[ineffable] Argument20 -by xiaxiaobing

xiaxiaobing919UID: 2606450

The argument concludes that the Balmer Island Gazette council should limit the number of mopeds rented by the six companies during the summer session in order to decrease the mopeds involved accidents. This conclusion is based on the premises that the population of Balmer Island increases to 100,000, and the similar policy has been applied to Torseau Island, and such accidents have been decreased. However, the reasoning of argument is flawed, because it depends on several unsupported assumptions. The following paragraphs will explore those weaknesses in depth.

To start with, the author hasn't provided further information about the mopeds involved accident, we cannot evaluate whether the number of mopeds involved accident is directly related to the how many the mopeds have been rented. The accidents may cause by the poor traffic condition, which means the road is too narrow or too steep. Or the others who involved in the accidents should be responsible for the accidents, rather than the mopeds. In other words, it may caused by the undue high speed drive of the cars which induced the accidents. The argument has said nothing that would rule out any of these plausible alternatives.

In addition, the argument fails to establish a causal relationship between the application of this policy and the reduction of the moped accidents in Torseau. The author simply mentions the former and assumes a connection to the latter. But the reduction of the accidents could be caused by the improvement of the traffic condition, the general reconstruct of the whole island, the promotion of the moped equipment, or a host of other factors. There is no reason to assume that the limitation of the rent of mopeds is the main explanation for the reduction of the mopeds accidents.

Finally, the author hasn't taken into consideration that the two islands may not be comparable in many aspects. Perhaps the main reason of the mopeds accidents of Torseau Island is that there are two many mopeds, so the limitation of the rent would be efficient to decrease the accidents, while the main explanation for the mopeds accidents may cause by other factors listed above. Simply mimic the policy in other island would not be sufficient to solve the problems in Balmer.

In conclusion, the argument that the limitation of mopeds rent should be applied in Balmer Island is weak. If the author of the argument could demonstrate that the high accident rate is directly related to the number of mopeds rented, that the policy of limitation is the reason for the reduction of the mopeds accidents in Torseau Islands, and that the two islands are comparable, the argument would be strengthened. Without that support, however, there is little reason to accept the conclusion.

karen_06UID: 2728072

The argument concludes that the Balmer Island Gazette council should limit the number of mopeds rented by the six companies during the summer session in order to decrease the mopeds involved accidents. This conclusion is based on the premises that the population of Balmer Island increases to 100,000, and the similar policy has been applied to Torseau Island, and such accidents have been decreased(感觉该句拆分一下更有条理和力度，即本建议的前提是…，论据是…。This conlusion is based on the premises that….. Evidence for such conclusion is the policy…..). However, the reasoning of argument is flawed, because it depends on several unsupported assumptions. The following paragraphs will explore those weaknesses in depth.

To start with, the author hasn't provided further information about the mopeds involved accident, (标点.)we cannot evaluate whether the number of mopeds involved accident is directly related to the how many （that of）the mopeds have been rented. The accidents may cause(be caused) by the poor traffic condition, which means the road is too narrow or too steep. Or the others who involved in the accidents should be responsible for the accidents, rather than the mopeds. In other words, it may (be) caused by the undue high speed drive of the cars which induced the accidents. The argument has said nothing that would rule out any of these plausible alternatives.

In addition, the argument fails to establish a causal relationship between the application of this policy and the reduction of the moped accidents in Torseau. The author simply mentions the former and assumes a connection to the latter. But the reduction of the accidents could be caused by the improvement of the traffic condition, the general reconstruct of the whole island, the promotion of the moped equipment, or a host of other factors. There is no reason to assume that the limitation of the rent of mopeds is the main explanation for the reduction of the mopeds accidents.

Finally, the author hasn't taken into consideration that the two islands may not be comparable in many aspects. Perhaps the main reason of the mopeds accidents of Torseau Island is that there are two many mopeds, so the limitation of the rent would be efficient to decrease the accidents, while the main explanation(换个词，避免和前文重复) for the mopeds accidents may cause（caused） by other factors listed above. Simply mimic the policy in other island would not be sufficient to solve the problems in Balmer.

In conclusion, the argument that the limitation of mopeds rent should be applied in Balmer Island is weak. If the author of the argument could demonstrate that the high accident rate is directly related to the number of mopeds rented, that the policy of limitation is the reason for the reduction of the mopeds accidents in Torseau Islands, and that the two islands are comparable, the argument would be strengthened. Without that support, however, there is little reason to accept the conclusion.

感觉总体不错，此外，我觉得还有错误可供参考：如作者只指出了夏季，没有考虑其他季节。