Arguement203=美丽G程小组=小组第十次作业 by Melody

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203.The following appeared in a newspaper feature story.

"At the small, nonprofit hospital in the town of Saluda, the average

length of a patient's stay is two days; at the large, for-profit hospital
in the nearby city of Megaville, the average patient stay is six days.
Also, the cure rate among patients in the Saluda hospital is about twice
that of the Megaville hospital. The Saluda hospital has more employees per
patient than the hospital in Megaville, and there are few complaints about
service at the local hospital. Such data indicate that treatment in
smaller, nonprofit hospitals is more economical and of better quality than
treatment in larger, for-profit hospitals."
谬误：前提：提高经济效益：乍看一下是，S非盈利，而M盈利，但是如果把治疗效果也考虑上的话可能情况就不一样了。没有具体的证据，单凭照顾病人的employee人数来判定医院服务的好坏也不科学。因为S是非盈利的，很多人愿意去治病，而医院又没有更多的钱来支付医生付出的更多精力，因此虽然有可能一个employee照顾很多人，但是平均分到每个病人身上的服务就很少，还不及M医院的照顾。而且，因为S是非盈利的医院，而M要收钱，人们通常对于不收钱的态度要宽厚一些，多一事不如少一事，而对于收钱的医院要求更为苛刻。

前提：服务质量。治疗质量的好坏无直接数据对比，无法得出。跟length of stay也没关系，不排除S没有把人治好就赶走病人的情况。而且治愈率也不能说明什么问题，
没有说明病人的情况，大病通常去大医院，而小病常去小医院，可能S里面的病人病情比M里面的要低，更容易治愈，所以治愈率要更高。
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Comparing the treatment in two hospitals, the author claims that the nonprofit one which is named Saluda(S) is more economical and of better quality than the profit one named Megaville(M). In order to make the argument more persuasive, the author has listed several evidences to support. It looks convincing on the surface, whereas, reveals numbers of logical fallacies in deep analysis as follows.

For one thing, the author’s assertion that treatment in S is more economical than the one in M is unwarranted. At first glance it seems rational as S is a nonprofit hospital but M is a profit one. However, cases vary after concerning about the therapeutic effects. The author has not offered detailed and exact data or evidence to support his opinion thus only basing on the number of the employees per patient to judge the hospital’s treatment effect is meaningless and unscientific. It is totally possible that because of the nonprofit treatment in S, more people prefer S than M as it costs less. Meanwhile, due to the nonprofit property, S is incapable of improving the salary of the employees which is conducive to the less care to each patient as their population becomes larger and larger. On the contrary, cases are different in M as profit would pay for the excessive demand of the labor. Moreover, people usually are more censorious about the more expensive service than the cheaper ones. Only providing more evidence and data can make us believe that S is more economical than M.

Furthermore, simply giving one or two dubious evidence is far less sufficient to prove that S is of better quality than M in that there is no authoritative data to check out. What the author listed about the length of the stay has nothing to do with the treatment quality. We could not exclude cases like the hospital drives away the patients before their recoveries because the shortage of the equipment for the over-saturation of them. Likewise, the cure rate of the hospital does not make any sense in judging its treatment quality. It is common sense that when counter into severe diseases, people often choose to get into the larger hospitals other than the smaller ones, even choose the latter, sooner or later would be transferred into the larger ones. It is very likely that the disease processes of the patients in M are far less severe than the ones in S thus they have more possibilities to be healed which ultimately leads to the higher cure rate in S than M. Without direct data and relative material, what the author claims is not founded at all.

In sum, for the sake of making the whole argument more trustworthy and scientific, more relative material is indispensable such as the background of the patients, costs of the same treatments in the two different hospital, and the equipment conditions. Only through a more scientific and systematic investigation, the compare of the two would be of some meaning and trustworthy.

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