写的有点散;每个论述段应该在开头直接挑明观点,然后加以例子论述,然后总结小分论点;这个应该是T作文的套路(先不说这个套路多么的恶心)
楼主的论点好象找起来比较困难,都夹在论述里面了.
写的过长, 我觉得主要是因为多了些和中心联系不太紧密,可有可无的废话.(我觉得楼楼之所以这么写可能想句式更加丰富点),这么写的话 我觉得更加容易分散掉你的论点中心了.


个人拙见,说的不对见谅:)

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发表于 2009-12-22 22:29:34 |显示全部楼层
佩服楼主可以在半个小时写这么多....
分阶段讨论很好,只是感觉实际例子运用不够;比如可以对比两个不同教育方式下成长的孩子,发展个性的和填鸭式;
也同意楼上的意见,各个段落稍显啰嗦
整体结构很好,句式,连接词比较丰富。向你学习

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